Private RP For Kayla, Kestral&Leo, and Stonefly

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Private RP For Kayla, Kestral&Leo, and Stonefly

Postby Toxi+Bbun » Sun Feb 26, 2012 7:07 am

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Welcome to your novice RP thread! My name is Toxi and I will be your proctor. Together we shall battle the forces of bad grammar and miss-spelt words and come out triumphant so that you may pass your novice test thread with flying colours!

The courses here at the RP school are made to improve your roleplay and overall writing skills, and we will be preparing you not only for RPing on CS, but also on actual RP sites.

Also, please keep in mind that you are more than welcome to quit at any time, but please tell me before you do so. If I become inactive, please PM bryght. letting her know so.

Goals for this Level;
•Character depth and insight
•Grammar and Spelling
•Fluidity
•Avoidance of Gary/Mary Sues and power playing/godmodding
•Turn Taking
•Post Length

This Thread was Created for…
•Kayla
•Billybobjoe123456
•Stonefly
This is a closed thread! If you would like a thread of your own like this, please apply at The RP School if it is open. If it is not, please bookmark it and wait until it has opened once more.

Creating Your Character;
As was previously mentioned, one of the aims of this level is to teach you to consider every aspect of your character, thus creating a well-developed character who has some sustenance to him or her. To begin with this, we at the RP School have created a basic outline that you may expand on (but not subtract from).
CHARACTER FORM
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[b]Name:[/b]
[b]Gender:[/b]
[b]Age Equivalent in Human Years:[/b]

[b]Fur colour:[/b]
[b]Eye colour:[/b]
[b]Height:[/b]
[b]Any accessories?:[/b] (FOR FANTASY ANIMAL RPS ONLY)
[b]Special Markings:[/b] (scars, etc?)
[b]Frame:[/b]

[b]History:[/b]

[b]Personality:[/b]

[b]Likes:[/b]
[b]Dislikes:[/b]

[b]Strengths:[/b]
[b]Weaknesses:[/b]

[b]Greatest Fear:[/b]
[b]Greatest Desire:[/b]

[b]Goals in life:[/b]

[b]What Does He/She Regret:[/b]
[b]What is He/She Proud of:[/b]

[b]Family life:[/b]

[b]Other:[/b]

[b]Picture:[/b]

Upon Acceptance
When your character is reviewed by your proctor and deemed worthy, you may proceed to roleplay. Please keep in mind that we are training you for role play sites as well as those rp threads here on CS, so we will be doing this in a turn-based fashion. Do not step out of turn.

Turns
Kayla > Kestral&Leo > Stonefly > Toxi

Once the proctor has posted, you may start from the beginning.
A proctor may post before their turn, only if post they are replying to requires immediate attention. (A student has powerplayed or godmodded)

Remember;
• When your proctor posts, it will be in this colour. Please keep your posts in black.
• When you are talking out of character (which shouldn’t happen often), always write in between double parenthesis.
• Use quotation marks! Also, you may wish to bold everything in quotation marks, as this makes it easier to distinguish talking from everything else.

Roleplay;
Okay! You have all chosen to do an animal roleplay, and that is what we will be focusing on. To start you on your roleplay adventure, I have written up a short prompt. Please continue with it, keeping in mind everything that is included in it.

Prompt;
The wind blows your fur around you, making it very difficult to see. The sky is dark, and the clouds are threatening to burst with each ground shaking roll of thunder. Just last week it was scorching hot. There was a tornado that week, and the debris still lay about the land. Welcome to Uri, the land of the weather.

Uri is a vast island that experiences all types of weather. You may choose any animal you like to be your RP character. But remember, this character will be facing all types of weather, even the most extreme.

