Illiterate to Literate [closed - new instructors hired!]

[walk.]

I'll try that, thank you! Hmm, it might actually work that, It takes me ages to reply to semi lit rp's, but also apparently my actual test isn't very detailed, I can do the length, just not the quality, or according to Aya Shimeru, or some name like that, can't actually remember!

[rose;]

I'll try that, thank you! Hmm, it might actually work that, It takes me ages to reply to semi lit rp's, but also apparently my actual test isn't very detailed, I can do the length, just not the quality, or according to Aya Shimeru, or some name like that, can't actually remember!

Message me if you'd like to take the class for maintaing a role-play c;
I could also take a look at a few posts and tell you what you could do to make them better- it's not a strong point, but I'm not like, bad at it xP

[Alaric Dixon <3]

Username: Charlie. -Though I accept Char as well as Charloop :3
What You'd Like Help With: Oh goodness..everything really though I'll attempt to make a list of what I'm most looking for help with:

- Sentance Structure/Segways -Connecting thoughts and ideas- (Oh don't even get me started on this! I've noticed recently that all my senences are the same length, that I use comas was too often but frankly, I don't know any other way to write.)
-Illiterate to Semi-Literate+

Preferred Instructor: Honestly it really doesn't matter to me. Finding this thread gave me hope that I'd finally be able to change my wrighting style so all I'd really like to ask for is a member of this thread who would best be able to help me with most of (if not all) the issues above
Activity or Time Zone: Eastern Daylight Time? (I think? :$ I'm really bad with Timezones)
Sample of Writing: Here I'll provide two examples, one on my not so good days and the other on one of my (seldom) better days:

Dakotah

Dakotah had to quickly cover his mouth with the back of his hand to stop himself from bursting out laughing as he came down the deserted hallway. Seeing Addison's face pressed up against the glass -even if it was blood caked and filthly- manged to somewhat untangle the bundle of nerves in his stomach, and he had to force himself to re-arrange his features back into a scowl as the guard unlocked the door next to him. A moment later the old man had emerged from the cell, a ragged Addison in his grasp before locking the door behind him and shuffling away. If Dakotah wasn't mistaken, he thought he heard something about cat pee before the guard was gone and he was left stand alone with Addison.

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Scorchblaze remained standing there, silent and assertive, watching every move she made, every emotion that flittered across her troubled eyes. Try as she might, Scorchblaze knew her well enough by now to be able to detect the emotions she so desperately tried to steel behind a cool glare. He didn't know how long they just stood there, the two of them staring at each other. He thought for sure she could hear the pounding in his chest, the raw paralyzing shock that stopped him from moving any closer. Is she really here? Or am I just halucinating? His desire for her was so strong, he wouldn't put it past his body to conjure up image of her, and for what? To cruelly tempt him? But then he felt her claw, laid so carfully on his chest and as his gazed downwards at it, his eyes flicking just as quickly back up to her's as realization crashing down on him. She's really here, it's really her. Her words mirrored his thoughts and before he could collect his bearings, she smiled, and he felt like he'd been flung right off his paws. The chilling frost that had settled over his heart, that he hadn't even realized had been there intill that very moment thawed in that one smile, and the crackling ice that had shifted between them, silent but still there splintered and cracked, shattering all his doubts. "I never really left Shadowfang, my heart always rested with you..and I with it." He whispered and all of a sudden he felt it, pure joy sizzling through his veins. It was so strong that Scorchblaze couldn't help but succumb to it and soon he found himself chuckling and then, he was laughing, unable to stop the musical laughter erupting from is throat. He crossed the gap between them in an instant, lifting Shadowfang up off her paws and into his arms. He twirled her around and through the air, drunk on her sent and the feel of her fur against his. He never wanted to let go, just stay here like this with the two of them pressed so tighly against one another there was hardly any room to breath.

Preffered Instructor: Smamm for Vocab. I think she's the only one doing Vocab..? Not sure I'll give it another look, anyways just quoting again for the things I dont already have instructors for

[rose;]

Everyone who does not respond to their class, or send me a message by tomorrow will no longer be considered a student. Thank you.

