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[ a change of tone ; mlp-fim fanfic ]

Postby Applesky » Mon Apr 23, 2012 3:46 am

a change of tone

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This fanfic is baisically my fanmade follow on of the Season 2 Finale of My Little Pony ^^
If you don't like ponies,then don't read :>


Prologue
My wings convulsed at my sides but I could not fly. My legs were at odd angles against the grass and my head throbbed. I took big gasps of air and the trauma all came rushing back. Our Queen had failed us. It seemed impossible, but it was true. She had been beaten by love. She had been foolish. I jolted in shock and lowered my head, ready for a searing pain of punishment to hit me,but none came. The Queen hears all our thoughts. If she heard a nasty one, we got punished. If she didn't hear my disrespectful thought, could she not hear the rest of my thoughts? She let her guard down and payed the price for it, she ruined our chances at taking over. I paused. Nothing happened. I smiled, I seemed to be free to think what I wanted. I sat up and winced. Then I realized I was alone. I looked around desperately for more of my kind, but I seemed to be the only one. I slowly propped myself up and slunk behind a nearby tree. I had to think it over, better than the Queen had done. I trailed my mind backwards, remembering the events of the day before. I remembered a huge blast of power and suddenly I was thrown backwards, but not far. I remembered crashing to the ground and just before darkness took over, I saw the queen and everyone I knew thrown out of the sky and to somewhere far away. Who knows where. Maybe they didn't even make it. That must of happened. The Queen didn't make it. She died and mostly everyone else died because her plan had failed. But it wasn't her fault. It was their fault. The masters of the power that threw her and everyone else and killed them. I lifted my head, new determination glinting in my eye. They must pay. The moon shone invintingly. I smirked and looked around. They obviously didn't like to be around at night, but I had been walking around at dark since I was born.I leaped up and had to use all my will power not to yelp. Biting the inside of my mouth, I moved forwards at a brisk walk. It was only a few minutes later when I glanced to the left and it was all I could do not to gasp in awe. A humongous, magnificent palace loomed over me. I just had to get in. It looked grand, so it must be full of things of importance. Which was just what I wanted. I leaped upwards and hovered slightly above the ground. Grimacing in pain I flew over the wall and plopped onto the ground. It seemed easy, too easy but I didn't want to stick around figuring things out. I looked up and spotted an open window in one of the turrets. I snorted and lurched myself up to it. My chest heaving, I dropped myself into the room. Slowly and cautiously I made my way down the stairs. As I arrived at a corridor, all I could see were magnificent tapestries and pieces of art. Woah. I gingerly took a step forwards, but no guards came. There seemed to be no one.They obviously think all the trouble is over now that they think they've got rid of us. But they hadn't. I slowly creeped forwards and easily found a door. I put my eye to the door and then pulled away again. Stamping the ground in delight, I burst the doors open. Who needs to be subtle with the plan I have? A pair of shocked eyes looked at me, then they narrowed. Their horn glowed and I felt myself being pushed away. No. My mind repelled the spell for a few seconds. That was all I needed. I felt power seeping into me and I grew. With my own new magnificent horn, I saw the creature look around desperatley as they faded. Then they disappeared competely, nothing left of them.

I'm doing this for you, my Queen.

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Chapter 1 coming soon :>
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Re: [ a change of tone ; mlp-fim fanfic ]

Postby 'ye » Mon Apr 23, 2012 4:18 am

I can't wait for the first chapter! c:
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Re: [ a change of tone ; mlp-fim fanfic ]

