TCSRPS---Holli-Darkehtehepic-zboe

[Smamm]

This is a thread for Holli and Darkehtehepic from The Chicken Smoothie Roleplay School. They will be playing a plot dealing with wolves. Specifics are undecided at the very moment.

[TheTravelingWriter]

Username:
Darkehtehepic
Name:
Tawny
Nickname: (optional)
None
Age:
3
Gender:
She-wolf
Rank/Loner:
Omega Female
Pack/Loner:
Aerial Pack
Crush/Mate:
None
Offspring?: (only if you are an alpha, holy blood, or beta)
None
Description: (Describe your wolf in words)
Tawny is a considerably small she-wolf and is easily towered over by other wolves. Her main pelt colour is brown, but there are many other shades of brown. Her muzzle is white, and her eyes are brown with a mischievous look in them. Her pelt also has multiple scars, and she has a twisted paw that will never heal.
History: (Not optional, and no TBRPed)
Tawny wasn't born to a pack wolf but rather born to a loner. She never knew her real father, as he disappeared when her and her siblings were born. Her mother didn't talk much about her father; which she found a bit odd but didn't question why she never talked of him. Only at the age of two months, her mother perished in a forest fire.
Tawny was heartbroken about this and suffered from depression from a long time. That's when the Assassins found her a little after her mother passed away. They took her in and, being a young pup, she believed that the wolves were good. These wolves most certainly weren't nice. Only at the age of six months, she was trained to be an assassin like the rest of the wolves. Her training didn't go so well, and she was soon kicked out of the pack with a twisted paw that will never heal at the age of 2.
After a year of searching, Tawny finally came upon Aerial Pack. Having a twisted paw, the Alpha pair dubbed her as the Omega of the pack, as she was far too young to be an elder yet. Now she lives out her life as the omega of the pack.
Personality:
Despite her past of an assassin, Tawny is an actually very kind and caring she-wolf, which came to her being kicked out of the pack. She thinks that peace is by far better than violence, which is why she refused to fight for the Assassins. On top of that, she is a natural happy-go-lucky type of wolf. Despite all of this, she isn't the brightest wolf out there and has a tendency to be somewhat of an air head.
Strengths-
Knows how to keep peace and how to cheer wolves up in stressful times. She is also a somewhat good fighter.
Weaknesses-
Hunting, and the fact that she wishes to keep the peace amongst everybody.
Likes-
Being around people and knowing she's safe, telling stories to pups, pranking wolves, learning new things, being her best, cheering wolves up, and many more things.
Dislikes-
Being alone and dark places, being made fun of for being the omega, being judged because of her past, being reminded of her past, having to run from her fears, and being in danger of the Assassins. She also has a certain dislike of snakes.
Fears-
Snakes, the Assassins, being alone for a long period of time, and being in dark places.
Other:
None that I can think of at the moment.

[Smamm]

