I thought Rider was sweet ^^
I liked how patient he was... but we only know that because as readers we are privy to his thoughts. He doesn't actually speak much to her or really communicate his impulse to protect her. I might try to work a little more dialog into your woo. This is something I've noticed in a lot of forms recently- lots of thoughts, not much talking.
On a totally off topic limb- Lookie! I made a Godtier me =)
I'mma Mage of mind
I didn't do the base, just my face and some details.
