Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L)

[andromeda;;]

Thanks for the welcome! (:

[MoonheartTheWarrior]

Also moonheart - with the mary-sue thing, a LOT of main characters in books have "tragic" childhoods, that doesn't make them mary-sues. You could always try taking the mary-sue litmus test to find out? :P

I've taken that test many times when making RP characters, but it's not that helpful unless I try to make my characters anthros while taking it...

Anyways, this is just one paragraph (about shark finning, and is still a WIP x3) that tells people about shark finning and shark fin soup. Also, this will most likely have a lot of spelling errors because we wrote it on paper. Also, yes, I did write some things in italics:

Shark finning is the act of cutting off only the fins of whatever shark you may have caught while anglering/fishing (for sharks) & discarding the rest of the shark to die a (probably) slow & painful death. For (poisonous) soup. Yes, posionous soup. If you've ever had Shark Find Soup, you may be wondering what I mean by poisonous. Shark fins contain high levels of (the metal, not planet) mercury, also known as hydrargyrum or quicksilver. Inside of mercury is cinnabar (or mercuric sulfide) which, if digested, can kill you, or the dust is inhaled and enters your bloodstream, you would go crazy & die another way. Also, dried shark fins (the ones that go into the soup) contain a higher amount of mercury than all other fish products. Many people who eat the soup believe it'll make them healthier, yet this just proves that "fact" wrong. Another thing about the soup, which makes me pretty angry, is that the fins only give the soup "texture"; the other ingredients give it the taste

Wow. The actual paragraph seemed to take up much more space than this does... :/

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Username:
. a rising storm .
What will we call you:
You may call me Storm.
What are your goals as an author?
- Well, one is to actually publish a book.
- To complete my first book.
- To be better in descriptive writing.
Can you give us a sample of your writing?
"Alex, no!" a voice sounded in Alex's ears, but she barely heard the noise above her pounding heart and thundering feet. Her breath came in heavy gasps for air, and wide blue eyes were clearly able to be seen in the pure darkness. But there was a light...a light up ahead that caught Alex's attention. Snapping her head back, Alex looked behind her, and there was a shadow moving stealthily along behind her, and it stopped as soon as the brown-haired girl turned her gaze toward it. But...it didn't look like a normal person. It was low, like a moving tiger. And the body was perfectly in...animal shape. But as Alex looked back, she was shoved heftily to the ground, and the girl fell back with a cry of both pain and fear. She hit the ground with a 'thud!' and all went black.

Silence. Eeery,empty silence that was too loud for Alex to bare. She raised her head groggily and looked around, blinking her bright, distinctive blue eyes, clearing the blood from them. Her mind was shoved back to before. How long had she been out? A couple minutes, hours...days? She raised her head, heaving herself up onto her elbow for support, and looked around. She was in a large, leery ware-house. Not a thing move, and nothing sounded. Which was weird for Alex. She has last been in a forest. But then it all came back to her. The running, the voice, the shadow...and then it had all darkened. It was like Alex needed a flash-light to brighten the memory, but she couldn't search her mind anymore. She flopped down onto the concrete floor, and closed her eyes, hoping to regain her energy.
Are you currently working on any books?
Yes, I am, actually. I am hoping to finish my first book, Misty Rain.
Why do you want to join?
I want to join because I want to show people my deep respect for writing, and I want to share other's opinions, and keep other's opinions in my mind for writing. I am hoping to get some advice for my book, and I am surely wanting to help out anyone who needs it.
Do you have published books yet?
No, actually, I do not. I am working on my book right now.
Do you wish to find a "writing partner"?
Well, not in real life, of course, but I am willing to have a writing partner to make a story here on Chicken Smoothie.
What Role(s):
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What's your favorite Genre?
My favourite Genre is Fiction, mostly. I do not really like to write Non-Fiction stories, but I like to make my own up.
What kind of books do you write?
I mostly will write anything animal type, and some fantasy teen such as stuff like The Hunger games, but not the actual topic, but stuff similar. But I also like stuff where some teens will have to face the greatest super-natural challenge of their life, and stuff like that. I like to write actual novels.

[*~.Imagination.~*]

Storm- Accepted! ^.^ I'm Imagination, the insane Mini-Mod of Awe!
Role(s) refers to what kind of writer you are. Like Poet, Novelist, etc.

Horse- I thought we where getting rid of Role(s) because of how confusing it was?