For your convenience, all character bios will be reposted here;

Kayla wrote:Name:
Lakota
Gender:
Female
Age Equivalent in Human Years:
19

Fur colour:
Greyish Black
Eye colour:
Pink
Height:
--WIP--
Any accessories?:
All her bracelets and stuff.
Special Markings:
Hair
Frame:
Smaller side
History:
She was disowned by her mother. Her mother said she looked to much liker her dead father. She went through tough times with her family. Them arguing, and even worse, her mother killing her father. She always wants to have siblings.
Personality:
Lakota is generally a nice girl, except when bugs annoy her. She is very energetic, and mostly fun to be around. However, this behavior causes her hair to get all frizzy. Many males find her to be attractive female. Unfortunately, this attribute makes it tought to find your true love.
Likes:
Pink, the sun, love.
Dislikes:
Bugs, being called 'Cute', Fire.
Strengths:
Jumping, singing, running.
Weaknesses:
Dancing, hunting.
Greatest Fear:
Bugs
Greatest Desire:
To have a mate.
Goals in life:
To have a mate.
What Does She Regret:
Leaving her mother.
What is She Proud of:
Her Singing
Family life:
Her mother , her father, who her mother had killed. She always wishes for siblings but knows that will never happen, being disowned by her mother. She would always hang out with her father more than her mother.
Other:
Hai!
Picture:
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Re: Private RP For Kayla, Billybobjoe123456, and Stonefly

Postby kaypatts » Sun Feb 26, 2012 12:49 pm

Name:
Lakota
Gender:
Female
Age Equivalent in Human Years:
19

Fur colour:
Greyish Black
Eye colour:
Pink
Height:
--WIP--
Any accessories?:
All her bracelets and stuff.
Special Markings:
Hair
Frame:
Smaller side
History:
She was disowned by her mother. Her mother said she looked to much liker her dead father. She went through tough times with her family. Them arguing, and even worse, her mother killing her father. She always wants to have siblings.
Personality:
Lakota is generally a nice girl, except when bugs annoy her. She is very energetic, and mostly fun to be around. However, this behavior causes her hair to get all frizzy. Many males find her to be attractive female. Unfortunately, this attribute makes it tought to find your true love.
Likes:
Pink, the sun, love.
Dislikes:
Bugs, being called 'Cute', Fire.
Strengths:
Jumping, singing, running.
Weaknesses:
Dancing, hunting.
Greatest Fear:
Bugs
Greatest Desire:
To have a mate.
Goals in life:
To have a mate.
What Does She Regret:
Leaving her mother.
What is She Proud of:
Her Singing
Family life:
Her mother , her father, who her mother had killed. She always wishes for siblings but knows that will never happen, being disowned by her mother. She would always hang out with her father more than her mother.
Other:
Hai!
Picture:
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Re: Private RP For Kayla, Billybobjoe123456, and Stonefly

Postby Stonefly » Sun Feb 26, 2012 1:01 pm

Name:Willow
Gender:Female
Age Equivalent in Human Years:120

Fur colour:White
Eye colour:yellowish orange
Height: 26" at the shoulder
Any accessories?: N/A
Special Markings: N/A
Frame:

History: History: Willow was raised with no mother or father, just humans. She lived a life with humans who cared for her. Willow thought this life as normal, she didn't think anything of it. Well, growing up though she began to get made fun of because she was a wolf, and not a dog like everyone else. This caused her to think less of herself. When that happened, her life switched around and she hit a 'depressed' phase. This phase ran its course for a year. In that phase she didn't do anything but mope, sulk, and do nothing. The humans didn't want really anything to do with this moping, sulking, female. They threw her out. This was almost the death of her. Shehas still sulked. This happened for a week after she was thrown out. She then realized she wouldn't be able to live if she kept acting this way. So Willow tried her best to hunt and survive. but because Unfortunately,she didn't know how to hunt and she didn't really know what she needed other then a roof over her head and food. Thankfully, living in the wild she slowly began to get better at living on her own. In this time her body became skin and bones and she was near her death.


Personality:Willow is a sweet girl. She loves to be around others and to be doing things. She would rather be out with someone then by herself doing nothing at all. So this causes her to always be happy and looking for someone to taklk to. It is hard for a conversation to get akward with her because she will change the subject just like that and start talking agian. Other then that She loves to be around young pups and entertain them. The only down side to willow always being "happy' would be the fact that sometimes she looks overly happy and sometimes it can make other go away From her. There are a few things that bother herself, which would be how she thinks of herself. She seems to always Think that others are making fun or her..or even judging her. This is one of her worse things about her, is was mostly caused her to go into her depression

Likes:Pups, hunting, summer
Dislikes:being alone,lightning and thunder

Strengths:Hunting, because of her slime figure
Weaknesses:Fighting

Greatest Fear:Dieing
Greatest Desire:To have a famliy and to live a happy life

Goals in life:To have a family, be in a pack, to be happy

What Does He/She Regret:Her shild hood
What is He/She Proud of:Herself now, personality wise and just her thoughts about herself

