'Til The Last Breath - Eighth Book In The TIAJNAD Series

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What do you think of Suzi's backstory on page 15? NOTE: READ ENTRY ON PAGE 15 BEFORE ANSWERING!

Poor Suzi, she's had a hard life.
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I don't even know how Suzi went through all of that. It must have been so difficult for her.
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12%
I think I feel slightly sorry for Suzi.... BUT ONLY SLIGHTLY!
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4%
I feel so sorry for Suzi.
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4%
I think I sorta like Suzi now....
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16%
Still hate her the same.
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4%
She is still E.V.I.L.!
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So Suzi has scars.... so what?!
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16%
She still needs anger management.
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16%
SHE IS WACKO! How was Amy supposed to save her?! HUH?! HUH?! HUH?!
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Total votes : 25

Re: 'Til The Last Breath - Eighth Book In The TIAJNAD Series

Postby TheOneDirectioner » Fri May 11, 2012 9:26 am

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Re: 'Til The Last Breath - Eighth Book In The TIAJNAD Series

Postby • DEFY THE CAPITOL • » Fri May 11, 2012 11:55 am

xxazul63xx wrote:OH NO! PURPLE FONT! you know what that means......................... THE MARTIANS ARE COMING!!!!!!!!!
My fursona Renna: No silly, it means that Suzy is here....
Oh..................... SUZI IS HERE!

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TheHungerGamer wrote:AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Aaaaaahhhhhhh!!

MOOORE!
















