



That was really bad. You have a lot of spelling mistakes and your post doesn't flow well. You also made grammar mistakes.
His hand hurt, It was annoying. "Its really annoying" He said before standing up and picking up his bag. He got mad when the rain startd to fall "Im going somewhere dry" He said and walked away.
His hand hurt, It was annoying. "Its really annoying" He said before standing up and picking up his bag. He got mad when the rain startd to fall "Im going somewhere dry" He said and walked away.
His hand hurt, It was annoying.
1. His hand hurt, It was annoying. 2."Its really annoying" He said before standing up and picking up his bag. He got mad when the rain startd to fall "Im going somewhere dry" He said and walked away.
His hand hurt, It was annoying. "Its really annoying" He said before standing up and picking up his bag. He got mad when the rain startd to fall "Im going somewhere dry" He said and walked away.
His hand hurt, It was annoying.


Eva picked up her guitar and stood up, stretching her back out. What was she going to do on this stunningly dull Saturday morning? She had called Luis; he was busy at the pet store. Apparently today was adoption day. She hated adoption day. Not that she didn't love the little animals, or want them to get homes...which she did...but they dragged Luis away on a Saturday. Saturday! Saturday was their fun day! They went to the cinema, played bad music in the park for fun, and good music in the tube for cash on Saturday.
But her Saturday was ruined. She hadn't any other friend, and she'd rather die than hang out with her half-witted sister. All Colette cared about was her hair, her make up, and what Zac Efron looked like with his shirt off.
She rolled her eyes and leaned against the side of the bridge, wondering what it would be like to fly. She shut her eyes tight, dreaming of birds and angels...and jerked back with a surprised yelp of pain when something hard smashed into her back. "Hey!" she howled angrily. "Watch where you're going, you idiot!"


Brett wound his long fingers through the dappled mare's wispy mane, feeling the wind beating at his face as they ran. It was wonderful, all of it. The only way he would enjoy it more than he was now...was if the mare was his, and not Farmer Jenkins'. Maybe she will be, he though, pressing himself against her damp neck, listening to the thump-tha-thump of her heart pounding in time with her hooves. Maybe we'll never go back.
He pulled the mare gently to a halt under a sprawling Boabab tree, and turned to look back at the village. He couldn't see it: it had been consumed by the acres of wild land and dried grass they had just eaten up under their hooves. Their hooves. She was his now, and they would not be going back. Neither of them was appreciated at home.
Brett swung his leg over the mare's broad size and slithered onto the dry ground, testing it beneath his heavy feet. It was harsh and cracked, the grass yellow and brown. The dry season had definitely come. It would be hard for them to find water now, but they'd survive. He'd make sure of it.
He slunk down against the ancient tree's rough bark and pulled a drawstring purse out of his bag. He peered inside...twelve silver coins would get them food and a place to stay. He would get work in the next village, as soon as he got there...
The mare shrieked and reared up, clawing the air frantically. Brett leapt to his feet and grabbed her purple halter, whispering soothing words to her in Swahili, the only language she knew. He looked around, wide eyed, looking for anything that could spook so sound a mare as she.




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[b]Level Graduated:[/b]
[b]Proctor Name:[/b]
[b]Who Gave the Second Opinion:[/b]
[b]Thread Link:[/b]