Postby Applesky » Mon Apr 23, 2012 6:40 am

Chapter 1
The Guards galloped into The Royal Bedroom, looking worriedly at the Princess' blank face.
"What? What is it? Why did you call us?" One Guard, Crossed Sword, demanded calmly, but inside he was shaking.
"It was horrible," Celestia murmured."It was so scary," The guards exchanged confused looks, Celestia hardly every got scared. But they shrugged, who wouldn't be different after the recent events.
"What was?" Crossed Sword pressed on. Celestia's head snapped up.
"I must send a message, you all must go and deliver it to towns and cities in Equestria," She snapped.
"Can't you send one yourself,by magic?" Crossed Sword enquired.
"There's something here, it will intercept them. You must all send one to the Mayors, hoof sent." Celestia said. "And please do not speak to your ruler like that." Crossed Sword raised his eyebrows, but said nothing and bowed his head.
"Your Message, Princess?" Another Guard, Little Shield, asked timidly.

~~~

"WHAT?" Rarity squealed as she stared gooey eyed at the Notice Board.
"What what?" Twilight asked, slight boredom edging her voice.
"P-p-princess Celestia!" Rarity squeaked.
"Go on?"
"She has asked for the best or two best Unicorns from every town and city in Equestria to go to Canterlot, she has a very important task and needs only the best unicorns to help her complete it." Rarity stamped the ground in glee. Twilight's ears pricked up, sounded like something she would be interested in.
"Any other information on it?" Twilight asked eagerly.
"No," Rarity said dissapointedly after scanning it a few times."Oh! A guard hoof dropped it off this morning, it wasn't sent by magic." Rarity's voice dropped in confusion.
"Sounds very important." A scarcastic voice came from behind them."Maybe Princess needs to drain all your magic as she's run out."
"Rainbow Dash!" Rarity said scoldingly. "Princess Celestia would never do that, just because your jealous that she wants Unicorns, not Pegasus' and you can't come to Canterlot!"
"That's your favourite day out,not mine."Rainbow Dash shot back."I was there the other day, I don't need to go again." She hovered above Twilight and Rarity, her arms folded.
"How could you not want to-" Rarity started angrily.
"Calm it you two, it's probably not too important," Twilight said firmly.
"Important enough for the Princess to call for you, thats important." Rainbow Dash said.
"Rainbow, she hasn't asked for me." Twilight said, then paused. Why hadn't Celestia called for her? She was her best student, and probably the best at magic in Ponyville, she was almost automatically going, but obviously Celestia didn't need her that much. Her thoughts where interrupted by Rainbow Dash's and Rarity's bickering.
"Cut it out you two!" Twilight yelled. They both turned and glared at her. "We'll see who Mayor Mare picks and if its us or one of us, it doesn't matter."
"I don't care about that,"Rarity said."Rainbow Dash not having enough respect for Canterlot is what I care about."
"I have respect for Canterlot," Rainbow Dash said, a bit miffed."I just don't need to go again,anyway I can't, I'm not a Unicorn."
"Humph!" Rarity snorted,stuck of something to say.

~~~

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Re: [ a change of tone ; mlp-fim fanfic ]

Postby Applesky » Tue Apr 24, 2012 4:14 am

Chapter 2
Rarity stood proudly infront of Twilight, her head high.
"Well,"She said."What do you think of my new gown, doesn't it seem magical?"
"Indeed,it does."Twilight admitted. The valendar silk dress rippled around Rarity's body, small sparkles catching the light, sending bursts of brightness around the room. A golden crown sat on Rarity's head, many jewels lined carefully along the edge.
"I just had to prepare a special dress for the picking of the unicorns, I need to look my best if I'm picked." Rarity mused, admiring the slim sleeves over her forelegs. Twilight chuckled.
"Oh Rarity," Twilight said. Rarity snorted and jerked her head away, sending cascades of amethyst curls falling down her neck.
"Oh!" Rarity squeaked,turning back to Twilight.
"What?" Twilight said drily.
"We are late!" She squealed, bursting out the door and down the path. Twilight jumped and bolted after her and down to the town square. They arrived at a crowd and they stopped at the back,waiting for the Mayor. Rarity ducked her head, taking the chance to smooth down her dress.

"--And now for the Unicorns taking this important responsibility and will be heading off to Canterlot straight away, after they've packed,that is!" Mayor Mare announced.
Finally,Twilight thought.
"I took my time deciding, I needed the two best unicorns to represent Ponyville who where acceptable and talented."She neighed."And they are...."
The crowd went silent, ears all pricked up and anxious to hear the results.
"Twilight Sparkle & Rarity!" Twilight gaped and turned to look at Rarity with shock, but Rarity was gone. Echoing of hooves pounded in her head as she looked for Rarity. Then she realized Rarity was already on the stage, flaunting her fabulous new dress.
Twilight galloped up to the stage too, plastering a smile on her face. She thought the whole thing over, she was going, when she should have been going anyway. Twilight decided to go talk to Celestia to ask why she hadn't invited her first or something that showed Celestia achknowleged her skills. Twilight's smile turned real as she became satisfied with her schedule.

