Roleplay School, Class: Extra Tuition - Length and Spelling

[flutterby.]

Welcome, to the extra / 1x1 class for length and spelling. Whether you signed yourself up or your proctor did, you have willingly allowed yourself to join my class. I hope you enjoy your time here!

~ b e r t l e ~, your tutor.

[flutterby.]

Lesson: Length

I have gone through so many roleplays where the last post was:

He smiled.

or the 'better' alternative:

His dad said "Hi."

What I want to find is something like:

The joke that Katie had told wasn't funny at all, but John felt inclined to smile, at least a little bit.

or

Charlie's father, Peter, saw his son and what he thought to be Charlie's girlfriend together on the couch. "Hi, kids. Do you need anything? Popcorn, a drink maybe?" He asked, noticing the movie playing.

Any way, the purpose of this lesson is getting you from something like this:

Amellie had a good time at the club. It was her hen night, so she, four friends and her mom went out, drinking despite being underage. They got back at ten to one, and they went to bed. The next day, Amellie went to the room that contained everything for her wedding.

to this:

♥Amellie Jones♥
♥18♥
♥Engaged♥

Jessamy, Jolie and Annalisse had managed to score a few numbers each from various levels of scum sitting at the bar in the club. Amellie had joined them, gaining many numbers on her arm too, but with no interest in them. She hoped the pen would go by the morning, even if she had to stay up all night scrubbing it. She had downed shot after shot of vodka with various flavorings added, but the alcohol hadn't made her drunk. Yet. "Come on, A J J!" She used their old nicknames. "Please can we go, I'm going to be a Mrs in less than 12 hours, and I need to sleep for at least a couple of hours!" They reluctantly agreed and they then attempted to find Mrs Jones, who was eventually found by the very drunk Jo, dancing on the floor with some equally aged man. Jess dragged her away and the four of them dragged her into the limousine, which took them back. They all arrived back to the manor at 12.48, and Anna, Jess and Jo were to stay the night, well, one would sleep while the other two finalized any very last minute tasks. They agreed to swap over sleeping every hour while they let Amellie sleep. Despite the fact that they would have just over 2 hours sleep each, they felt that Mi deserved to have the full six hours.

TIMESKIP TO WHEN SHE WAKES UP (you can carry on with whatever time you want, though)

The girls prodded Mi awake at seven in the morning exactly. She didn't have a trace of a hangover, but she didn't risk anymore champagne. She crept (un-needingly) into the room full of the dresses and accessories for the wedding. She walked in and found everything just as she'd left it. Everything was ready.

I fully understand that this is barely semi-literate, but this is way more helpful than the other example.TIP #1: If you are new to semi-lit, keep one or two illiterate roleplays so you can have a roleplay going even if you have no muse.