Private RP For Kayla, Kestral&Leo, and Stonefly

[Stonefly]

(Bump)

[Toxi+Bbun]

((Stonefly, if you fixed your form, it's your turn.))

[Stonefly]

((ok, here is my first post))

Willow Slowly moved through the forest, keeping low and silent. She was well aware of other animals in these parts like Wolves, and maybe a few things like bears. Since Willow wasn’t in a mood to fight she tried her best to keep out of sight of just about anything. Well traveling it didn’t take her much time to catch the scent of another wolf and she froze. She took a moment to take it in and see if she could figure anything about this wolf. After a while of sniffing she gave up and turned away from the scent and went the other way. Well walking she began to scan around the area hoping to find something that would be good enough for her to live in as nights will get cold, or that’s what she heard. So well walking she looked over everything carefully wanting to find the right place for the night.

[Toxi+Bbun]

Willow slowly moved through the forest, keeping low and silent. She was well aware of other animals in these parts, like wolves, and maybe a few things like bears. Since Willow wasn’t in a mood to fight, she tried her best to keep out of sight from just about anything. Well, traveling it didn’t take her much time to catch the scent of another wolf. She froze. She took a moment to take it in and see if she could figure anything about this wolf. After a while of sniffing, she gave up and turned away from the scent and went the other way. While walking, she began to scan around the area hoping to find something that would be good enough for her to live in, as nights will get cold, or that’s what she heard. So while walking, she looked over everything carefully, wanting to find the right place for the night.

((I edited a few things in your paragraph to help with grammar, and make it flow better. While you do give lots of details as to what Willow is doing, but I'd like to see you describe the scenery more. Ask yourself questions such as:
-What time of day is it? I think that it is night time, but the details don't support that too well.
-How heavily wooded is the forest? What kind of trees are in it?
-How much debris are on the forest floor?

These questions will help you add detail, until it just comes naturally.

I noticed that you say "So well" a lot. In most sentences, these two in this order don't flow very well. Either one is fine, but not together. Please try different ways to start sentences (it makes it flow better and more interesting). c;

KAYLA, you're up!

-Toxi))

[Stonefly]

((Bump, I dont want this to die))