Okay, thats a good start! |3
Starting with the description, be sure to mention everything although you have a photo. Honestly, even the slightest detail is important, and appreciated to those trying to get a better idea of your wolf. Also, don't be afraid to add in a little sensory words to describe. For example, your wolf has beautiful fall colored fur. You could say here, "Her fur is an array of autumn colors, ranging anywhere from golden to white and even black." In some places it seems to be speckled with different fur colors. You could describe with more sensory detail by saying, "she has patches of black and golden peppered fur, that in some areas when hit with a spectrum of light glitter with a dazzling appearance." Anything you can thing of can be added here. I'll mention a few, such as fur, build, frame, colors, eyes, and more. Really go into detail here. Even though there is a picture, there is still more to tell. A picture is worth a thousand words, but an imagination can never have a true defined number.
Moving on to the history, you seems to have a pretty good story, but you can definitely elaborate. Starting with being a loner, you can describe how luck was never on her side; how she went to sleep many times hungry, and over the winter forced to huddle in a close heap with her siblings just to keep warm. Maybe she preferred a specific sibling or two? Go into detail. Were they always wandering off? Were they shy? Was one more keen to leading the other aground? You can surely describe the day of her mother death more. Were Tawny and her siblings around at the time? Were they stuck in the fire, but escaped? Did her whole family die, or just her mother. You can use a ton of sensory detail here as well. "The smell of burning dark washed over Tawny like a cloud of looming danger. She could feel the fire's heat all around her, and death's keen breath breathing down her neck. Where was there to turn? Where was her family? She was so young, what was she to do! Flames scorched the forest in every direction, there was no escaping this alive by simply watching, it was time to act. Time to run, and that was just what Tawny did." Detail is key!!! Elaborate a little more on the Assassins! Were they nice at first, welcoming and pulling off that whole impression of being gracious and kind? Did any little quirk in their behavior show that maybe they were faking it? On the walk back, maybe one of them lashed out at another? That's a very good way to end a paragraph in a history... "It felt as if Tawny had finally found a home, a group of wolves that would love and protect her through thick and thin. Her own pack! Walking silently behind the wolves, Tawny soaked in her surroundings. This was her new home, she better start getting familiar with things. Her wandering eyes were too intent on the forest around her, and not looking ahead at the wolves that had found her. Unaware the group had paused, Tawny accidently kept walking, and tumbled over the tail of on of her nearby hero's. A ferocious growl rose from the male's throat like a crack of thunder, and before Tawny was aware what was happening, two enormous paws had pinned her down, and the smelly, rancid breath of her attacker filled her nostrils. 'Watch it, pup!' he snarled, showing his large, razor like teeth in frustration." Something like that... Details details details! Maybe even describe a little bit of life with the Assassins. Was life hard? Lots of grueling training, or was Tawny a natural? Was there plenty of food, nice bedding and dens? Finally, maybe explain how she stumbled upon Aerial Pack... Maybe she was intruding on their land and the pack took pity on her? Did she snap back at their questions and they saw promise in her? Maybe on of her siblings recognized her, and pleaded for the Alpha to accept her. Once accepted, what did she do as Omega? Lay around camp and stare at the sky? Insist on doing something for the pack, but never getting any worthy job? c| Your story is very interesting and unique, though! I really like it. You're thinking outside of the box! I can see so much promise in you. |3
Personality needs some work. There is SO MUCH to explain about a wolf. Your giving a mere first glance. Go into detail! How is she kind and caring, as you mentioned? Does she like to help anyone in need, maybe she's forgiving, good at giving advice? The best way to go about describing this is thinking of someone you know like this, some of the things they do that you notice that may relate to your character. Just add a little more detail here. Help us to get to know your character inside and out! Maybe she's two faced, brutally honest, or appearing one thing while completely the opposite.

See what you can revise and when you revise, post the new bio in a new post. We can always work more on bio's as this is rotation class. Every week I will be having you making a new character with detail, but whether you want to make more than one a week is your decision. Let me know! I can't wait to see your revision. I love Tawny's story and basic personality. She's also quite beautiful! Very pretty wolf. Nice choice! |3

