[Chadanaiy]

*deep breath* So... This is my first time posting in intermediate.... *nervous* If it's not good enough tell me please, I don't mind if it gets moved to beginners...

Anyway, these are two of my OCs, the personifications of two weapons I own. Shira (on the left) is a katana that I bought at the JapanExpo in Paris last summer, she's a replica of Ulquiorra's zanpaktou from Bleach. She's easily irritated, proud, thinks I'm a freak, likes sarcasm and fighting. I try not to remind her that she's only a replica and that I can't weild her, she already has enough trouble trying to forget the fact herself...

Akumu (on the right, hey wait, no duh...) is my white recurve bow. She's indiferent to about every single thing in existence, doesn't talk unless she's required to do so and all in all is quite robotic like. Most of the time she sits on my chair and looks at my wall for hours on end with that same blank expression...

So I was telling myself that I hadn't posted on the Oekaki for a while and that I wanted to get better at drawing those two. Shira and Akumu don't get along too well for some unexplained reason (or more Shira doesn't like Akumu and Akumu couldn't care less) so this idea of having them back to back just popped up and here it is...

The timer is a liar, I have no clue how much time this took but certainly not that much (I left this open for lunch and such and got distracted too often) The shading still needs a whole lot of work and I'd planned nothing out for what the light would be like so it looks really blank. Obviously I still need to finish Akumu which I hope will take less time considering she's entierly monochromatic and I need to come up with a background. Drawing hair on Oekaki has been added to my list of 'biggest annoyances in the universe' next to alarm clocks and the cafeteria queue...

Sorry this is a major WIP...
Please comment and tell me how I could improve this

[yamideteru]

Oh I think this is amazing! Nothing that I can see that you can improve ^.^

[Chadanaiy]

Thank you so much
Though I'm sure there's ways I can improve it... I'm not satisfied with Shira's face for some unfathomable reason. Ugh, I hate that feeling...

[yamideteru]

Well, maybe her chin is a bit too big, what do you think?

[Chadanaiy]

Hum... I dunno.... I wasn't sure so I looked up an image (actually I tend to look at myself in a mirror or something to make sure nothing's off and my chin does have a funky angle) But... I dunno...
http://us.123rf.com/400wm/400/400/domen ... y-skin.jpg

[yamideteru]

Not me either :p But try to make it a little bit smaller and then just see how it looks, and if you don't like it, just dont save it? (;

[Chadanaiy]

Yup
Wait... Maybe it's just the skin color, it looks different on the other computer. And her forehead may need fixing... Oh well, I'll work on it when I have the time.

[Zede]

Wow! This is is really good. It's a whole lot better looking than the other oekakis you've done of people.
My critique of Shiira: The neck looks just wrong. I mean, a neck is never absolutely straight nor absolutely vertical. Otherwise, the nose doesn't stick out enough. The forehead is a bit too far out, I think, and the chin doesn't have enough definition (IMHO the line should go in a bit more and come back out more). The hair falls weirdly above the ear.
But it's really, really good. The shadowing is incredibly well done and the overall proportions are good.
Shiira is awesome XD

[SilverFangs]

I likes it

[Chadanaiy]

Thank you for your comments everyone ^_^
And yes Ni-chan Shira is awesome. My drawings if her on the other hand are not... Anyway... I'll just fiddle with it later and try to find the whatzit that's wrong and annoying me about Shira's face (skin color maybe? Huh...) or maybe start Akumu... I'll get more time to work on it during to vacation at least...