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by JerseyDusk » Sat Aug 27, 2011 3:38 pm
This is a critique for Aplle Jack - .Joy.!
What the critique is for:
Iris - The Agency
What you had to say about it:
Oh. my. gawd.
Your writing is truely beautiful, I couldn't stop and when I finished I wanted more. I can clearly tell you want her by how much you put into just the personality and base story line alone. It was very original and I think it was very creative. Although many forms are Angel X Demon this was a very intresting and different take on it. I wish I would have been able to read the compition but time was limited.
I am very sorry you did not get her </3 I think your form was very well done, but then again I was not judging. Hope this helped...
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by BPeppers » Sat Aug 27, 2011 5:54 pm
Thanks a lot Jersey :') That means a lot to me. I'm actually really depressed that I didn't win. I wanted her much more than a lot of my characters lately./end being a whiner.
Oh well! I haven't read veggie's yet, but I know that I will have to. :) I'm just wondering what was wrong with my form now.
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by Atwood » Sat Aug 27, 2011 7:00 pm
Just popping in, but that was a brilliantly-written form, Apple Jack. :3 From the looks of it though, you needed to send your form to Tripp and get permission to adopt the character, and I didn't notice that in your form or in the Agency thread, so that may have disqualified it. :C
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by Desmond » Mon Aug 29, 2011 8:06 am
I would like some critique on my form please!Username: -3B-
Link to your form: [X]Adoption Agency you are applying for: Pound of Hope; F54
Deadline for your form: August 29 (So... if it can be done quickly, I'd love that. ^.^;;)
Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? PM, please.
I'll crit you if you crit me... as long as it's not for this character! xD
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by corgie » Mon Aug 29, 2011 9:26 am
I would like some critique on my form please!
Username: Corgi.
Link to your form: -le click-
Adoption Agency you are applying for: Well its not really an adoption agency but W.O.I
Deadline for your form: September 2nd.
Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? PM perfered but anything is fine ^^
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by BPeppers » Tue Aug 30, 2011 3:25 pm
I would actually like a 1x1 critiquing partner. :) I'm looking for someone with literate writing skills that we can go back and forth by PM critiquing each other's novels. If this is you, please PM me. :) I want someone I can trust NOT to steal my ideas.
I would like some critique on my story please!
Username: Apple Jack
Link to what needs critiquing: ...
What is it: Novel <3
Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? PM
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by tinydoodles » Thu Sep 01, 2011 11:48 am
Are we allowed to post a form looking for critique on a form to apply to be an Oekaki Mod?
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