Here's an older character of mine, so the detail isn't too unbearable. |3


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Username:
Holli
Name:
Sterling
Nickname:
Ster
Age:
4 years, 25
Gender:
Male
Description:
COLOR: Sterling has the appearance of the large, powerful Alpha he is. His fur is that of none other than a Grey Wolf, but his fur patterns are darker and more prominent compared to others. The black that lines areas of his fur are much darker and visible than usual, but it gives him more of a dominant appearance than spiteful or unruly; which numerous darker colored wolves happen to have the appearance of at first glance. The brute's face is rather common for a grey wolf, around the top half grey fur speckled with hints of a golden brown; and the bottom starting at the sides of his muzzle and cheeks working its way down to his chest and belly, a creamy, almost off-white shade. From the inside corner of his eyes, Sterling has this dark outline that follows the line of his eyes, projecting out the outside corner and stretching over to the corner of his cheek. This outline separates his grey-black-golden brown tainted fur, also serving as a highlight to his deep, dark hazelnut glittery orbs. This black outline is also found scattered along his fur in diverse areas; one of them being his ears. Along the rim and outside of the alphas ears, there is a black outline, thicker and slightly darker than the one from his eyes, but yet having the same effect. The outline gives his ears a fluffy, almost cloudy appearance due to the darker shading along the outside, and then the soft light inside; that with the outline looks twice as fluffy and soft. Continuing to the top of Sterling’s head, you find that the colors darken to more of a black and grey mixture of tiny blemishes. The fur lightens down his neck with the gain of the golden brown hue to Sterling’s fur, but then again darkens down his back into purely grey and black strands; mixed with the white fur that halfway down his frame slowly surrenders to the creamy color of his belly and sides. The dark black highlights found on Sterling’s ears and eyes additionally appear along the edge of his shoulder blades; again on his hind legs and tail tip. To refresh the information about the rest of Sterling’s colors, the remainder down his back and to his tail is a dark black and grey mixture of flecks; slowly battling against the creamy white fur that eventually dominates half way up his frame.
STATURE: Sterling is not necessarily an immense male, but he's surely not small either. The alpha is slightly taller than average, standing at 35 inches tall, 7 feet long, and 130lbs; slightly larger than the average 26-32 inches long, 5-6.5 feet long, and 125lb. male. Sterling’s paws however, are a different story. Those extensive feet of his are nearly a half of size larger than the average wolf, rather enormous compared to many others. The alphas shoulders are fairly wide, packing on a decent amount of muscle. Due to his constant running around and training while he was not alpha, Sterling's muscle is well trimmed and packed away; so looks are not all that they seem in Sterling’s case. Other than the above, not much more is special about Sterling’s appearance, only that his tail is possibly a tad shorter than average, and certainly fluffier.
History:
Sterling was brought into the world on a chilly spring morning; the first of his siblings to arrive. He was blind, as blind as you would be with your eyes shut; for this was the very case, and would be for the next few weeks. He spent his days nestled close to his mother, and tightly packed between his brothers and sisters; warmth and their scent radiating off of each one like they were their own individual, personalized heater. This sense of security, of safety, would soon be corrupted though; as it almost always is for the children of a lone wolf.
Life was a struggle for Sterling and his siblings; or at least what was left of them. They were slowly wasting away. Sterling’s mother wasn't able to provide by her lone and helpless self for her 6 pups; and the effects of their desperation were showing, Sterling a prime example. Their ribs and hips had begun to become visible despite their fluffy fur that would normally hide any hint of a thin stature. The growing bodies of Sterling and his siblings were not getting enough of the nutrients they needed, and slowly many of them were unable to even stand; due to the lack of calcium in their system to build up their bone density to support their weight. Sterling was a fighter though; he kept himself standing and walking no matter the condition. Eventually death had taken three of his siblings; finally driving Sterling’s mother to seek help from her mate. Her mate had been none other than the alpha male, Titan, from a pack in the area named Servatis. Titan no longer had any interest in Sterling’s mother, and had no desire to help her; but his children were another story. Titan visited Sterling and his mother, when Sterling was on the verge of being immobile like his siblings. Titan came only find no interest in any of them. He had decided they were too weak, and were doomed beyond his repair; of course he said this with sorrow though, he did love his children. On his way back to his pack, Sterling had (with a great struggle) stood to his paws and yelped, "wait! You have to help us!" Titan had reluctantly turned his head, expecting to find one of his pups wailing on the ground; but instead he found himself looking into the eyes of Sterling, Standing barely, but standing. Titan had immediately decided to take Sterling with him, seeing there might be something he could do for him. Sterling was nursed back to health on a large daily diet, and soon was back to health. Titan trained Sterling to one day take his place, since Sterling was his only heir.
One sad afternoon, Titan disappeared. He left a trace of blood that disappeared a few feet from the large circle in the center of his favourite meadow. The meadow was surrounded by the smell of Titan, but also the dreaded smell of human was drenched all around the snow, stronger in their tracks than away. Sterling was then declared Alpha, and has led his pack for a full year since then.
Personality:
Sterling is your everyday hot-headed male, but there's a serious side to him likewise. Those who just see Sterling as an Alpha know he is strong and confidant in his decisions, and stands by what he thinks is best and/or right. He expects respect, but also understands that everyone can also be friends while respecting one another. Ster is strict and expects what he asked for to be completed without question. He may seem rather tough and expectant, but really Sterling is understanding and fairly lenient. He's easy to trust and will have your back no matter what, so long as you don't give him reasons to agree otherwise. Those who know Sterling a scrap closer know he loves a good laugh, and is just as content relaxing and doing nothing as giving out orders and making sure everything is in place. They know Ster would easily consider himself sly, even though it can be a bit obvious what he is up to at times. If given the chance Sterling can be outgoing and fun; even reckless if something too large isn't at stake. He is by no doubt a trouble maker by nature; but knows when to behave as he is expected to, like the alpha he is. He's a bit hot headed as mentioned before, but better described as confidant and show-off-y. He's very charming, always knowing the right things to say and easy to be around; someone that anyone can feel comfortable talking about almost anything around. When Sterling shows his flirtatious side, you sure as heck know it. He'll go out of his way to impress, and even drop subtle taunts and always have that bright and shining smile flashing across his lips. Sterling is very protective and intimidating if he wants to be; not afraid to man up and fight if the time comes, although just like the next guy in line would rather solve things peacefully.
Strengths-
Friendly
Determined
Patient
Open Minded
Protective
Charming
Strong
Skilled
Intelligent
Observant
Funny
Kind
Confidant
Opinionated
Weaknesses-
Hunting--Keeping quiet
Over Thinks Things
Reckless
Addictive Personality
Past Reminders
Rejection
Likes-
Thunder storms, hunting (even though he's awful at it), running, eating, food, pups, laughing, friends, family, spring, winter, fall, clouds, the sky, sleep, walks, late night walks, soft beds, exploring, learning, playing, talking, forests, grass, breezy wind, and etc.
Dislikes-
Death, summer, heat, arguing, being questioned, illness, criticism, open areas, losing, strong wind, bushes, thorns, pain (but he can deal with it), and etc.
Fears-
Death, rejection, illness, falling, failing, fire, people, guns, and etc.
Rank:
Alpha Male
Pack:
Servatis
Crush/Mate:
Open
Offspring?:
None
Other:
Nope!