Okay. Fine. Suzi was back. No biggy..... no, make that HUGE BIGGY!
Surprised to see me?
I hated that voice.
So, I hear you figured out how to save the world.
I gulped. All my strength that I had felt before drained out of me. Suzi put her head right in front of mine so that she was two inches away from my face.
That's not okay with me.
She grabbed my shoulders and threw me to the floor.
OWW!
Aww, poor little hero hurting?
I realized something. When I had first met Jenette, she was acting just like Suzi. That was sort of weird.....
Suzi!
I managed to croak out words, luckily.
Why do you hate me so much?!
Suzi stood above me, scowling.
YOU were supposed to save the world! YOU helped EVERYONE! But NOT ME!
What do you mean 'not me'?
Suzi stopped scowling, and for a fleeting moment she looked sad. But then she started scowling again.
You seriously don't know?
She was sneering by now.
Uh.... no?
Suzi held me on the ground so that I couldn't stand up.
Nobody tells you anything, do they? Fine. Guess I'll tell you.
I waited for her explanation.
When I was five years old, I was smart for my age. I could make lightning out of soda cans, form electricity with a special kind of glove, etc. etc. Everybody praised me, telling me I was so good, that I was the smartest five year old ever. And I was. But then my parents started putting me in shows. Started telling me to make things for the show. I loved making things, but it was tiring doing it ten times a day. But my parents worked me. And I was only five years old. They made me work eighteen hours a day (literally), and I only got a little bit of sleep. Throughout the years I grew smarter and smarter, making bigger and better things, which made my parents happier then ever. But then they did the absolute worst thing. They sold me when I was ten years old. They sold me to a magician. They sold me! And they got good money for me also. About fifty million bucks. Anyway, that magician worked me harder then my parents had. Made my work twenty-four hours a day (really). Never got any sleep. That magician got paid money. Made about a thousand dollars a day.... and I got nothing. I worked for nothing. He kept me in a cage when he was planning the shows, letting people look at me and point. Kids laughed and asked what was wrong with me. Adults stared at me, took notes. That happened nearly every day! And so one day, when I was doing a show on me making a giant electric sphere, people started gaping at me. They cheered. It was like I was a freak to them.... and I was. And I was tired of it. And so I threw electricity into the crowd. The crowd rushed out, and grabbed the money they had paid to see me. And boy did I get in trouble after that! The magician punished me.... badly. Just shoved me in a cage full of equipment one day. Doctors came in and looked at me, examined me, took my blood. And then I overheard a doctor talking to the magician. He said "She has amazing brain capability. I think you've got a good show business right now, but you can make it better". And of course the magician was interested! But I didn't hear what was going to come next. The doctor had told the magician in a different room where I couldn't hear them. I thought it was bad, but I didn't know it would be so bad. The next day, the magician and a lot of doctors came to me and opened my cage. They stepped in and locked it before I could escape. I didn't know at the time that I could have easily used my powers and had knocked them out, but I was a curious fool, and didn't touch them. I wanted to see what would happen. That was the biggest mistake of my life. They chained me, tied my hands and legs so I couldn't move them to defend myself. I didn't know what they were going to do at the time. But then they told me. "Now, not to worry. You won't remember any of this. We're just going to do a bit of brain surgery." And so of course I asked why! "Why, to improve you of course! And we can control you." And that's what set me off. I didn't want to be controlled. I didn't want to be hurt anymore! And so I used all my strength, and I broke the chains and rope. I fought the doctors, which was pretty easy, since I could control electricity. Then I broke out of the cage. The magician ran after me, but I was too fast. I ran out of the building which I was kept in, ran down the street. But all over the street was posters. Posters of me holding electricity in my hand. The posters read "See the amazing electro-dog!". And that really set me off. I tore all the posters off and ran away. But people recognized me, and pointed. I shut my eyes and kept on running. But then I heard police sirens..... and they were coming toward me. The police caught up, of course, and took me. They took my somewhere I'd never been. They took me to a lab! They put me in another cage. And they were armed. Guns were surrounding my cage, so that if I tried to even touch the bars, I would be fired at. I was stuck in that lab for years! I was tested on, but (luckily) never had brain surgery, because they all knew what I'd do if they even tried. But they took notes, visited me daily, rarely ever gave me food or water (but just enough so that I could survive). And then I heard word of someone who would "save the world" as the lab people put it. They said she was growing stronger, that she would save everyone. That she was already being kind and helping everyone. That is, everyone but me! They said that her parents were helpers too, that they helped everybody! That they traveled the world and helped people everywhere! Everywhere except where I was! And that made me more angry then ever. So I got an idea, gathered all the electricity I could in my hands, shot the guns (making them die), then broke the bars of the cage. I escaped, and shocked anyone who got in my way (which was practically the lab people and security). I ran far away. I stayed in the forest for a few weeks, thinking of a plan. And that's when I decided to try something. I tried morphing. And, guess what, it worked! I found out what school you were going to, and I joined the school, swearing to myself that I would destroy you for never saving me! For saving everyone but me!
I saw a tear roll down Suzi's cheek, and I had to choke back sobs myself. Just hearing her story was painful.... even if she was trying to kill me. Suzi was breathing heavily, a mixture of anger and sadness in her eyes.
WHY DIDN'T YOU SAVE ME?!
How..... how was I supposed to know.... where you were?
I don't know! You knew where everybody else was, though! You helped everybody!!
It was painful to watch Suzi. And the worst part was, was that she was right. I had helped everybody. I wanted to be helpful. But I hadn't ever helped Suzi out of that lab. Not once.
You're right.
I was whispering.
What?
You're right. I didn't help you. I didn't help everyone if I didn't help you. I didn't think of looking in labs. I didn't think about looking in magician's places. I'm sorry.
Suzi looked taken aback, but then scowled a hateful scowl, making my heart sink.
I will never forgive you! LOOK AT WHAT THEY DID TO ME!
She showed me her arm, where there were little white bumps covering nearly every inch of her arm.
Those are my scars!
I nearly fainted. Her arm.... it looked nearly white because of all the bumps.
Disgusting, I know! And it's your fault! You didn't help me!
A tear ran down my cheek. I didn't know that it was possible to feel sorry for Suzi, but I guess it was.
I'm so sorry.
I choked out the words, images of Suzi in a cage filling my mind.
Sorry doesn't break it.
And Suzi would have punched my guts out right then, if it hadn't been for a sudden explosion. And standing there, right beside Suzi, was that one dog I had loved so long ago. That betrayer, the one who woar armor. That's right. It was Pete.











And that is part of Suzi's backstory. I'm thinking on writing a story about Suzi now, but I might not.... dunno.... anyway, hope you like this entry! Got to learn a bit more about Suzi.

"The game is
coming to its end."

"Our future starts
tomorrow at dawn."

"Snow has to pay
for what he's done."

"Our lives were
never ours. They
belong to Snow,
and our deaths
do too. But if you
kill him, if you
end all of this,
all those deaths
mean something."

"Tonight, turn your
weapons to the
Capitol! Turn your
weapons to Snow!"
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Re: 'Til The Last Breath - Eighth Book In The TIAJNAD Series

Postby xxazul63xx » Fri May 11, 2012 12:30 pm

Poor suzi, but she should still stop trying to kill amy she has to learn forgivness
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Re: 'Til The Last Breath - Eighth Book In The TIAJNAD Series

Postby Rebel Faery » Fri May 11, 2012 6:08 pm

Aww, poor Suzy. She has now made it to my top character list:
1. Rhubarb
2. Jennette
3. Amy
4. Suzy
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I've decided it's time to move on, and so I've quit CS. It's been a good three years, but, well, as of May 2014, I don't think I'll be coming back. I'd like to say thank you, to all of you. Thank you for encouraging me, inspiring me, and being my friends. I've had so much fun, but this is the end. Seeing as this is my last visit, I've changed my username back to the original, Rebel Faery. It's a name that I no longer go by, but a name I'll always remember. I'm so sorry to every fan of TIAJNAD, to everyone that read my writing, to, well, everyone. But it's time to move on. To make like Elsa and let it go. (I was still on CS when Frozen came out. It feels like so long ago.)
let it go, let it go, and I'll rise like the break of dawn
let it go, let it go, that perfect girl is gone
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Re: 'Til The Last Breath - Eighth Book In The TIAJNAD Series

