Blood-spattered lies. A vampire tale
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Re: Blood-spattered lies. A vampire tale
by Rainy Dayz » Fri Nov 04, 2011 2:29 pm
MORE MORE MOER!!!!! OMG! It drove me insane! MORE! Pleaase?
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Re: Blood-spattered lies. A vampire tale
by Kami Sama » Fri Nov 04, 2011 6:27 pm
oh, also, something I picked up on. How did Angel know her hair was 'sparkling in the light'? She had no way of knowing unless she could somehow see herself. It's always important to not state things your character doesn't know about if your writing in their point of view.
Anyways, hope that helped somehow!
Anyways, hope that helped somehow!
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Re: Blood-spattered lies. A vampire tale
by Shiver. » Mon Nov 07, 2011 10:42 am
I think it needs more details but it was excellent.
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