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~ Second Chance ~
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This is my first story
~ Second Chance ~
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Scarred{M} </3 Hearts{F} <3 Xavier{M}Me? We`ll i was just a low life. Her? Well shes going to be the next 'queen'. She saw straight through me, not in the way people think, but as if I was a ghost. She didn`t see me until the day I died.
The day I died for her.
>5 years ago<
>The first time I saw her<
The King is finally presenting his daughter today, Hes kept her locked up like Repunzel. I watched quietly in the crowds while the other males growled at one another or boosted about how the princess would love their 'shiny coats'. Their shiny groomed pelts made mine seem scruffy and dull.
I sat listening to the others boost until the King finally apeared, His voice was powerful, loud and clear 'Presenting my daughter...' He stopped, everyone fell silent, waiting, watching and listening for her name and then that moment came 'Hearts'
I`d never heard such a beautiful name...But then again, I was from the rough side of town..
Her pelt was different, It was pure white and covered in beautiful red markings. She wore a black, gold and red mask, If you ask`d me, I`d say it brought out her eyes..which were also a heart red, no, not blood red, Heart red. She began to walk down from the stage from which she had, well seemed to, apeared on. She padded through us without a sound. Her eyes flickered over the males and rested on a particular male. His pelt was a hansome shade of light brown with darker sploches. His chest, back paws and tip of tail were a creamish colour. One of his back legs had a tattoo of three hearts, one red, one black and one pink. Bright paint was splatterd over his coat, and he had a small black bow tie. She took a step closer and he bowed his head. "For you" His voice was smooth, full of something I couldn`t explain. He pushed a small heart shaped box closer to her with his muzzle and as he looked up I caught his light, almost sunset pink eyes..
>4 years ago<
"How could you?!" I yelled at him, my anger rolled off me in flames and even still his voice kept calm.
"Scarred, please just liste-"
"No Xavier you listen! You`ve been my best friend since we were pups and you kept that from me? Why would you? How could you? You could have told me you were seeing Hearts!" My voice was a high pitch yelp of anger.
Xavier`s sunset pink eyes were sad "I have to go now, I have a lantern to take to Hearts to go with her other." His voice had turned cold. He began to pad off in the opposite direction..
I ran from him that night, I ran until I found a little red lantern hidden in between pretty red and gold leaves. I tore the leaves away from the lantern useing my paws and muzzle. I stepped back in shock when I had, next to the lantern was small black box, fear filtered through me. He couldnt...He knew how much I liked her..But he would, wouldn`t he?..Because everything always goes his way. I could hear paw steps coming towards me and the gentle sound of her laughter. "Come on.." I heard Xavier`s soft voice, he never used that voice. Never. I could see them now, padding through the trees, I had to hide, get away from here. But I could`nt move, my paws felt as if they were frozen to the ground. They came closer and closer until Xavier spotted me, his gentle voice turned harsh "Scarred? What are you doing -" Before he could finish a pure black dog left in to the clearing, its claws were long and splattered with red blood, It barked in an usual way...a way I couldn`t quite understand. "Must...Queen...Must..Kill...DIE" Then when I heard those words loud and clear. I understood.
"go...before she dies"
"You can escape it you know..you just have to run..."
"Run..."
I could hear them. Feel them. They were all around me..Spirits from the world above.
I saw the black dog leap, its back legs almost moving in slow motion. I sprung to life, my front paws hit its side hard, I snapped at its neck. "Run!" I yelled to them, Xavier`s pink eyes were grateful but were battling with the emotions to stay and help his best friend. "I`ll never forget you...Scarred.." and with that they turned and fled in to the distance
>Right now ~This very moment in time~<
I died that day. I died for Hearts and my very best friend, Xavier. The spirits came to get me and the black wolf, who I took down with me. They gave me green wings, so I could fly and enter their world. I sit by my grave nowdays. The light grey stone is cracked and the roses which were put down are now falling apart and dieing from the harsh cold wind. I sit by my grave everyday, waiting for that moment when Xavier comes and speaks to me. I can hear his pawsteps now, and his gentle but long sigh. He made his way and sat beside me, even though he didn`t know I was their.
"Hey Scarred" He smiled, his eyes showing excitment "Hearts` going to give birth today! The doctor said that there is only one pup..But..." He trailed off and his eyes showed sudden relization and fear "She going to give birth today!" His voice grew weak "The day you died four years ago..." A yelp sounded from the house from which he came. "Forgive me Scarred.." He dipped his head and ran back to the house. The spirits are whispering in my ears again..and this time I`m going to listen. I ran toward the house after Xavier, I followed him in to a room. Hearts was laying on a red, black and white blanket. There was a small angel sitting on Hearts shoulder, stroking her fur gently as if to calm her. I padded forwards to see a little grenish blue pup with a few little scars curled up by her stomach.
Xavier gasped.
"He looks like..." Hearts` trailed off
"He looks like Scared" Xaiver finished for her. The looked at each other and nodded..
Suddenly something pushed me from behind and I seemed to fall through a black tunnel, wind whipped past me and my green wings were torn from my back. Suddenly everything was still. Silent. I opened my eyes and looked up. Hearts smiled from above.
"Welcome to the world Scarred" she smiled
"Your named after a very speical dog, one that saved me and your mother."
I then understood. Theses were now my mother and father, I could never tell them who I use to be.
