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[lavendeer]

I really like your FALLEN ANGEL poem, but the only wonder I have is...
Why did falling in love make her shrivel up like a dead potato?

[SilverDust144]

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Warning, contains violence viewers discression is advised

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Authors note: As I have said, I do not rhyme when I write poems.

I Still Loved You

A light shone around you
I was lured like a moth

Your smile bright and charmed
I was weakened at the knees

Your eyes full of light and promise
I was fooled by the butterflies in my stomach

Your chiseled features inviting
I accepted with no knowledge

You opened your arms and brought me in
Like a fool, I allowed it

My heart beated for you
My breath came for you
My thoughts were for you
My soul existed for you
My smile shone for you
And my eyes worshiped you

You took my heart
You took my breath
You took my thoughts
You took my eyes
You took my smile
And then you took my soul

With your hands you
Shredded my soul with a smile,
tore my thoughts and demolished them with judgment,
smacked the smile off of my lips,
beat the breath out of my lungs,
and blinded my eyes while you did so

All that time I still stood by your side
I still loved you
My heart still beated for you
and I still worshipped you

Then you took a knife and struck me down
You ripped my heart out and held it in your hand as it beated
You smiled as you tore it apart
Then you threw it at me as I bled onto the street

But I still loved you
Through the pain,
I still loved you
Through the cruelty,
I still loved you
Through your hatred for me,
I still loved you
Through my dieing breath,
I still loved you

[SilverDust144]

I really like your FALLEN ANGEL poem, but the only wonder I have is...
Why did falling in love make her shrivel up like a dead potato?

Thank you, and actually, if you read the bible it's a sin for an angel to fall in love. So the poem is about and Angel falling in love and for their punishment, thay are stripped of their beauty and angelicness.

[lavendeer]

Oh... That makes sense... Like I said, I really love it!!! I PMed you my critiqued version that I'd love to use with your permission...

[SilverDust144]

We will talk about it in the PMs I replied to you and hopefully we can work somehting out

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Please don't copy without permission!

Comments more then welcomed and appreciated!

Warning: Violence is in this poem, Viewers discresion is advised.

Author's Note: All my poems are free verse/blank verse structure, meaning they don't rhyme or have a real structure, but do have a heart beat!

Pain

How can I open doors
When a flood of hurt drowns me?

How can I remove this knife
When someone pushes it into me?

How can I stop the flow of blood
When someone cuts a new wound into me?

How can I face the day
When I know that the shadows of night are all that linger?

How can I stand
When my foundation crumbles?

How can I live
When death is knocking at the door?

How can you say I'm free
When these chains bind me?

How can you say move on
When the past repeats?

How can you say I'm fine
When pain pulses through me?

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