JDT, The Life of Me, A CS Pet Journal :D

[Jayflight.]

Stalkin waiting for the next entry! stalkin and watchin XD

[exousia]

I don't mean to flame, but...
This is horribly written.
These are overdone.
The grammar is atrocious.
None of the characters have personalities.
The plot is a cliche storm.

If you have nothing nice to say, don't say anything. Instead of saying how rubbish something is, you could at least say how you could fix it. Tjis is not crit, it is just plain rude.

Nobody wants that kind of rude spam on there work!

Kimmy worked her heart out on this. Nobody wants to work really hard simply to get put down. The whole style of writing she is done is clearly not to your taste, but there is no need to say how bad it is.

Many people find grammer an impossibility, like myself. I can't spell and I put it in all the wrong places. That doesn't mean I don't have any skill at the subject. So there is no need to be that way

My critique... I had some, but I deleted it before I posted. I'll put it back up:

1) Probably what bugs me the most is that there aren't any paragraphs. You should begin a new one every time someone speaks.
2) This doesn't work as a CS pet journal. There's no forums, no owners, no members or anything like that. It's basically a same-old high school journal, but with dogs.
I'm sorry if I came across as rude. Which I was. Thank you for telling me.

1) Maybe there aren't supposed to be any paragraphs. It's a style of writing, if you don't like it go away, you're making a bunch of people unhappy.
2) What's so wrong about that? It's called C-R-E-A-T-I-V-I-T-Y. She made actual CHARACTERS that you can see.
If you were sorry you wouldn't have posted it in the first place.
Kimmy puts LOADS of time into this for OUR entertainment. STOP being to selfish.
I for one knows how much effort this takes, I've tried it! xD

I'm sorry, I just had to put input on this. But really people, it's common sense, if you don't like something, DON'T READ IT!

[Jayflight.]

Totally agree.

[kimmy1479]

Thanks guys, though some of his things I actualy agree with. XD I use this kinda as a writing exersice and just so I can write whatever random/cliche'/seemingly stupid thing I want just so I can get it out of my system. XD I don't really try too hard with grammer or paragraphs, because this is where I force my inner editor to leave me alone so I can go BLAH on the pages and it won't matter. This is where I lose my perfectionist self, and focous on making myself (And my stalkers) laugh until milk comes out our noses! (Especielly odd if your not drinking milk) So, if I where writing one of my real stories, all that critique would be used, but for this, BLARG!

[brambletalon98]

lol XDDDD

you know, I was actually drinking milk when I was readong that last entry o3o

[kimmy1479]

Please tell me it came out of your nose!

[brambletalon98]

uhmmm... * thinks * actually..... I think I forgot X.x hmm but if it did come out of my nose it would of soaked the laptop, which ment no CS until the 23rd!! *runs around*

It would be funny though...

and Kimmy, did you edit that post 101 times? lol, it says you edited it that much XDD

[kimmy1479]

Yes. It took a while, but I did it

[Remaskis]

Yes. It took a while, but I did it

LoL! It said the same thing on this post! xD Is your laptop/computer/phone/thing/ipod/strawberry messed up?

[kimmy1479]

No, but I use a tool from the future. Just check out the date.