I was given a second chance ~

The end~
>Yes I know the first Scarred is the seconds father but have some imagination x3<
Also..Do you think I should do a little story of his life growing up in another body?
>The first time I saw her<
The King is finally presenting his daughter today, Hes kept her locked up like Repunzel. I watched quietly in the crowds while the other males growled at one another or boosted about how the princess would love their 'shiny coats'. Their shiny groomed pelts made mine seem scruffy and dull.
I sat listening to the others boost until the King finally apeared, His voice was powerful, loud and clear 'Presenting my daughter...' He stopped, everyone fell silent, waiting, watching and listening for her name and then that moment came 'Hearts'
I`d never heard such a beautiful name...But then again, I was from the rough side of town..
Her pelt was different, It was pure white and covered in beautiful red markings. She wore a black, gold and red mask, If you ask`d me, I`d say it brought out her eyes..which were also a heart red, no, not blood red, Heart red. She began to walk down from the stage from which she had, well seemed to, apeared on. She padded through us without a sound. Her eyes flickered over the males and rested on a particular male. His pelt was a hansome shade of light brown with darker sploches. His chest, back paws and tip of tail were a creamish colour. One of his back legs had a tattoo of three hearts, one red, one black and one pink. Bright paint was splatterd over his coat, and he had a small black bow tie. She took a step closer and he bowed his head. "For you" His voice was smooth, full of something I couldn`t explain. He pushed a small heart shaped box closer to her with his muzzle and as he looked up I caught his light, almost sunset pink eyes..
>4 years ago<
"How could you?!" I yelled at him, my anger rolled off me in flames and even still his voice kept calm.
"Scarred, please just liste-"
"No Xavier you listen! You`ve been my best friend since we were pups and you kept that from me? Why would you? How could you? You could have told me you were seeing Hearts!" My voice was a high pitch yelp of anger.
Xavier`s sunset pink eyes were sad "I have to go now, I have a lantern to take to Hearts to go with her other." His voice had turned cold. He began to pad off in the opposite direction..
I ran from him that night, I ran until I found a little red lantern hidden in between pretty red and gold leaves. I tore the leaves away from the lantern useing my paws and muzzle. I stepped back in shock when I had, next to the lantern was small black box, fear filtered through me. He couldnt...He knew how much I liked her..But he would, wouldn`t he?..Because everything always goes his way. I could hear paw steps coming towards me and the gentle sound of her laughter. "Come on.." I heard Xavier`s soft voice, he never used that voice. Never. I could see them now, padding through the trees, I had to hide, get away from here. But I could`nt move, my paws felt as if they were frozen to the ground. They came closer and closer until Xavier spotted me, his gentle voice turned harsh "Scarred? What are you doing -" Before he could finish a pure black dog left in to the clearing, its claws were long and splattered with red blood, It barked in an usual way...a way I couldn`t quite understand. "Must...Queen...Must..Kill...DIE" Then when I heard those words loud and clear. I understood.
"go...before she dies"
"You can escape it you know..you just have to run..."
"Run..."
I could hear them. Feel them. They were all around me..Spirits from the world above.
I saw the black dog leap, its back legs almost moving in slow motion. I sprung to life, my front paws hit its side hard, I snapped at its neck. "Run!" I yelled to them, Xavier`s pink eyes were grateful but were battling with the emotions to stay and help his best friend. "I`ll never forget you...Scarred.." and with that they turned and fled in to the distance
>Right now ~This very moment in time~<
I died that day. I died for Hearts and my very best friend, Xavier. The spirits came to get me and the black wolf, who I took down with me. They gave me green wings, so I could fly and enter their world. I sit by my grave nowdays. The light grey stone is cracked and the roses which were put down are now falling apart and dieing from the harsh cold wind. I sit by my grave everyday, waiting for that moment when Xavier comes and speaks to me. I can hear his pawsteps now, and his gentle but long sigh. He made his way and sat beside me, even though he didn`t know I was their.
"Hey Scarred" He smiled, his eyes showing excitment "Hearts` going to give birth today! The doctor said that there is only one pup..But..." He trailed off and his eyes showed sudden relization and fear "She going to give birth today!" His voice grew weak "The day you died four years ago..." A yelp sounded from the house from which he came. "Forgive me Scarred.." He dipped his head and ran back to the house. The spirits are whispering in my ears again..and this time I`m going to listen. I ran toward the house after Xavier, I followed him in to a room. Hearts was laying on a red, black and white blanket. There was a small angel sitting on Hearts shoulder, stroking her fur gently as if to calm her. I padded forwards to see a little grenish blue pup with a few little scars curled up by her stomach.
Xavier gasped.
"He looks like..." Hearts` trailed off
"He looks like Scared" Xaiver finished for her. The looked at each other and nodded..
Suddenly something pushed me from behind and I seemed to fall through a black tunnel, wind whipped past me and my green wings were torn from my back. Suddenly everything was still. Silent. I opened my eyes and looked up. Hearts smiled from above.
"Welcome to the world Scarred" she smiled
"Your named after a very speical dog, one that saved me and your mother."
I then understood. Theses were now my mother and father, I could never tell them who I use to be.
I was given a second chance ~

The end~
>Yes I know the first Scarred is the seconds father but have some imagination x3<
Also..Do you think I should do a little story of his life growing up in another body?