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me me meee!!!! by .:Ash~cloud:.

Artist .:Ash~cloud:. [gallery]
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me me meee!!!!

Postby .:Ash~cloud:. » Thu May 26, 2011 6:27 am

its ment to be me (if you know me please comment if you dont know me you are still welcome but obviuasly you can not say if it looks like me XD) but comment on if you like it and how i could improve, i have been practising manga and this is the best i have done but to me it does not look right please help!

from bin :D
Im in a field because things did not go my way
poem by me!
Why did I get involved? does he still love me? I hope so…
I lay down in the daisies, trying to think of something to do,
gifts wrapped

I see a lady walk past with her dog “ these daisies look nice” she bent down beside me and wiped my tears “cheer up” she whisperd “things will work out” she left clasping some daisies, her dog at her side. I rolled on my belly looking at the daisies, being blown gently into my face, surrounding me like a blanket by the wind I plucked one out from the ground, about to strip it of its identity, without these its just bare I was just about to when a voice said inside my head : “why ruin a perfect, beautiful flower when I know he loves me not?” I tossed it and watched it fly away
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Postby Orbitsy » Thu May 26, 2011 6:36 am

paramore. <': <3.
this is really good ^^
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Postby .:Ash~cloud:. » Thu May 26, 2011 6:51 am

thanks glittzy gal ;)
Im in a field because things did not go my way
poem by me!
Why did I get involved? does he still love me? I hope so…
I lay down in the daisies, trying to think of something to do,
gifts wrapped

I see a lady walk past with her dog “ these daisies look nice” she bent down beside me and wiped my tears “cheer up” she whisperd “things will work out” she left clasping some daisies, her dog at her side. I rolled on my belly looking at the daisies, being blown gently into my face, surrounding me like a blanket by the wind I plucked one out from the ground, about to strip it of its identity, without these its just bare I was just about to when a voice said inside my head : “why ruin a perfect, beautiful flower when I know he loves me not?” I tossed it and watched it fly away
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Postby Not me nope » Thu May 26, 2011 7:01 am

I certainly Like it;3 the hair looks cool, Perhaps make it... I dunno o u o. Your hair is extremly thick. Hmm... Perhaps add some darker shades round the edge?
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I would die a happy man I'm sure.

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Postby .:Ash~cloud:. » Thu May 26, 2011 7:11 am

does this look any better?
Im in a field because things did not go my way
poem by me!
Why did I get involved? does he still love me? I hope so…
I lay down in the daisies, trying to think of something to do,
gifts wrapped

I see a lady walk past with her dog “ these daisies look nice” she bent down beside me and wiped my tears “cheer up” she whisperd “things will work out” she left clasping some daisies, her dog at her side. I rolled on my belly looking at the daisies, being blown gently into my face, surrounding me like a blanket by the wind I plucked one out from the ground, about to strip it of its identity, without these its just bare I was just about to when a voice said inside my head : “why ruin a perfect, beautiful flower when I know he loves me not?” I tossed it and watched it fly away
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Postby Not me nope » Thu May 26, 2011 7:15 am

much better;3 you can really notice it 8D love it. If you want more ways of Improving just ask 8D
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