Family life:since willow didn't know her real mother and father she's was raised by a little dog name daisy. Well growing up she had began to think humans were the only way of life. So growing up she had no idea about the wild and other wolves

Other:t

Picture:willow is a pure white wolf with deep dark hazel eyes. She has a short cropped tail, and ears that only bend around have way from the humans trying to make her dog like as possible
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Re: Private RP For Kayla, Kestral&Leo, and Stonefly

Postby .kestral » Thu Mar 01, 2012 10:00 am

Name:
Kadan
'Kade'
Gender:
Male
Age Equivalent in Human Years:
Roughly 21

Fur colour:
Deep black, grows paler around his muzzle and chest.
Eye colour:
Amber
Height:
34''
Any accessories?:
None
Special Markings:
Twin scars on each side of his muzzle shaped like lightning bolts. Another scar around his front left forepaw that completely encircles it.
Frame:
Well built, quite bulky.
History:
Kade was born to two parents who should have never been together, his father was an Omega in one of the friendliest packs in the area while his mother was the Alpha's mate in one of the fiercest packs. When Kade was born he was informed that he had no place in either pack and was swiftly sent to live in yet a third pack. He grew up there but when he was three his mothers mate discovered his existence and declared war. Rather than allow his pack and home to be lost Kade left.

Personality:
Kade is an extremely gentle and yet cheeky young wolf. He knows how to get a laugh out of others and loves to see them smile. Unfortunately his cheekiness has its downsides, it often leads to disagreements with older, bigger wolves. But even in the darkest situations, whether surrounded by enemies or struggling for food he knows that things can always get worse.
Likes:
Running
Ice
Rain
Swimming
Dislikes:
Fighting
When its too hot
Pack wolves

Strengths:
He is swift and is a good swimmer.
Weaknesses:
He may be well built but he isn't the best at fighting, he also has a fear of sand, it doesn't feel right.

Greatest Fear:
Being found and being the cause of war.
Greatest Desire:
Freedom, escape

Goals in life:
None really, mostly to survive.

What Does He/She Regret:
Being born.
What is He/She Proud of:
The fact he had the decency to leave rather than let others die for him.

Family life:
What family life? His only family were his friends.

Other:
None

Picture:
Not my picture, will make my own asap - http://fc00.deviantart.net/fs20/f/2007/ ... lStock.jpg
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Re: Private RP For Kayla, Kestral&Leo, and Stonefly

Postby Toxi+Bbun » Fri Mar 02, 2012 12:06 pm

((@ Kayla
    In this RP, the height is from the floor, to the shoulder blade when the canine is on all four legs. [link] The frame is whether they are on the skinny side [small], average sized [medium], or a bit on the thicker size [large].

    Histroy
    She was disowned by her mother. Her mother said she looked to much liker her dead father.
    She hates bugs, they annoy her.
    When she gets mad, her hair turns a dark red.

    Only the first line seems to be about her history. The other two seem to be part of the 'other' category. Most RPs ask for at least a paragraph or more of history. For this RP, I'd say at least 4 sentences. I suggest making her history longer. How was her family life before her dad died? How did her dad die? What age was she disowned at? What did she do to survive after she was disowned? Answering these questions will help make you character's history longer.

    Personality:
    She is very nice (When bugs don't bother her.)
    She is a energetic and fun girl. Boys ALWAYS
    crush on her.

    Most RPs ask for at least a paragraph or more of personality. For this RP, I'd say at least 4 sentences. This character seems a bit mary-sue like, seeing as she is very nice, and boys always crush on her. Instead of that I would say something like:
    Rough is generally a nice girl, except when __________. She is very energetic, and mostly fun to be around. However, this behavior causes _________. Many [males] find her to be attractive female. Unfortunately, this attribute makes _______.


    If you catch my drift, always have a down side to each personality trait to make your character less perfect.


    Family life:
    Her mother.'
    Her father died.
    Has no siblings


    Once again, I'd say at least 4 sentences. Family life not only includes who is in her family, but what it was like growing up for her. Please use full sentences.
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@ Stonefly
    The frame is whether they are on the skinny side [small], average sized [medium], or a bit on the thicker size [large].

