First part;
Beginning of the month.
- BOM? What does this mean. I think writing it out will be better, we might know what it means, readers do not.
- Space between header and first text. It looks kinda cramped.
- Space between header text from my review and guest artist line. Makes it more noticeable if there is a space.
- I see that the light green aint a good choice to write the 'Made by' parts. It was just a saint patties thing, will be diff next month.
End of the month.
- EOM, Also..pokes first point.
- I like the idea of having gifs but..it's really really distracting. When reading, my eyes are drawn to the moving pictures next to the text. Makes the text very hard to read. While on subject of these gif/animaton files. I think you copied the wrong pictures, because they look very pixel-y and not smooth at all. Pm me and i'll show you how to get the correct pictures, so that it will show up smoother (Like we do with making the outcome charts.)
- I like the fact that you added clickable links and pointed back at what they are based off and such. Nice touch.
- I miss who made the owls. It's not a big thing to miss when you don't mention it everywhere, but all the other pets have a name in the text, owls don't.
- I somehow kinda miss an ending as well. It's like BAM end. Yer start is pretty clear with yer own banner, but maybe write a few words to end yer review?
Gen's.
- This banner looks great.
- Try to use a different color code when using pictures.Right now, you use color code #90dc35, which makes em show up dark green. If you use color code #ece9e1 then it'll look like it's the same as the background. Fake transparent xD
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http://static.chickensmoothie.com/archive/image.php?k=C2EFDFC74D513632D35DF2E568F2F178&bg=90dc35
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http://static.chickensmoothie.com/archive/image.php?k=C2EFDFC74D513632D35DF2E568F2F178&bg=ece9e1
see? And if you take a picture from when the pup grew, it'll look like this, without the stripes. (Couldn't find the same pet e.e so took a baby.)
See how that looks? Clean, clear. It makes the dog pop out. It's just a nice bonus though XD, makes it look neater.
- I like that you tell people to go look at the threads, but maybe you should link to those threads? Give people a reason to click something xD Very nice done!
Species.
- Again, nice banner, very clear.
- I like that you hint back at certain bunnies, but maybe try to include wordlinks to them buns? Not everybody knows their names, so if you say 'Zorse rabbit', make that word clickable so that people can actually go see the "Zorse rabbit"? Just an idea ^^
- Good use of members, i like that. Short, 2 is more then enough.
Interviews.
- again, nice banner.
- i like the intro, it's clean and nice.
- 'acquainted'. Consider that allotttt of people on CS (And thus reading the paper) are younger kids. not everybody knows that word, try to stay away from the 'harder' english words, not everybody is native.
- Both of you have good, straight to the point questions. I like that allot.
- i miss an ending here. There is no banner between your mod interviews, and the general helper interviews and right now, it looks like a big wall of text. There is no end thing, a little end thanking the mod would be nice :]
- I have to start with the color you use to write. It's very, very hard to read and the longer the interview is, the harder and more annoying it gets to read. It would be better if you would pick a darker color, dark grey/black.
- I do like the blue you used for the general helper, it makes the answers pop out and that draws attention.
- I love yer way of interviewing. It's a little story, very easy to read and it keeps attention because it's not a wall of questions. Nicely done.
- also miss an end/start something, maybe a start aint needed, but an end certainly is. It looks rather weird right now xD
- And try to write out full names or add a 'General helper will write in blue' at the top. Because i had to really think who OAS was, each time i read it. Was kinda confusing. That goes the same fer CSG. We know what it means, normal readers don't.
Item reviews
- Nicely done, Star ^^, very nice.
- I do have a little point. Asking other members about their opinions is oke, but keep in mind that this is your review. Right now, you did a little writing and they did all the work. One or two guest reviews is great, 3 is nice, 4..is pushing it. Try to keep it down to 2/3 opinions and write a little more yourself ^^
- Enyo, i love it. Great coding, nicely done. Nothing to add here, keep it up.
Store pets
- I think this would be a nice idea for next month; When the store pets are released, write a review about it. the second month, post member opinions about them, and only link back to the review. It's easy to post the review part somewhere in a thread (Maybe even on one of the reserved posts, just for a short time of course, or just link above). That way, you won't repeat anything. Right now, the danger is that people that read the first issue already read this and are gonna skip it, thus not reading the member opinions.
Specials/Saint patties.
- I used the wrong color code, i think. Lol, it looks silly.
Features.
featured pet.
- Short, picture, straight question. Love it.
Featured character.
- Nice and simple, nothing big, nice fan art. Nothing to add.
CS spotlight.
- The poem is a bit too long. i personally had a 'too long didn't read' thing xD, if you get what i mean.
- Aside from that, it looks great. Nice interview.
Featured artist.
- maybe add a 'click this horse to go to -name artshop-' underneath the picture? It doesn't look clickable, and posting an artist in here has to be advertising for them.
- I don't really have anything to add, i like the questions, i love the art.
Featured writer.
- Add a link to the person's name. So that even when later on people read these issues, they still know who that person was.
- Again, nice questions.
Featured Oekaki work.
- nothing to add, all has been said lol.
Member interviews.
- I miss who took these interviews.
- it's also not really clear who's replying. Maybe put em in quotes or bold their names so that it stands out a little more.
- Looks great other then that.
Advertisment.
- Link to TBB's artshop? Afterall, she deserves a spot there in 'her' issue. Also goes for the other artist works btw.
Cali, i'm not sure why you added the last thing, i would personally keep it out. I don't think that leurai has any intentions of reading the paper ever again and i think it tosses a bad light on the paper.
e.e going to bed now, hope you guys like my wall of text. Feel free to pm me for clarifications and what not.
~DD