RP School Thread - Students Only/Closed

[the force awakens.]

Ashley walked to class, annoyed about seeing two kids in SpongeBob shirts, both matching each other. What next? Ashley thought, kindly wishing to talk to anoher person. "Hello," Ashley said to Eponymous, wishing to bring up a conversation with another senior. She felt nervous, knowing she hadn't spoke to Eponymous since before the summer holiday officially was on.
Ashley's parents had disappeared for majority of the summer, but Ashley never left her summer residence. Ashley knew the entire house was video tapd, and Ashley wasn't taking a chance, especially after the beating she recieved young. She finally first saw her parents a week before she was required to return to Holly Valley. The week waas long, and also very painful to Ashley. Then, s decied to sit down, knowing her wings would block other people's viedsw of the teacher.

[Caskett]

Frowning, Jayden contemplated making a smart remark and then decided against it. If she wanted help then she would have to just be patient with him and his superior attitude. Already she didn't like him, and could feel he didn't think her very highly, either. It was tempting to reach out and grab his arm, so that she could know just what he thought, but it wasn't worth the embarrassment. Looking up at him stubbornly, for he was much taller, Jayden stared right into his eyes, which were startlingly cold and seemed like pools to her, the color around his iris had dimension and depth. Quickly, she pulled her gaze to the floor, and then let it rest on his tattoo. She would end up talking to his arm, which he would think was odd, but if she looked into his eyes too long then resisting the urge to read his mind would be impossible. "Please, you know what I meant. Is there a place where we should go to get schedules or something?"

[Nimble Awesomeness]

Strike
Strike rolled his eyes at the girl. "I was asking you what classes you had," he said gruffly. "I can't tell you where your classes are if you don't tell me what they are." He paused, glancing down at his arm. The girl was staring at his tattoo. Already more stares. You would think this would be the one place on earth where he wouldn't get stares, but no. In all the other years of him being at this school, there had always been stares. Maybe it was the fact that he had walked in with a sleeve tattoo on his first day when he was 15.

"You don't know what your classes are, do you," he told her. It wasn't a question. He started walking up the stairs in the chilling main hall. "Come on then," he said, calling back to her. He wasted no time in getting to the main office. Briskly walking through the hallway, the students parted like the red sea for him. He was so large, and well, frightening, that they just really didn't want to be in his way. Any first-years that hadn't heard the rumors looked up at him with wide eyes and tried their best to shove out of Strike's path. His heels clicked on the tile floor, but it was nothing compared to the noise the students were making in the corridors. The shouts of laughter mixed with confusion of trying to find classes echoed throughout the school, bouncing from the first floor to the second.

[the force awakens.]

(Jenjo? We are waiting....)

[Jenjo]

[ I had exams, sorry! ]

[ The school colours will be bronze and green, just so that everybody knows! ]

[ Regarding classes - I suppose you can go to whatever you want; combat training, theor

Shoal saw double for a moment, head spinning as she watched the teen she had collided with split into two and slowly merge into one. She shook her head took the boy's hand, unsteadily hoisting herself to her feet. "Thanks," she said, a grateful smile playing across her lips. As soon as she had retrieved her clumsily stacked books from the wooden floor and adjusted her neck bandages for a second time, she turned back to the boy. It took her a moment to define his immobile silhouette from the wood walls and lockers behind him, but she managed. "Do you know where our first class is?" As Shoal spoke, a bell rang out clear and loud across the campus. It echoed off of the lockers, causing Shoal's eyes to widen apprehension. "Oh no, we're going to be late!" she wailed. Without a second thought, she grabbed the mysterious teen's arm and hurtled off to the nearest open door. If it wasn't their class, it was at least a class, and she did not want to be any later than she already was. She was so focused on not being late, in fact, that she did not bother to register the reaction of her impromptu companion.

Shoal is so dorky, I love her! Again, brilliant post. Nothing to correct, as your spelling etc is perfect. Keep it up!

Eponymous looked around with pursed lips and sucked in cheeks. His eyes darted from the teacher, looking surprised, to the students sitting in their desks. Awkwardly moving his eyes upward, then downward, he tugged his arm out of the girl's grasp. "Right then," he said clearing his throat.
The teacher stared at the two for a moment then said, "Aren't you two seniors?"
Eponymous smiled and did an little bow to the woman that seemed oddly flattering, "Of 'course, Madamazelle," he said, "Just a little problem finding our way to our own classes. Isn't that right, Shoal?" He looked at her expectantly.

Again, this is brilliant, and I have nothing to correct, apart from an unnecessary apostrophe. Keep it up, ST!

(o3o Jenjo, can I make another character? When it's my turn I mean. Is that allowed?)

I don't mind, just make sure that they're the opposite gender of your original character.

Ashley walked to class, annoyed about seeing two kids in SpongeBob shirts, both matching each other. What next? Ashley thought, kindly wishing to talk to anoher person. "Hello," Ashley said to Eponymous, wishing to bring up a conversation with another senior. She felt nervous, knowing she hadn't spoke to Eponymous since before the summer holiday officially was on.
Ashley's parents had disappeared for majority of the summer, but Ashley never left her summer residence. Ashley knew the entire house was video tapd, and Ashley wasn't taking a chance, especially after the beating she recieved young. She finally first saw her parents a week before she was required to return to Holly Valley. The week waas long, and also very painful to Ashley. Then, s decied to sit down, knowing her wings would block other people's viedsw of the teacher.

