Arabelle's Story-Chapter 1 finished!

[Flightstar]

Hi! Would you mind critiquing my two stories? The banners are in my signature! Arrabelle's Story and Shattered Peace. Thanks a bunch! You may post your comments on the threads

Arasbelle's Story:

One of the most well-written stories I have read in a LONG time. I understand that someone else began it, no? If that's the case, you were able to continue the original author's train of thought IMMENSLY well. I was unable to even tell that two different, aspiring authors wrote it. One thing that lost me until chapter two -- The time skip. I was confused, as it seemed as though she was trained in less than a week. Then, when the love intrest was reintroduced, I realized the timeskip was eleven years. Try to make it more noticable.

[Snow Eevee]

ok. and yea, me and my older sister are amazingly close, and I did help her write the first part of the story, but it was just mainly her idea. Anyways, thanks a million!

[{Bubbles}]

~I'm still stalking, and waiting.~

[MusicalMoony]

Please write more! I've been stalking this thread for ages and I love the storyline and how you've written it!

[sparkle.+bballmta]

Love it so far!

[Little Rebel]

Heads up to anybody interested in this story. My name is Tiny Cat. I am the younger sister of Mollysue and Snow Eevee (there are about ten of us altogether and that's not including our cousins who also rp). Molly and Snowy felt bad about leaving y'all hanging so we are altogether going to work together on the story. However, ultimately I am rewriting and refining it. My sisters and I have grown as writers since Molly first wrote this.