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Re: ~Short

Postby Tawny224 » Wed Jul 25, 2012 3:40 pm

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Re: ~Short

Postby Tawny224 » Sat Aug 04, 2012 12:17 pm

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Re: ~Short

Postby .Arrow. » Sat Aug 04, 2012 3:19 pm

You did an excellent job on this piece, beginning all the way through! There's really not much to say besides that, I have no negative feedback for this.
It definitely leaves a person wanting more, which is, as far as I'm concerned, a good thing!
Again, excellent job ^-^
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Re: ~Short

Postby Tawny224 » Sat Aug 04, 2012 3:27 pm

.Arrow. wrote:You did an excellent job on this piece, beginning all the way through! There's really not much to say besides that, I have no negative feedback for this.
It definitely leaves a person wanting more, which is, as far as I'm concerned, a good thing!
Again, excellent job ^-^

Aww really? Thank you so so much Arrow <3 <3
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Re: ~Short

Postby Pengu9874 » Sat Aug 04, 2012 6:50 pm

I absolutely adored this piece of work. Except the end. Because it ended! Noooo!! I wanted to red more!
Fantastic job. Keep up the good work and pm whenever you have another story! If it as good as this one I'd loved to read it!!
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Re: ~Short

Postby Kitty-lover93 » Sun Aug 05, 2012 2:40 am

Tawny224 wrote:
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Wow, Tawny... I agree. That is very well-written, and it's so horrifying that it's beautiful- how extreme the situation was, and yet how small of a matter it was to him. I think you did well to display a man who was selfless, generous, and just in the wrong place at the wrong time...

The way you ended it made me wonder what would happen to the girl... *sigh* I wish I could write anywhere near as good as that. XD I guess I have to just keep practicing.

/FLOPS no. it's not good. But I'm so flattered that you think it's good. -rolls around-
Your writing is better than mine! You are awesome at writing. No joke.
Practice makes perfect <3 I just have to keep practicing too!

Thank you again, it makes me feel good when I read about people that actually love what I love doing <3


    Thank you! I just got around to reading this (I'm a bit busy nowadays, even though I make an effort to catch up to everything as much as I can) and it inspired me to write more in the story I just started... I was thinking on abandoning it, since I wasn't quite sure what exactly I wanted the outcome to be.
    I reread the story(yours, not mine!), too, and it was even better the second time- mostly because I caught on to a few things that I missed.
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