Postby TPDebate » Sat May 12, 2012 10:21 am

just when every thing was going great, just when jennette is a time,dinosaur,superdog thing, just when suzi is 99.99% bad (she was 100% bad before), and just when "that thing" is dead (pete), you bring "that thing" back! you are NOT NICE.
Three Rings for the Elven-kings under the sky,
Seven for the Dwarf-lords in their halls of stone,
Nine for Mortal Men doomed to die,
One for the Dark Lord on his dark throne
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.
One Ring to rule them all, One Ring to find them,
One Ring to bring them all and in the darkness bind them
In the Land of Mordor where the Shadows lie.


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Re: 'Til The Last Breath - Eighth Book In The TIAJNAD Series

Postby • DEFY THE CAPITOL • » Sat May 12, 2012 10:36 am

xxazul63xx wrote:Poor suzi, but she should still stop trying to kill amy she has to learn forgivness

Probably, but there's more from her past then you know of.... *Dun dun dun*
Rebel Faery wrote:Aww, poor Suzy. She has now made it to my top character list:
1. Rhubarb
2. Jennette
3. Amy
4. Suzy

Ya. Sadness. :(
whoa gal1 wrote:just when every thing was going great, just when jennette is a time,dinosaur,superdog thing, just when suzi is 99.99% bad (she was 100% bad before), and just when "that thing" is dead (pete), you bring "that thing" back! you are NOT NICE.

:cry:

"The game is
coming to its end."

"Our future starts
tomorrow at dawn."

"Snow has to pay
for what he's done."

"Our lives were
never ours. They
belong to Snow,
and our deaths
do too. But if you
kill him, if you
end all of this,
all those deaths
mean something."

"Tonight, turn your
weapons to the
Capitol! Turn your
weapons to Snow!"
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Re: 'Til The Last Breath - Eighth Book In The TIAJNAD Series

Postby • DEFY THE CAPITOL • » Sat May 12, 2012 10:45 am

Hello, Suzi. How have you been?
What? No hello for me?
Percival, what are you doing here? This is my business.
You know as well as I do that you can't kill her.... yet.
Yet?
No, I don't, Pete.
I was confused. Was his name Percival, or Pete? Was it both?
Tell me. Why can't I kill her now?
Because.... the prophecy.
A look of shock was on Suzi's face, but she quickly replaced it with a look of disgust.
Why would I care about the prophecy?
Because you know that Mum and Da did.
Suzi's face fell, and sadness filled her eyes. But (again) she quickly replaced it with a look of disgust.
Why would I care about them? They got rid of me.
You know that's not true, Suzi.
It is true. I thought you'd know that more then anyone else.... since you betrayed me too.
Suzi, let's not talk about this now.
I said nothing. I didn't want to get into an argument with Suzi....
Oh, but I think we should.
Well I say we shouldn't.
I had to hold back a gasp. I didn't think Pete had the guts to say no to Suzi.
Come on. We need to carry on with the plan. And then you can do what you like with her.
Suzi growled.
But why do we have to carry out the plan?! It does nothing!
Umm.... excuse me, but what is this plan?
Shut up!
Well that was a lovely thing to say.
I'm NOT carrying out with the plan. I'm doing what I want for once!
Pete growled.
I'm sorry, but I can't let you do that.
And then the most surprising thing of the day happened. Suzi hadn't even lunged at Pete, when he suddenly dropped to the ground.... not breathing.

"The game is
coming to its end."

"Our future starts
tomorrow at dawn."

"Snow has to pay
for what he's done."

"Our lives were
never ours. They
belong to Snow,
and our deaths
do too. But if you
kill him, if you
end all of this,
all those deaths
mean something."

"Tonight, turn your
weapons to the
Capitol! Turn your
weapons to Snow!"
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Re: 'Til The Last Breath - Eighth Book In The TIAJNAD Series

Postby Kay the Cat-Fox » Sat May 12, 2012 10:46 am

:O
OH MY GOD ITS BEEN
8 YEARS

AAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
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Re: 'Til The Last Breath - Eighth Book In The TIAJNAD Series

Postby xxazul63xx » Sat May 12, 2012 11:01 am

woah...................
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Re: 'Til The Last Breath - Eighth Book In The TIAJNAD Series

Postby nezuko. » Sun May 13, 2012 10:31 am

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