The highlighted parts are spelling mistakes (should be spelled: taped; was; she; decided; view). You seem to be starting most sentences with a pronoun, so if you could get into the habit of starting with something else, that would be great! If it helps, try to use a spelling corrector or something of the sort, and read through your posts to double-check for little mistakes like these.

Frowning, Jayden contemplated making a smart remark and then decided against it. If she wanted help then she would have to just be patient with him and his superior attitude. Already she didn't like him, and could feel he didn't think her very highly, either. It was tempting to reach out and grab his arm, so that she could know just what he thought, but it wasn't worth the embarrassment. Looking up at him stubbornly, for he was much taller, Jayden stared right into his eyes, which were startlingly cold and seemed like pools to her, the color around his iris had dimension and depth. Quickly, she pulled her gaze to the floor, and then let it rest on his tattoo. She would end up talking to his arm, which he would think was odd, but if she looked into his eyes too long then resisting the urge to read his mind would be impossible. "Please, you know what I meant. Is there a place where we should go to get schedules or something?"

Quite literally no flaws in this either! Well done and keep it up!

Strike
Strike rolled his eyes at the girl. "I was asking you what classes you had," he said gruffly. "I can't tell you where your classes are if you don't tell me what they are." He paused, glancing down at his arm. The girl was staring at his tattoo. Already more stares. You would think this would be the one place on earth where he wouldn't get stares, but no. In all the other years of him being at this school, there had always been stares. Maybe it was the fact that he had walked in with a sleeve tattoo on his first day when he was 15.

"You don't know what your classes are, do you," he told her. It wasn't a question. He started walking up the stairs in the chilling main hall. "Come on then," he said, calling back to her. He wasted no time in getting to the main office. Briskly walking through the hallway, the students parted like the red sea for him. He was so large, and well, frightening, that they just really didn't want to be in his way. Any first-years that hadn't heard the rumors looked up at him with wide eyes and tried their best to shove out of Strike's path. His heels clicked on the tile floor, but it was nothing compared to the noise the students were making in the corridors. The shouts of laughter mixed with confusion of trying to find classes echoed throughout the school, bouncing from the first floor to the second.

I really like Strike. You're detailed and I don't see any mistakes, so well done!

[the force awakens.]

(Sorry Jenjo! My phone was acting up yesturday and then I posted on there....)

[Nimble Awesomeness]

(Yay! :D I shall post her later. By the way, she's going to really really like Eponymous. :3 Hope that's ok with you, Story Teller. And thank you, Jenjo, I really like him as well. <3)

[christa renz]

"Uh, yeah! Of course! I know where I'm going, I just wanted to, uh..." Shoal's eyes flicked rapidly around the classroom, landing briefly on the few sparks of bright color that were displayed upon her classmates. Or, well, the people who would have been her classmates if she was a year younger. However, Shoal was too agitated to try and make out individual faces--a task that was often trying at the best of times. A large set of pure white wings caught her eye, and she vaguely recalled a winged girl from the previous year. Grateful for the opportunity, Shoal dashed forward and linked arms with the winged girl as well. She was rewarded with both an excuse and a face full of feathers. "I just had to find my fellow classmate here!" she mumbled, spitting a stray downy tuft from her mouth. Shoal regained her grip on the cloaked boy's arm and returned to the doorway at a significantly slower rate. The added weight of the new (old? new old? Shoal wasn't quite sure which to use) girl really impeded Shoal progress, as neither of her classmates seemed to be too willing to be dragged around. Shoal found this rather funny. It was almost like they would rather be late to class. But everyone liked a friendly person, right? ...Right? She turned to her two classmates, a bright smile spreading across her face as she finally made it into the hallway. "So! Hi! Isn't it great to see everyone again?" she beamed. Opening her mouth to speak again, she hastily closed it--she would have to remember to get their names again once they had made it to class. After all, she didn't have the world's greatest memory or facial recognition skills. Perhaps the cloaked boy's name started with an E, or maybe a S...?

[aiu]

((That's alright with me, Nimble!))

Eponymous was rudely tugged up from his bow and found himself awkwardly hopping on one foot backwards into the hallway. As soon as the large wood door slammed closed, he jerked his arm out of Shoal's grasp. He rubbed it as he frowned at her. "What the heck was that all about?" he asked without really expecting an answer. He brushed off he sleeves and cloak before determinedly setting off down the hallway, behind Shoal.

[the force awakens.]

What was that? Ashley thought of Shoal fooling aroun with herself. Ashley started to walk out of class to see what Shoal was up to. It seemed like to Ashley, everyone was friends with other people except for Ashley. Whom Ashley, of course, was a loner to everyone else. She knew she would be younger, but she now felt even younger. She knew she was 10 when she had started at Holly Valley, but it felt like Ashley was 4 when she started her first form at Holly Valley. Ashley accidentially fell down seconds later.