[owlclaw]

Username: UndeadLaughter ((Hello! :3))
What You'd Like Help With: *sigh* Alright, let's see if I can list them all:
~ Coded posts; I tend to ask my friend to make these for me... I don't want to keep bothering her with constant pleas... And I wish to be original!
~ Plot Development; I have a really hard time coming up with good, long-lasting plots that really interest others.
~ Designing Role-plays; I am not that great with creating sweet layouts, I usually ask my friend for help.
~ Physical Descriptions; My descriptions are usually really basic and I feel like they are pathetic compared to some other members I role-play with.
~ Character Development; In the role-plays I have joined including dogs, I always use the same "He blinked," or "His nose twitched," I need a bit 'o help making the actions a bit more diverse.
~ More Literate posts; It seems my post are always ranging from 3-4 sentences unless I have a lot going on within them or I'm having a lucky day.
~ Making my post sentences flow; Sometimes my sentences aren't very good. The ideas don't seem to flow and it sounds choppy at times. And I use way too many commas!
Preferred Instructor: I don't really have a preferred instructor(s)... so I'll just list a few with the skills I need :3
zippyzoo77 - making and designing role-plays
ℑʜᴇ ℬᴜʀɴɪɴɢ ℛᴏsᴇ - making literate posts and plot development
smamm - better vocabulary
cιтy gιrl. - role-play with animals better (mostly dogs and wolves) and developing my own form
Activity or Time Zone: Eastern Standard Time
Sample of Writing:
This is my role-playing on a good day ((It's also like my fourth post in that RP so I was still posting a bit large))

Charlie
Charlie kept a calm expression, listening to the young dog's words. He din't care much for the threat. Most young brutes were all bark, no bite these days... The leonberger's ears perked and he twitched his nose. "Do not threaten me in my own territory," He stated with a calm tone. His dark eyes bore into Crowan's. Charlie was aware of the fact that this younger dog had much more muscle than he and could take him down with some ease. The older dog nodded to Dede. "Then be on your way." His words held no venom like most brute's voices would. The large dog swept his tail back and forth once. "If you are in search of food there is a resturaunt down the street on the corner. They sometimes throw out scraps for us.You and your brother are more than welcome to join us." Charlie sniffed. "And no, the three of us are not blood-related." He added, lifting one paw which meant it was saf for Spaceghost and Rogue to start moving again.

This is my average post, usually around 3-6 lines

Jason

Jason's head flicked upwards when she spoke and he was a bit startled. "You'll get used to it..." HE replied dryly, his voice still weak. He looked down, watching small drops of blood fall to the floor and splatter. He couldn't feel the warm blood anymore. His whole body was numb. He looked up as he heard the familiar sound of a lock being picked. His dull eyes rested on Yvaine and he pressed a hand to a large gash across his chest. "What... Are you...?" He watched her, his eyes being unable to focus. He suddenly felt very confused. Where was he...? Who was this girl across the hall...? Who was the girl in his cell...? Jason shook his head, biting his tongue when other voices began to echo within his mind...

((He's delusional from blood loss))

And... this is what my posts look like when I do not have much to role-play with ((Ex: no on'es really talking to my character, I have WB, there isn't much I can type about, etc.)) -And yes, I do role-play Transformers

Illusion

Once Illusion stepped out of the room and the door shut behind them, she looked up at Megatron, arms crossed. "You're being a bit generous today, aren't you?" She asked, smiling slightly. The smile faded and then she asked, "What will happen once Ratchet and Clover are out of here?" Her voice was low, knowing there was a small chance the Autobots could hear them if they spoke to loud. Illusion kept her pistols out just in case. She stayed alert for the sound of them trying to escape.

Umm... I'm pretty sure that's it! ^-^; Tell me if I missed something or if I should use a different instructor or something! ... Sorry for the form being this big!!

[rose;]

UndeadLaughter- I can take you ^^ for a lot of things, actually... I know a few people you requested are a bit busy. Sorry for taking so long to get to you, also. ^^ please message me, and we'll start on figuring stuff out :3

[zippyzoo77]

@UndeadLaughter- Yay, someone requested me! I would love to help you with creating and maintaining roleplays. PM me when you get the chance and we can start.

[city;]

ok, I'm so sorry, my beautiful club. I've been extraordinarily busy lately, but I'm getting better at this. So. Undead laughter, I'll take you! Just PM me, but I'm a little rusty on role-playing wolves and the like.

So. After you, laughter, I'm deleting my class on role playing animals ...

And Charlie, I don't know when Smamm was last on, so ... If nobody else knows how to do it better, I'll just help ya for vocabulary. c:

[Smamm]

Long time no see everyone! xD

I've noticed a few of you asking for my help with vocabulary and such! Please drop me a PM! I rarely check up here, and I do all of my tutoring through PM. ^^ So again, of you'd like my help, don't be shy! Send me a message. ^^

[abandoned.]

I is a fail teacher ono