Welcome to your novice RP thread! My name is PROCTOR NAME and I will be your proctor. Together we shall battle the forces of bad grammar and miss-spelt words and come out triumphant so that you may pass your novice test thread with flying colours!
The courses here at the RP school are made to improve your roleplay and overall writing skills, and we will be preparing you not only for RPing on CS, but also on actual RP sites.
Also, please keep in mind that you are more than welcome to quit at any time, but please tell your proctor before you do so. If your proctor becomes inactive, please PM McRadik letting her know so.
Goals for this Level;
•Character depth and insight
•Grammar and Spelling
•Fluidity
•Avoidance of Gary/Mary Sues and power playing/godmodding
•Turn Taking
•Post Length
This Thread was Created for…
•STUDENT ONE
•STUDENT TWO
•STUDENT THREE
This is a closed thread! If you would like a thread of your own like this, please apply at The RP School if it is open. If it is not, please bookmark it and wait until it has opened once more.
Creating Your Character;
As was previously mentioned, one of the aims of this level is to teach you to consider every aspect of your character, thus creating a well-developed character who has some sustenance to him or her. To begin with this, we at the RP School have created a basic outline that you may expand on (but not subtract from).
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[b]Name:[/b]
[b]Gender:[/b]
[b]Age:[/b]
[b]Ethnicity:[/b]
[b]Hair colour:[/b]
[b]Eye colour:[/b]
[b]Skin colour:[/b]
[b]Special Markings (tattoos, scars, etc):[/b]
[b]Height:[/b]
[b]Clothing style:[/b]
[b]Hairstyle:[/b]
[b]Frame:[/b]
[b]History:[/b]
[b]Personality:[/b]
[b]Likes:[/b]
[b]Dislikes:[/b]
[b]Strengths:[/b]
[b]Weaknesses:[/b]
[b]Greatest Fear:[/b]
[b]Greatest Desire:[/b]
[b]Goals in life:[/b]
[b]What Does He/She Regret:[/b]
[b]What is He/She Proud of:[/b]
[b]Family life:[/b]
[b]Other:[/b]
Upon Acceptance
When your character is reviewed by your proctor and deemed worthy, you may proceed to roleplay. Please keep in mind that we are training you for role play sites as well as those rp threads here on CS, so we will be doing this in a turn-based fashion. Do not step out of turn.
Turns
STUDENT ONE > STUDENT TWO > STUDENT THREE > PROCTOR
Once the proctor has posted, you may start from the beginning.
A proctor may post before their turn, only if post they are replying to requires immediate attention. (A student has powerplayed or godmodded)
Remember;
• When your proctor posts, it will be in [color=INSERT COLOUR HERE]THIS colour. Please keep your posts in black.
• When you are talking out of character (which shouldn’t happen often), always write in between double parenthesis.
• Use quotation marks! Also, you may wish to bold everything in quotation marks, as this makes it easier to distinguish talking from everything else.
Roleplay;
Okay! You guys have all chosen to do a INSERT ROLE PLAY TYPE HERE, and that is what we will be focusing on. To start you on your roleplay adventure, I have written up a short prompt. Please continue with it, keeping in mind everything that is included in it.
Prompt;
INSERT PROMPT HERE
For your convenience, all character bios will be reposted here;INSERT BIO 1INSERT BIO 2INSERT BIO 3
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Welcome to your novice RP thread! My name is PROCTOR NAME and I will be your proctor. Together we shall battle the forces of bad grammar and miss-spelt words and come out triumphant so that you may pass your novice test thread with flying colours!
The courses here at the RP school are made to improve your roleplay and overall writing skills, and we will be preparing you not only for RPing on CS, but also on actual RP sites.
Also, please keep in mind that you are more than welcome to quit at any time, but please [b]tell your proctor[/b] before you do so. If your proctor becomes inactive, please PM McRadik letting her know so.
[b][u]Goals for this Level;[/b][/u]
•Character depth and insight
•Grammar and Spelling
•Fluidity
•Avoidance of Gary/Mary Sues and power playing/godmodding
•Turn Taking
•Post Length
[b][u]This Thread was Created for…[/b][/u]
•STUDENT ONE
•STUDENT TWO
•STUDENT THREE
This is a closed thread! If you would like a thread of your own like this, please apply at [url=http://www.chickensmoothie.com/Forum/viewtopic.php?f=10&t=969082]The RP School[/url] if it is open. If it is not, please bookmark it and wait until it has opened once more.
[b][u]Creating Your Character;[/b][/u]
As was previously mentioned, one of the aims of this level is to teach you to consider every aspect of your character, thus creating a well-developed character who has some sustenance to him or her. To begin with this, we at the RP School have created a basic outline that you may expand on (but not subtract from).
CHARACTER FORM
[b][u]Upon Acceptance[/b][/u]
When your character is reviewed by your proctor and deemed worthy, you may proceed to roleplay. Please keep in mind that we [b]are[/b] training you for role play sites as well as those rp threads here on CS, so we will be doing this in a turn-based fashion. [b]Do not step out of turn[/b].
[b]Turns[/b]
STUDENT ONE > STUDENT TWO >STUDENT THREE > PROCTOR
Once the proctor has posted, you may start from the beginning.
A proctor may post before their turn, only if post they are replying to requires immediate attention. (A student has powerplayed or godmodded)
[b][u]Remember;[/b][/u]
• When your proctor posts, it will be in [color=INSERT COLOUR HERE][b]this[/b][/color]] colour. Please keep your posts in black.
• When you are talking out of character (which shouldn’t happen often), always write in between double parenthesis.
• Use quotation marks! Also, you may wish to bold everything in quotation marks, as this makes it easier to distinguish talking from everything else.
[u][b]Roleplay;[/b][/u]
Okay! You have all chosen to do a INSERT ROLE PLAY TYPE HERE, and that is what we will be focusing on. To start you on your roleplay adventure, the proctor has written up a short prompt. Please continue with it, keeping in mind everything that is included in it.
[u][b]Prompt;[/b][/u]
INSERT PROMPT HERE
[b]For your convenience, all character bios will be reposted here;[/b][/color]
[quote]INSERT BIO 1[/quote]
[quote]INSERT BIO 2[/quote]
[quote]INSERT BIO 3[/quote][/i][/quote][code][b]Name:[/b]
[b]Gender:[/b]
[b]Age:[/b]
[b]Ethnicity:[/b]
[b]Hair colour:[/b]
[b]Eye colour:[/b]
[b]Skin colour:[/b]
[b]Special Markings (tattoos, scars, etc):[/b]
[b]Height:[/b]
[b]Clothing style:[/b]
[b]Hairstyle:[/b]
[b]Frame:[/b]
[b]History:[/b]
[b]Personality:[/b]
[b]Likes:[/b]
[b]Dislikes:[/b]
[b]Strengths:[/b]
[b]Weaknesses:[/b]
[b]Greatest Fear:[/b]
[b]Greatest Desire:[/b]
[b]Goals in life:[/b]
[b]What Does He/She Regret:[/b]
[b]What is He/She Proud of:[/b]
[b]Family life:[/b]
[b]Other:[/b]
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[b]Gender:[/b]
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[b]Any accessories?:[/b] (FOR FANTASY ANIMAL RPS ONLY)
[b]Special Markings:[/b] (scars, etc?)
[b]Frame:[/b]
[b]History:[/b]
[b]Personality:[/b]
[b]Likes:[/b]
[b]Dislikes:[/b]
[b]Strengths:[/b]
[b]Weaknesses:[/b]
[b]Greatest Fear:[/b]
[b]Greatest Desire:[/b]
[b]Goals in life:[/b]
[b]What Does He/She Regret:[/b]
[b]What is He/She Proud of:[/b]
[b]Family life:[/b]
[b]Other:[/b]
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