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"And when will they be arriving,my dear guards?" Celestia demanded with a sweet tone. An unusual combination.
"The Unicorns that have been picked are being revealed at this very moment and-" Crossed Sword started.
"They will all be here by tonight." Little Shield butted in. Crossed Sword glared at him but said nothing.
Celestia,unaware to the bristling anger of some of her guards, nodded thoughtfully.
"Alright,thats good.Prepare a feast for them and then show them straight to their rooms.Do not let them in any rooms they don't have permission, oh, and do not let them into the main Drawing Room." Celestia affirmed the guards.
"Yes Princess."They all said together and then they trotted out of her room.
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Re: [ a change of tone ; mlp-fim fanfic ]

Postby Applesky » Thu Apr 26, 2012 4:37 am

Chapter 3
Twilight rolled her eyes as Rarity struggled to get on the train.
"Don't worry about helping me then,Twilight." Rarity sniffed as she pulled as hard as she could on her suitcase.
"It would have helped if you had packed less,"Twilight said, getting up and walking over.
"I had to have a clothes supply if the visit lasted long!" Rarity whined. Twilight zipped open the suitcase and took out a few dresses. The suitcase popped easily through the doors and they slid closed. Twilight admired the dresses.
"Rarity,they are lovely, but do you really need this many?"
"Yes!"Rarity growled pocessively as she folded them and placed them back."I may find customers that want my grace and style."
Twilight sighed and sat down on one of the seats. Rarity gracefully sat next to her and immediatley began surveying the unicorns in the cart with them.
"Hmm." Rarity said thoughtfully."Some of the unicorns here look very,well,clever."
"What did you expect them to look like?"
"I don't know.But look,"Rarity nudged Twilight and pointed to a unicorn a few rows ahead."I must know what she uses on her mane, it looks wonderful!"
Twilight peered ahead and the unicorn's mane did indeed look wonderful. The unicorn was a pale cream, with a golden yellow mane that curled at the tips with honey orange streaks that danced in the light.
"She's like me,"Rarity squealed.As Twilight looked at her blankly,she explained."Clever and knows how to look lovely!"
"What about everypony else?" Twilight queried and they both began to look around them. There was only about 10 unicorns aboard,including them, all of which had got on before hand at their stops.
"Ooh,he is handsome,"Rarity said dreamily. Twilight looked at the Unicorn she was talking about and chuckled. He certaintly looked rich.
The train journey whizzed by as the two chatted about the unicorns they would be working with and what it could even be about.

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The 10 unicorns where bundled together and tightly herded towards the dining room,where they all sat down together. Ponyville, Rarity and Twilight, where at the end of the table by Princess Celestia's seat,with Fillydelphia next to them. Rarity's eyes gleamed as she found out that the cream unicorn with the 'wonderful' mane was from Fillydelphia.
The mare sat down next to Rarity and smiled at her.
"Hey there,"She neighed.
"Oh hello there dear,"Rarity gushed."My names Rarity."
"I'm Golden Touch,feel free to call me Gold,or whatever you'd like,"Gold said."I do love your mane Rarity."
"Oh really? Because on the train I was admiring your mane!" Rarity squealed in delight, finally having a mare to talk to about manes and stuff.
"Awwh really? Well thank you!" Gold grinned."What's your cutiemark for, gems,very in these days."
"Well I am a designer and I specialize in using gems within my work and stuff,"Rarity blushed,not really going into details."What about you?"
"I work for Golden Designs-"
"Really?!"Rarity shrieked."I love your designs,do you make them?"
"No I don't,well, sort of, the line is run by my family. I take the designs at the beginning and add the finishing touches, and same with the end product, I just have that magical, or golden, touch with making our designs even better." Gold smiled.
Rarity was about to speak again when Celestia walked in.
Finally, I will be able to speak to her.Twilight thought to herself.
Celestia stood at her seat but did not sit down.
"I am sorry, my ponies, but I will not be able to eat with you." She declared.
WHAT?
"I must put all of my time into the project I am working on,the one of which you will be helping me with." Celestia's voice went hard as she said the last few words."Do not complain, I am sorry that I'm trying to make your, I mean our, world a better place." She snarled and walked out.
The ponies,including Twilight,that had been complaining to themselves or the ponies around them looked at the floor.
They all ate in silence, and once they where all done, they where chauffered to their rooms, each city/town having a gigantic room each.
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Re: [ a change of tone ; mlp-fim fanfic ]

