Writers, UNITE!

[Dr. Mirtachu]

decidet to write a poem for a little person that i miss very much...soo i will write it as an original in my home language because i don't think that it is good to translate poems. it looses it's meaning. at least i will say it's about a little girl who passed away 4 years ago, and i recently thought of her again. i know this means nothing to you but i needed to post it here...
I spremam se spremam,
Da ti napisem nesto,
Ali sto reci,
Kad je srcu tesko pisati.

Tesko je jeziku
Obratiti ti se nijemo,
Tesko je ocima
Gledati te nevidljivu.

Ono malo sjaja,
Da mi je vratiti
Tebi, samo tebi,
Da mi je pokloniti.

Veselje tvoje
Meni da je kupiti
Privuci si ponovno
Dio tebe.

I kako onda da ti pisem,
Kad zaboraviti te ionako ne umijem?

[Kitty67]

I want to join the Writing Army!
Username (put in color you want me to put your name in): Kitty67
Do you promise to write something at LEAST once a week?: i'll try
What's your favorite color? black white and blue
Animal? ehhh a tiger, wolf, or cat
Fish? Bettas and Guppys
Type of mythical creature? Werewolf or Dragon
Do you like fairies, elves, or evil creatures? It kind of depends but yes, i like them
Anything else (do not leave blank): I'm in a literture (sorry for bad spelling) club.. I do lots of music and I read alot

[Loly27]

Are you still accepting? If so:

I want to join the Writing Army!
Username: Flutter_Phoenix
Do you promise to write something at LEAST once a week? Yes. Once in a while I MAY POSSIBLY forget
What's your favorite color? White.
Animal? I like owls :3 And stags. Stags are cool too. And snow white leopards. Umm, can I choose all animals?
Fish? Hmm. I like koi
Type of mythical creature? Griffins, Phoenix's, werewolves, dragons, everything. XD
Do you like fairies, elves, or evil creatures? Yes.
Anything else (do not leave blank): Not much. I like to draw, I like to write, I like to read. Yea, I guess that's pretty much it.

[ishabeel]

I want to join the Writing Army!
Username: ishabeel
Do you promise to write something at LEAST once a week? Pwomise :33
What's your favorite color? IDK actually. I suppose black and navy.. dark stuff xD
Animal? Horsies and wolfehs.
Fish? Ew fish.
Type of mythical creature? Vampires
Do you like fairies, elves, or evil creatures? Elves.
Anything else (do not leave blank): I lyke yew :3

[wolves+horses]

Wow, I haven't been on here in a long time! So... Sorry about the weekly writings being late...

BUT anyway: I was digging around in my old school stuff from 6th grade (I luv memory lane! ), and I found some story beginnings that I think are still pretty good (though I've altered them a bit; mostly just adding a little). Could anyone please tell me which they like best? Thanks a bunch!

1.)Various pitches of metallic clinks jingled overhead as my charm-bracelet soared across the grassy field. I lunged forward and outspread my hand. It skidded across my fingertips. My stomach tightened as the realization that I hadn't caught it set in. And my world began to crumble apart when I heard the exquisite piece of jewelry dropping into the murky pond.
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2.)She listened intently to the rhythmic pounding of hoofbeats on sand. The creature's creamy-white mane wildly flailed out behind it. It stopped abruptly, a wave of sand spit out in front. Then it thrusted itself upward and kicked at the sky with pearly hooves. Chilled night air fluttered across its silky, pale coat. This animal may not have had a spiral horn, but there was no mistaking that this was the most magical of all things; the very symbol of purity itself; a unicorn.
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3.)A net of shining stars hung delicately from the black velvet sky as pale moonlight cast its beauty on the dark, rolling hills that the lycan called home. At least for now. The gaze of his shadowy eyes rippled across the world around him, absorbing everything. Soon he would leave, as he always did. He couldn't risk getting found by any humans. Except for one. The girl who, quite literally, showed up endlessly in his dreams, though he did not know her name. He had to find her. Had to know who she was.