[MoonheartTheWarrior]

-not a mini-mod or horse, but whatever-
She did; Storm filled in the previous thread's form x3
This one says "Where you a member of the previous thread?" at the end, Storm's form didn't have that, and Horse removed the role part of the form :33

[violacherry]

Idea (btw, in the story every animal (except for humans x3) can understand all other types of animals that are mammals/fish/avians/reptiles/amphibians/etc. like that animal. If that made any sense. At all.) That I Think Makes the Main Character Seem Like a Mary-Sue:

The main character is an almost ordinary female house-cat. She doesn't have many friends, and she's been to the pet store/pound/shelter multiple times because of the same reason:
She's a shy little cat who was born mute, and when she was a kitten, she got cancer and had to get surgery to get rid of half of her left-back leg which had cancer.
Other than only having 3 and a half legs and physically being unable to talk, she's just like every other cat she's ever met, although many cats tend to stay away from her because they think she's just pretending to be mute and is an attention seeker, and they don't know what happened to her leg so they think she's just plain stupid and managed to get half of her leg cut off.
One day, shortly after being adopted for the 7th time, her owners lock her outside and completely forget about her for a few days, so she runs away.
In the middle of Autumn.
She learned how to hunt because of an elderly tom who took pity on her because she was a very young cat and had such a severe injury and had no friends because she couldn't talk, so she managed to survive, but she never got to have enough food for her to have a full stomach, but she decided it was better than nothing.
After a few weeks, she bumped into a feral she-cat who is a bit older than her, and the she-cat screams at her because she scared away the she-cat's kill, since the she-cat was hunting, and she attacks the main character, who limps away as fast as she can, but the feral she-cat continues attacking her for a few minutes until the she-cat gets bored and goes back to hunting.
The main character lies down near a small tree, groaning from all the scratches, and tries to fall asleep, but her shoulders sting because the she-cat got a lot of (deep) scratches there. She eventually manages to fall asleep.
The main character wakes up to see a tom staring at her, and she nearly jumps, but then lies back down in pain, and feels that her shoulders sting a bit more.
The tom tries to get the main character to talk, but it took him a while to realize she's mute.

This is all I have so far.
I think the main character seems a bit like a mary-sue because she had cancer and can't talk...
I thought of it while watching happy feet (some how) while getting a surgery while I was awake :33

Actually - I think that makes her more of an Anti-sue, especially if she is unable to talk for the entire story. being mute is a real challenge that she would have to live with, and it's just made worse by the fact she's missing half of a leg. What would be sue-ish is if she, oh i don't know, could suddenly talk, and never got injured, never died (or almost died and kept coming to life in a short amount of time), was amazing all the time, her leg grows back and she takes vengeance on those who were mean to her.. or.. something D:

And as for what you outlined already - i like the idea it sounds... cute.. XD

Yeah (about her suddenly being able to talk x3), while writing the plot idea (or what I have so far), the last line in the plot said:
"Then the main character and the tom had a conversation"
and then I read the thing again and remembered that I made her mute so I changed it to
"The tom tries to get the main character to talk, but it took him a while to realize she's mute."
I also like writing stories where there isn't much talking because then I don't have something like that I had in the writing example in my form, and the character will be able to think more rather than talking.
In a way, other than the cancer, the main character relates to me a little bit about the mute thing, but I can talk, but I just prefer being quiet and I think a lot more when I'm quiet.
Also, sometimes I think people can hear what I'm thinking.
Like, once, my parents asked me if I wanted ice cream when it was almost 30 degrees celsius.
I thought "Yes, of course I'd want ice cream. It's boiling!" and stared at them, expecting them to hear what I just thought.
And I just stare at them for a few minutes before realizing they didn't hear what I was thinking.
I'm pretty stupid at times x3

Also, thanks :3
I was thinking that she would meet a dog instead of the tom, though... But I think that'll just happen later on.
Maybe she met the dog as a kitten and forgot about the dog until she meets the dog again or something? I don't know

I still think she's a bit of a mary-sue because mary-sues often have tragic childhoods.
The main character never had an owner for more than 2 months.
She had cancer and her leg had to get cut off because of that. (I've seen many dogs like that, but they where missing their whole leg. But I've yet to see a cat... But I find it easier to write as a cat more than anything, so...)
She is mute. Which I think might be a kind of handicap, like being blind or deaf is.
She has little/no friends.
That seems a bit tragic. Or at least sad. Ish.
So that makes me fear she's a mary-sue...

I usally right in first person...I belive its easier to write and get feelings, ideas, and the background of the storu across

and as for a mary-sue......yeah I belive that would be a little mary-sueish seems how I tried doin a character sorta like that and it was a horrible story, only wrote a page on it

[Vur Horston]

Has anyone ever did anything in second person?

[MoonheartTheWarrior]

Has anyone ever did anything in second person?

Is there such a thing as 2nd person?
My language teacher never heard of it... :/

[Vur Horston]

Has anyone ever did anything in second person?

Is there such a thing as 2nd person?
My language teacher never heard of it...

Yeah I thought there was. Second person is you did this...you walked down the hallway.

[MBRShorse]

Ahhhhh, crazy day yesterday! But back now!

Yes, I will add the useful links to the front page. I love behindthename.com! I'm very meticulous with names, so it is a great help!

Yes, I think there is a 600,000 word character limit...or was it 60,000? Either way, we met it, so I'm going to change everything today and add in the new members.

Storm's form is the old form, so I will need it changed to the new form.

Did I miss anything?

Thank you everyone for being so helpful when I am absent! And I love your conversations; friendly and on topic, just the way I like it!