Postby xxazul63xx » Thu Apr 26, 2012 10:14 am

I think I know whats going to happen >:D anyhoo, love the story!
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Re: [ a change of tone ; mlp-fim fanfic ]

Postby Applesky » Sat Apr 28, 2012 3:12 am

xxazul63xx wrote:I think I know whats going to happen >:D anyhoo, love the story!

hehehe ty <3

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Re: [ a change of tone ; mlp-fim fanfic ]

Postby Applesky » Sat Apr 28, 2012 8:02 am

Chapter 4

No one could keep still, you could feel the excitement bouncing off the walls. Twilight held her head high to try and look sophisticated, but she couldn't keep it up. She let out a high pitched squeal and rushed over to Rarity, disrupting her conversation with Golden Touch.
"Do you have any idea Twilight?" Gold asked her.
"On what?"
"What the Princess is going to ask from us,of course," She replied gracefully.
"Well," Twilight thought,"I don't," But I should know something.
"Oh,"Gold looked disappointed.
"Are you sure?" Rarity added."You are her star student after all,"
"We could always be detectives,"Twilight replied,deep in thought."She wants all the best unicorns,she didn't send the message by magic,she is trying to make our world a better place,what can it all mean?"
"I have no idea,"Rarity replied, looking a bit baffled."Maybe Rainbow Dash was right,"
"Rainbow Dash?" Gold queried.
"A friend from Ponyville," Rarity said quickly.
"About her draining our magic?"Twilight said.Rarity nodded."She wouldn't do that,but she obviously needs our magic to do,or power something."

~~~

The guards lined up infront of Princess Celestia and she smiled and for the first time in a few weeks, the smile reached her eyes.
"I need you to go and fetch all of the unicorns,"She asked smoothly.
"They aren't in their rooms,"Little Shield said.
"Of course they aren't,"Princess Celestia snorted."I asked them to wait for you lot to collect them from the hall."
"That would explain it,right Little Shield?" Crossed Sword said in mock surprise. Little Shield put his ears back. The other guards around them sniggered and Little Shield looked at the floor angrily.
"So are you going to go?" Celestia prompted.
"Oh!" Little Shield jumped. "Yes we are!" The guards trotted out of the room.

~~~

Rarity jumped and the words that where about to leave her mouth never made it. Twilight & Gold turned around and saw a line of 5 guards beckoning to them. They are burst out of the room and struggled to keep at a walk. They approached the main drawing room and slowly walked in. They gasped. A gigantic machine stood in the middle of the room, but it looked glorious, it almost looked like it was glowing. Celestia looked at their awe-filled faces with pride.
"How do you like it?" She asked.
"Like what?" A stallion asked. Rarity and Twilight shared a look.
"The machine that is going to help our lifestyles," Celestia said.
"It's wonderful,"Gold gushed.
"Well I invited you all here to help me power it!" Celestia declared. Cheers of delight swished around the room.
"What does it do?" Rarity asked.
"Only making the average pony look ten times better," Celestia beamed. Rarity was startled, but then overcame it.
"Really?!" She yelled excitedly."My kind of machine!"
Celestia nodded.
"Now, I will all need you to power up a tube each, put a store of your magic in there,just incase the first supply runs out,which I kindly donated."
Twilight blinked in surprise,offering magic already? But she was the leader, and like all the other unicorns, she used all her strength to full the tube of her magic. The tube was bigger than it seemed and Twilight felt weak after it had been done.
"Why thank you,"Celestia said,waving her arm around in a dismissive way,"I no longer need you,but I will need a few unicorns tomorrow,"
Twilight walked out disgruntedly, they had only been there for about 15 minutes.
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Re: [ a change of tone ; mlp-fim fanfic ]

Postby vanillababy » Sun Apr 29, 2012 1:22 am

Can't wait for the rest xD
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Re: [ a change of tone ; mlp-fim fanfic ]

Postby Applesky » Mon Apr 30, 2012 6:55 pm

Thanks <3

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