Sorry if I'm being rude by reposting this, but... Um... Could I please have some criticism? Even if you don't like any; I don't care if you think more improvement. If they need improvement, please tell me!

[Brightpaw]

I like 1.

[GentleMonster]

I want to join the Writing Army!
Username: GentleMonster
Do you promise to write something at LEAST once a week? i will try my best
What's your favorite color? BLUE!!!
Animal? horse!!!
Fish? none
Type of mythical creature? unicorn
Do you like fairies, elves, or evil creatures? nope
Anything else (do not leave blank): Once a month I have horse shows and that takes up 4 days a week. but i promise to try my absolute best to post something on the remaining 3 days.

[comcom123]

decidet to write a poem for a little person that i miss very much...soo i will write it as an original in my home language because i don't think that it is good to translate poems. it looses it's meaning. at least i will say it's about a little girl who passed away 4 years ago, and i recently thought of her again. i know this means nothing to you but i needed to post it here...
I spremam se spremam,
Da ti napisem nesto,
Ali sto reci,
Kad je srcu tesko pisati.

Tesko je jeziku
Obratiti ti se nijemo,
Tesko je ocima
Gledati te nevidljivu.

Ono malo sjaja,
Da mi je vratiti
Tebi, samo tebi,
Da mi je pokloniti.

Veselje tvoje
Meni da je kupiti
Privuci si ponovno
Dio tebe.

I kako onda da ti pisem,
Kad zaboraviti te ionako ne umijem?

I read this poem, and I want to thank you for writing it. It is a beautiful peice of work and it spoke to me deeply. And It dose mean somthing to me.

[min yoongi]

decidet to write a poem for a little person that i miss very much...soo i will write it as an original in my home language because i don't think that it is good to translate poems. it looses it's meaning. at least i will say it's about a little girl who passed away 4 years ago, and i recently thought of her again. i know this means nothing to you but i needed to post it here...
I spremam se spremam,
Da ti napisem nesto,
Ali sto reci,
Kad je srcu tesko pisati.

Tesko je jeziku
Obratiti ti se nijemo,
Tesko je ocima
Gledati te nevidljivu.

Ono malo sjaja,
Da mi je vratiti
Tebi, samo tebi,
Da mi je pokloniti.

Veselje tvoje
Meni da je kupiti
Privuci si ponovno
Dio tebe.

I kako onda da ti pisem,
Kad zaboraviti te ionako ne umijem?

I read this poem, and I want to thank you for writing it. It is a beautiful peice of work and it spoke to me deeply. And It dose mean somthing to me.

Oh my Lord Mirta, this is beautiful ;.; I almost cried while I read it... May she rest in piece...

[comcom123]

decidet to write a poem for a little person that i miss very much...soo i will write it as an original in my home language because i don't think that it is good to translate poems. it looses it's meaning. at least i will say it's about a little girl who passed away 4 years ago, and i recently thought of her again. i know this means nothing to you but i needed to post it here...
I spremam se spremam,
Da ti napisem nesto,
Ali sto reci,
Kad je srcu tesko pisati.

Tesko je jeziku
Obratiti ti se nijemo,
Tesko je ocima
Gledati te nevidljivu.

Ono malo sjaja,
Da mi je vratiti
Tebi, samo tebi,
Da mi je pokloniti.

Veselje tvoje
Meni da je kupiti
Privuci si ponovno
Dio tebe.

I kako onda da ti pisem,
Kad zaboraviti te ionako ne umijem?

I read this poem, and I want to thank you for writing it. It is a beautiful peice of work and it spoke to me deeply. And It dose mean somthing to me.

Oh my Lord Mirta, this is beautiful ;.; I almost cried while I read it... May she rest in piece...

may she rest in peace, and may your heart be at rest, for she is watching you now from the heavens, or even down on earth, with a loving look, and a cradling wind.