Our Aspiring Writers League (O.A.W.L)

[MBRShorse]

Nimble and Teal, you are accepted. Don't worry about the role section. I'm just going to ignore that section until Seasonstar and I can create an explanation. We aren't even using them currently, and I'm tired of reiterating what that section is. Sorry if I sound cross, for I'm not, just a bit weary.

[MBRShorse]

Oh, and I don't know how many of you dabble in the genre of Steampunk, but if any of you do, I have created a new club and I need some members. Just head over this-a-way.

[Wlyrout]

I find it much easier to write in 1st person. It just comes naturally. Recently while role playing multiple characters I have forced myself into 3rd person. Gosh, I hate it. I just don't understand it at all.

[MBRShorse]

I'm more of a third person limited person. I feel as if I can take in more of the character's world that way. But I like inject my main character's personality into the description. Thus, if my character does not like horses, than the description of a horse will be negative rather than positive.

When it comes to RPing, though, I actually prefer to work with first person since I'm focusing on a single character and only have oh-so-much control over the story plot. I just find it more enjoyable.

[nomoreusername]

Nimble and Teal, you are accepted. Don't worry about the role section. I'm just going to ignore that section until Seasonstar and I can create an explanation. We aren't even using them currently, and I'm tired of reiterating what that section is. Sorry if I sound cross, for I'm not, just a bit weary.

Okay! And, thank you. ^^

Ah oh o3o. Better go catch it!.
Ok.. so, Idea. Does this > Sound stupid?
It's somewhere deep into the future, and America has changed for the worst. Long ago, an asteroid was scheduled to hit the Earth. In desperation and fear, a select population of people were permitted to go into underground chambers, and continue life there. The people left on the Outside, were left to suffer from the impact. The only problem? There was no impact. Angered by this, the Outsiders rebelled against the Counil, a new form of government for the Underground, attempting to abolish it, and reconstruct their original form of government. They tried, and they lost terribly. Now, after the war that destroyed everything in the United States but a small city called Sirius, everything has changed drastically. The Underground is now transformed into training ground for 'Hunters', the new name for a modern day assassin. Under the Council's harsh and extreme rule, if you step out of line, a Hunter will come after you.
Shiver, a Cub - a Hunter in training - is devoted completely to her training. She kills whatever she's asked to kill, and obeys every word the Council says. She works hard with little sleep, dreaming of the day she'll become a Hunter herself. One day however, while training, a little boy is her target in training. As she's about to kill him, the boy notices the mark on Shiver's neck, and explains that his mother had the same exact tattoo. Shocked, Shiver volunteers to take in the boy as her own Cub, and train him herself. Sparking an unexplained hatred among her peers. Shiver begins to learn that perhaps what the Council is enforcing is indeed something terrible and wrong, and learns that the Council has hidden some very important things from not just her, but everyone. Will Shiver escape the controlling claws of the Underground? Or will she be forced to murder whomever they will her to?

Okay basically, they train teenagers to kill people from a list they give them, and if they don't, they'll get killed themselves. But when she saves the little boy, he tells her all about the Underground and Orion, and she learns that there are things outside of Orion, meaning a rebellion waiting to attack the Underground and destroy it. The kid teaches her that what she's doing is murder, and with a big dramatic act, Shiver escapes and is captured by the rebellion group. So, they force her to serve them and help them kill the Underground and take over Orion, or they'll kill her. So, neither side is right or wrong.. but I don't know if it's stupid or not o3o.

I dont read those normally.

But I would read that.

[{{ f i a s c o }}]

I am currently trying to rally up the muse to go in and write the first few chapters of Death's claim, without backtracking to edit or yell at myself for being stupid :c

Am I the only one who can't help rewriting and rewriting and rewriting when I see something that had a very good idea but poor execution? And every iteration gets worse?

-lifts hand- I just rewrote half of my three thousand word first chapter. Still lots to do, ut it left me shuddering at y horrible style of writing I had last year. :3

So, may I ask, what do you prefer; a bit of dillydallying before the plotline truly starts up (but having the text hinting at the future soewhat constantly), or for it to jump straight into the action after a couple of pages? I am hesitating between both for 'The Seven Talents', yet I am leaning slightly towards the first. That way I can delve into my character, to give an insight on what she truly is about.