    History: Willow was born with no mother or father. She was born into a life of humans who cared for her. Willow thought this life as normal and she didnt think anything of it. Well going up though she began to get made fun of because she was a wolf and not a dog like everyone else. This caused her to think less of herself. When that happened her life switched around and she hit the 'depressed' phase. This happened for a year. Well in that phase she didnt do anything but mope and sulk(sorry if spelt wrong) and do nothing. The humans didnt want really anything to do with the female that was moping and sulking they throw her out, this was almost the death of her. She has still sulked. This happened for a week after she was thrown out, then she realized she wouldn't be able to live if she kept this way. So Willow tried her best to hunt and live, but because she didn't know how to hunt and she didn't really know what she needed other then a roof over her head and food. Well living in the wild she slowly began to get better at living on her own. IN this time her body became skin and bones and she was near her death.


    The first sentence bothers me a bit. All creatures (that we know of) have a mother and father. You could say something like, "Willow did not grow up with her parents around. Instead, she was raised by humans." This paragraph seems to be a little choppy in some places, and many of the sentences start with the same word, making it a tad boring. Here is your paragraph edited:

    History: Willow was born with no mother or father. She lived a life with humans who cared for her. Willow thought this life as normal, she didn't think anything of it. Well, growing up though she began to get made fun of because she was a wolf, and not a dog like everyone else. This caused her to think less of herself. When that happened, her life switched around and she hit a 'depressed' phase. This phase ran its course for a year. In that phase she didn't do anything but mope, sulk, and do nothing. The humans didn't want really anything to do with this moping, sulking, female. They threw her out. This was almost the death of her. Shehas still sulked. This happened for a week after she was thrown out. She then realized she wouldn't be able to live if she kept acting this way. So Willow tried her best to hunt and survive. but because Unfortunately,she didn't know how to hunt and she didn't really know what she needed other then a roof over her head and food. Thankfully, living in the wild she slowly began to get better at living on her own. In this time her body became skin and bones and she was near her death.


    Personality:Willow is a sweet girl. She loves to be around others and to be doing things. She would rather be out with someone then by herself doing nothing at all. So this causes her to always be happy and looking for someone to taklk to. It is hard for a conversation to get akward with her because she will change the subject just like that and start talking agian. Other then that She loves to be around young pups and entertain them.

    I'd say that it seems like Willow only has good traits. As I say, always have a down side to each personality trait to make your seem character less perfect. Also, please keep in mind her history when making her personality.

    Family life:
    Mother- unknown
    Father- unknown

    Once again, I'd say at least 4 sentences. Family life not only includes who is in her family (for her, humans) , but what it was like growing up for her. Please use full sentences.

    I wouldn't say the picture is necessary, but it is helpful! You could probably do a description. c;

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@ Kestral&Leo
Very good! From what I can see, you have little to no grammatical/spelling errors. The only thing I'd say is to make the personality longer (at least 4 sentences), and to add a downside for each personality trait.
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Everyone, please use the suggestions I gave you so that way I can "officially" accept you all into the RP and we can start. c:

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Re: Private RP For Kayla, Kestral&Leo, and Stonefly

Postby kaypatts » Fri Mar 02, 2012 12:33 pm

I changed my form, are you Toxi or Bbun?
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Re: Private RP For Kayla, Kestral&Leo, and Stonefly

Postby Toxi+Bbun » Fri Mar 02, 2012 1:49 pm

Kayla wrote:I changed my form, are you Toxi or Bbun?

((I'm Toxi. c; Your form looks great! Accepted!))

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Re: Private RP For Kayla, Kestral&Leo, and Stonefly

Postby .kestral » Mon Mar 05, 2012 4:19 am

(Made my edits, hope it's ok now)
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Re: Private RP For Kayla, Kestral&Leo, and Stonefly

Postby Toxi+Bbun » Mon Mar 05, 2012 4:28 am

Kestral&Leo wrote:
(Made my edits, hope it's ok now)

((It looks great, accepted!))
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Re: Private RP For Kayla, Kestral&Leo, and Stonefly

Postby kaypatts » Mon Mar 05, 2012 6:09 am

((Thank you! When do we start!))
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