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[Lirrie]

This is a critique for Kitteh :3!
Who the critique is for: Kitteh :3
What you had to say about it:

You story is beutiful, X.X i loved the imagry. -shortest crituiqe ever- No really though I love how you did your story, it was beutiful and infigorating.

[omori]

This is a critique for Kitteh :3!
Who the critique is for: Kitteh :3
What you had to say about it:

You story is beutiful, X.X i loved the imagry. -shortest crituiqe ever- No really though I love how you did your story, it was beutiful and infigorating.

Aw, thanks so much. I'm glad the style shift wasn't a complete disaster! xD

[pancreas]

I would like some critique on my story please!
Username: Nightingale~
Link to what needs critiquing: Tame Him, Tamer.
What is it: Novel. An on-going one. I just need someone who hasn't been following it from the start to give me some pointers. <3
Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? Whichever you prefer. Thank you~ c:

[DRdoctorlady]

I would like some critique on my story please!
(pretty please ;D)
Username: Dragonsrule (DR for short :D)
Link to what needs critiquing: Here ya go :3
Its currently in construction, but if you scroll down you'll see Chapter 1 :3
What is it: The first scene from my WIP novel, Death's Claim, which is a YA urban fantasy (I think, still trying to figure out the genre >.>) Its around the first 1,000 words :3
I'd also like if whoever critiques it tells me if it draws them in, interests them, makes them want to read more, and if I'm not overusing Tick. Tock. You'll understand ;3
Thanks in advance~
Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? Either is fine, though I'd prefer it here :3

[Papyrsatyr]

I would like some critique on my form please!
Username: Applefiend
Link to your form: viewtopic.php?f=10&t=352084&start=940#p15835159
Adoption Agency you are applying for: Break of Dawn
Deadline for your form: (Please give us a date as well as the actual day it's due) Sunday the 31st, but I won't be able to touch my form after tomorrow. ;n;
Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? Here.

[Lizbutt]

I would like some critique on my drawing please!
Username: Carry
Link to what needs critiquing: sketch digtial {wip}
What is it: Drawing of a Hippocampus {sea horse from greek myths}
Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? PM please.

[Lirrie]

Guys ill crituiqe firs thing in the morn, my eyes are hurtin

[Papyrsatyr]

Guys ill crituiqe firs thing in the morn, my eyes are hurtin

No rush on it. Thank you so much for the work you've done already.

[bearlygrunge]

I am available to do some critiquing tonight. c: I am "on-staff" after all. Give me couple minutes to finish getting ready for bed & then I'll take these in order of posting time. ^^;

[bearlygrunge]

This is a critique for Applefiend!

Who the critique is for: Applefiend
[Why exactly is that one here twice? ". . ."]

What you had to say about it: I really enjoyed reading your form, Applefiend. It has an honest, charming simplicity that I thoroughly like. c: Which is fitting, eh? If there is much of any critique to give, I'd say if you can add maybe a snapshot of Willow reacting to some scenario just to show her personality in action, that'd be great. That & reword the section about her family--it uses the same words throughout the paragraph. [i.e.: "Fairly" is used four times & "thus" was used twice in a row] Other than that it was, as they say, "Short, sweet, & to the point." It hold a good amount of detail without being overwhelming like some forms can be. & it is consistent. Good luck to you!

[Sorry for the double-post. :c]