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[violacherry]

I have to ramble on about an idea I had so her goes nothing:
In a past set world, a girl named Akito is growing up as a normal girl in a normal family. However, her parents don't like her because she is blind and think she is worthless. WHen news of a prophecy reaches their lands, everyone thinks the person in the prophecy is her brother, Matheorn. However, she is the first of seven children who need to band together to save the world as they know it. In this, they all have some sort of physical or mental complication (Deaf, blind, scizoprenia ect) but together each person can work as the part another person doesn't have.

That sound's like a great story line, if you play it out right. I would definitely stick to their disability. Also, don't give them powers. That would just blow up the part about them being different.


Question for you guys though - do you write in order, or in bits and pieces and then join them up? I've tried both ways (different way for each story) and i've found that the one i've written in order, i have a lot more actually written down (say, easily 70-80 pages) but the one that is in bits and pieces i have more of the story/plot thought out and in wayy more detail...

So there's this little Jewish girl who has lived with a German family since she was a few months old. Her birth family had been taken away to a concentration camp, but the baby was hidden and not taken.
So this little girl and boy, about nine and thirteen, respectively, are exploring the little town they live in. They see the abandoned house and want to go in it, because that's what curious kids do.
They find the little baby and take her home, luckily without getting noticed by the Nazis..
So this is her German family.
The family she lives with is a good family. They protect her. That's about when the prologue would end.
So the girl is about five here and she doesn't know that she is a Jew. She doesn't even know she was adopted. She just knows she looks different.
The older brother that had found her is becoming influenced by Hitler's speeches. He wants to become a soldier. (he's about 18)

Later on in the story the little girl is taken to a concentration camp.
Either before that or after, the brother becomes a soldier, but instead of fighting in the war, he has to work at a concentration camp.
So his little sister is in that concentration camp, and he understands how awful hitler is. He starts changing the other soldiers minds about Jews. One tries to shoot him. Another helps him. He has a hard time, but eventually he helps most of the Jews escape.

((I might completely change it. I dunno)[/quote] @followyourheart i agree with chef kitty you gotta hav them stick to one disablity

@chefkitty thats great but becareful not to offend or get some of the history off. oh and i write in order so i can just get everything right and i know i won't be to repitive or change a detail or something

[Chef Kitty]

Yeah. I plan to research it a lot.

[violacherry]

ok then i think it will be a great book as long as you don't mess up history

[MoonheartTheWarrior]

I just remembered part of a plot idea I got a couple years ago, but it's about humans and I can not write anything from the perspective of a human... And I have a feeling that this has already been done a lot. Also, part of it was influenced by Avatar. -is obsessed with Avatar. Especially the giant mushroom scene- o3o

Anyways, I think this is what the plot was:
The main character is a spoiled 13 year old who is turning 14 when a bomb strikes her town, very close to her house. Her mother, who has walking nearby, gets injured by it and has to go to the hospital. On the main character's birthday, her mother dies and her best friend gets killed by a bomb that exploded near her school. Shortly after that, the school day ended early and her best friend went to the hospital, and the main character gets depression and refuses to do anything for a few days, and she barely eats or drinks anything.
~~~~Time Skip~~~~
A few days later, the main character finally feels better and she leaves her room, starving, and looks for food, when she notices how quiet the house seems. Then she hears some gun shots, a sound completely foreign to her, and something hitting some rocks. She looks for a window, and finds one after a few minutes and sees an elderly man lying on the ground, bleeding from his forehead. The main character screams, and some more gun shots can be heard in the distance. The main character faints after this.
~~~~Another Time Skip That Lasts a Couple Hours~~~~
The main character wakes up in a strange looking place. She notices it smells like a bunch of flowers she often smelled near her school, and she also sees some berry stains on the walls surrounding her. She thinks the stains look a little bit like a map of her town, but more messy, and with a bunch of "X's on some places. A few shapes on the "map" are where the main character believes her house and school are, and she notices a few "O"s all over the "map", but she has no clue what they mean. She guesses the "X"s are supposed to show places that got blown up. She sees a small "O" nearby where she thinks her house is. Then, she hears a noise behind her, and see someone walk in. (I believed I was going to name that person "Willow") Willow has long, dark brown hair, with a few areas of it that looked like it got dyed green in some areas, and the main character stares at Willow in confusion. After a few seconds, two cats walk in, and she realizes she's in someone's house. Willow notices the main character, and glares at her.

And I forgot what the rest of the plot was going to be. I think it reminds me a bit of the Hunger Games, and maybe some of Avatar before the last season/"book". o3o

[violacherry]

it doesn't remind me of that.....i think it would be pretty good. right on it and then see if it still sounds like it to you

[Lasesi]

@Chef Kitty - Don't worry too much about the history unless you really want too, you can always make up historical fiction But I really like the idea :d Maybe you could have the brother know some important intel on hitler, and then he joins the ally's or something in return for his family's safety (It would be a logical way for him to free the people in the concentration camps as well ) which ultimately leads to hitlers downfall! But yeah - also don't worry too much about offending people, if they can't take it, they don't have to read it, end of (Think books like catcher in the rye etc that are supposedly oh so "offensive") it's good to break the rules - it's why they exist!