HAI NEW MWMBERS

I have a habit of starting off with a bang. Death's Claim starts with someone getting run over and killed, Cyclic with someone turning off the (artificial) sun and assassinating someone, Dream Stalker begins with someone admitting a death wish within the Dream Realm, Pit Fights start out with one of the pit matches and a very sadistic death, etc. etc. etc.

I always try to make the beginning really interesting so people still read and don't go "balskjdf boring" and fly away. I often fiddle with the first sentence so it's just like "Ooh, intriguing, must read more" and not "This is overdone. Goodbye."
XD

Well, I am drawing it longer slightly by making it slightly slow at the start. Well, not slow, exactly, rather mounting up to the starting punch-in-the-gut to the reader.

'The Seven Talents' is a strange concept of a book I came up while dreaming. It is based on the idea of genetic modification; after the second world war and after the discovery of the duble helix in genes, some german proffessor discovered how to crack it and therefore create hybrids that had abiliy to live, think, reproduce, etc.. but the first experiments that surged were horribly wrong, therefore, after a few trials, the proffessor let loose these errors into the wild, leaving them to die off so that they wouldn't prosper. Except they didn't. They mingled with humans, dispersing their dominant and recessive genes through human-kind.

The first Seven were based on seven - duh - different features, or talents (hence the name) from different species: The Hunters, from wolves, The Warriors, from gorillas/apes, The Intelligence/rats, The Fish, The Healers/plants, The Nightwatchers/panthers or other felines and the longlost line of Fliers, from white owls. Each talent is formed by a certain group of characteristics taken from each species that are advantageuos to certain goals and tests.

So now, government officials are searching through the tenage population of the world and trying to take back those with some trace of the genes left behind by those first experiments, their goal aiming to be to create the into a new arsenal of weapons for upcoming wars and such.

And our protagonist is obviously part of that small .01% of the population with a set of those genes.. So what happens after she is found, I haven't planned entirely yet.

I know it seems farfetched, but I've done my research and the idea isn't all that strange or hard to grasp if you have a bit of genetic kowledge. It is generally known that we all descend from a common ancestor, and, seeing that this is set in the future, I wouldn't see why I souldn't cobine some futuristic developments, along with the cracking of the genetic code genus, combining it to make possible the creation of humanistic hybrids.

And that idea about the teenage assasins = luff.

Any insights, please?

[uhtan]

(So can I join or what? Because I really have a lot of questions for some plotlines of mine)

[violacherry]

Username:violacherry
What will we call you:Cherry
What are your goals as an author?
-Make my stories longer
-Have a variatiy in writing
-Write a creepy story
-Edit some, go back and reread and fix
-Dont rush writing
-MORE DETAIL
-have a sad ending for once
-try writing in the third person
Can you give us a sample of your writing? I lay in the snow, alone and freezing. The gashes on my hands are bleeding heavily and all I want to do is see my mom and dad. But thats not possible. There dead and no matter how many people I hurt, they would never come back. I start screaming, in addition to my sobs. I'm screaming at the world, the cruel world that is unfair. I don't know how long I stay in the snow bank but eventually the world spins, then darkens.

I wake with a start, expecting to be in prison, or with a social service worker, but instead, I'm in a house, a normal house. A fire is going and my hands are wrapped in gauze. I have on a new pair of sweats and a shirt. I'm laying on a couch, a blanket covering me. A woman is sitting on a coffee table, looking at me. "Hey, its ok, its ok," she says, as I try to jump up, my fight or flight senses kicking in.

Are you currently working on any books? yes
Why do you want to join? I am an aspiring writer and I think it would be helpful to run some of my ideas by people or get help on some weird wording o something
Do you have published books yet? no
Do you wish to find a "writing partner"? no
What Role(s): well i'm more of a realistic writer (action, sweet stories, cop).
What's your favorite Genre? I like it all really. I like action and adventure, though
What kind of books do you write? I write realistic stuff, mostly about young teenagers. i also write kidnapping stories, including the point of view of the dectives

[MBRShorse]

Cherry, you are accepted. Welcome!

[violacherry]

Thank you