I just remembered part of a plot idea I got a couple years ago, but it's about humans and I can not write anything from the perspective of a human... And I have a feeling that this has already been done a lot. Also, part of it was influenced by Avatar. -is obsessed with Avatar. Especially the giant mushroom scene- o3o

Anyways, I think this is what the plot was:
The main character is a spoiled 13 year old who is turning 14 when a bomb strikes her town, very close to her house. Her mother, who has walking nearby, gets injured by it and has to go to the hospital. On the main character's birthday, her mother dies and her best friend gets killed by a bomb that exploded near her school. Shortly after that, the school day ended early and her best friend went to the hospital, and the main character gets depression and refuses to do anything for a few days, and she barely eats or drinks anything.
~~~~Time Skip~~~~
A few days later, the main character finally feels better and she leaves her room, starving, and looks for food, when she notices how quiet the house seems. Then she hears some gun shots, a sound completely foreign to her, and something hitting some rocks. She looks for a window, and finds one after a few minutes and sees an elderly man lying on the ground, bleeding from his forehead. The main character screams, and some more gun shots can be heard in the distance. The main character faints after this.
~~~~Another Time Skip That Lasts a Couple Hours~~~~
The main character wakes up in a strange looking place. She notices it smells like a bunch of flowers she often smelled near her school, and she also sees some berry stains on the walls surrounding her. She thinks the stains look a little bit like a map of her town, but more messy, and with a bunch of "X's on some places. A few shapes on the "map" are where the main character believes her house and school are, and she notices a few "O"s all over the "map", but she has no clue what they mean. She guesses the "X"s are supposed to show places that got blown up. She sees a small "O" nearby where she thinks her house is. Then, she hears a noise behind her, and see someone walk in. (I believed I was going to name that person "Willow") Willow has long, dark brown hair, with a few areas of it that looked like it got dyed green in some areas, and the main character stares at Willow in confusion. After a few seconds, two cats walk in, and she realizes she's in someone's house. Willow notices the main character, and glares at her.

And I forgot what the rest of the plot was going to be. I think it reminds me a bit of the Hunger Games, and maybe some of Avatar before the last season/"book". o3o

Hmm.. it doesn't sound similar to anything I know about.. if you could remember any more of the plot that would be great but i agree with Violacherry! you should keep writing it and see where it leads you ^_^

[uhtan]

I love Avatar, my friends and I have a little mushroom joke going around: 'You aren;t being a friendly mushroom!'

[Chef Kitty]

I just remembered part of a plot idea I got a couple years ago, but it's about humans and I can not write anything from the perspective of a human... And I have a feeling that this has already been done a lot. Also, part of it was influenced by Avatar. -is obsessed with Avatar. Especially the giant mushroom scene- o3o

Anyways, I think this is what the plot was:
The main character is a spoiled 13 year old who is turning 14 when a bomb strikes her town, very close to her house. Her mother, who has walking nearby, gets injured by it and has to go to the hospital. On the main character's birthday, her mother dies and her best friend gets killed by a bomb that exploded near her school. Shortly after that, the school day ended early and her best friend went to the hospital, and the main character gets depression and refuses to do anything for a few days, and she barely eats or drinks anything.
~~~~Time Skip~~~~
A few days later, the main character finally feels better and she leaves her room, starving, and looks for food, when she notices how quiet the house seems. Then she hears some gun shots, a sound completely foreign to her, and something hitting some rocks. She looks for a window, and finds one after a few minutes and sees an elderly man lying on the ground, bleeding from his forehead. The main character screams, and some more gun shots can be heard in the distance. The main character faints after this.
~~~~Another Time Skip That Lasts a Couple Hours~~~~
The main character wakes up in a strange looking place. She notices it smells like a bunch of flowers she often smelled near her school, and she also sees some berry stains on the walls surrounding her. She thinks the stains look a little bit like a map of her town, but more messy, and with a bunch of "X's on some places. A few shapes on the "map" are where the main character believes her house and school are, and she notices a few "O"s all over the "map", but she has no clue what they mean. She guesses the "X"s are supposed to show places that got blown up. She sees a small "O" nearby where she thinks her house is. Then, she hears a noise behind her, and see someone walk in. (I believed I was going to name that person "Willow") Willow has long, dark brown hair, with a few areas of it that looked like it got dyed green in some areas, and the main character stares at Willow in confusion. After a few seconds, two cats walk in, and she realizes she's in someone's house. Willow notices the main character, and glares at her.

And I forgot what the rest of the plot was going to be. I think it reminds me a bit of the Hunger Games, and maybe some of Avatar before the last season/"book". o3o

I would love to read that book. Just those paragraphs sound awesome, and even paraphrasing your idea is great writing (in comparison to my idea sketch-ups)

Can you guys help me think of a new name for my temporarily named group "The Society"? They're the antagonists (bad guys) in my book and they're after the main character and two others who have the gifts of speed, stamina, and intelligence.

[Helreith Brynhildar]

Cool. :3

Okay. Plot test.....

Character is a normal person. Character begins having dreams that are... Real, and that transport her to this Narnia-ish place. Minus the fauns. Anyway, it is very, very cold there. Also quite surreal. The little magic that exists is in the hands of odd, slightly mental creatures known as myrkye, and select persons. There is also a war brewing there. That is all I have so far.... Hoping more plot will appear.

Sound plagiaristic or outlandish?

And Chef: how about the Select?

[Chef Kitty]

That's not quite what I was looking for. It's interesting, but not quite the name a group of scientist-people would call themselves. I need more of a group name, but thanks anyways!
((Honestly, I was somewhat-planning on keeping The Society as the name, but I told my friend and she thought it was weird/plain. I agree))