[TheTravelingWriter]

And I shall work on that.

[zboe]

Username: Zboe
Name:Nyona
Nickname: (optional) Ny
Age: 3 human years
Gender: female
Rank/Loner: loner
Pack/Loner:loner
Crush/Mate: looking
Offspring?: (only if you are an alpha, holy blood, or beta) None yet but wants pups
Description: (Describe your wolf in words) She is a red/grey and white Mexican wolf. She has moderate length fur that is especially long around her tail. She has a grey wolf saddle pattern that covers almost all of her back and down her tail and legs, it also goes up and flecks around her face as well. The saddle is a redish brown flecked with grey and white. She a creamy white underside and white faded streaks on her side and under her tail.She also has white paws and cheek fur. She has light forest green eyes and light red brown around them down to her nose on the top of her muzzle. She is of average high around 25 inches tall and has a lean figure.
History: (Not optinal, and no TBRPed) She was born in a pack as alphas daughter and was destined to be next alphess of her pack. As she grew up she had noticed many things she didn't like about her pack and the wolves in it. They were a harsh rather blood thirsty name and the wolves were no different from the rumors that spread.Simply put betrayal ran through their viens. The pack had started from an unjust ruling placed on the founding alphess, the crime of killing a pup. She has panicked at the sight of a fox an dpicked the pup up and tossed it into the den before gaurding the entrence, the pup had died from the ackward landing and the founder was blamed and banished as a yearling. The pack had gone down many generations but every wolf in it had some family tail of betrayal and they shouldered the whole hatred through the generations. As Nyona grew older and more outgoing about her dislike of the behavior and habits and how she didn't like the pack, she started to be the curl-tail rather than the soon to be alphess. After her parents had heard about her opinions criticizing the way they lived they had been furious and decided that she would no longer be the alpha but a prisoner as punishment. At that Nyona's attitude had darkened and she had begun to snarl and strike at the guards. Eventually after months of the confinement to the den she had broke out killing one of her guards and ran away. The pack had searched for her and had decided they would put her to death, hearing this the yearling had ran out of the territory and as far as she could until she couldn't walk any longer and then began the life as a kerl as far away from her birthplace as possible. She has been roaming around since and even though she has a strong motherly and loving instinct its unsee able because of her anger and distrust.
Personality: She is seen as cold, distrusting and always angered and to most that is always how she is. She has a hard personality to those she doesn't know because of her past and doesn't think she will ever change. But if you were able to get her to trust you she is motherly loving and kind its just she cant be that anymore because of the imprints of her memory.
Strengths- She is a very good huntress and enjoys the quiet of hunting alone best, but then again she has never hunted with others. She is also strong at locking others out and not letting herself get attached and involved endless throughly disgusted with the situation.
Weaknesses- She is a rather bad fighter and often chooses flight over fight rather than risk injury.
Likes- She likes likes rain and nightime more than anything else and also oddly loves thunder storms. She also enjoys soft breezes and water.
Dislikes- She dislikes hot days and areas feeling their incapable for sustaining life. Another dislike of hers is fighting and bloodshed.
Fears- She is afraid of death and old age, as most animals, but also of trusting other wolves for fear they might turn on her.
Other: Nope.

[TheTravelingWriter]

Gah, sorry I wasn't able to get the rewritten version up sooner. I got busy with real life.

History:
Tawny was brought into the world on a cold, snowy winter Transylvania day. She was the youngest out of five and, also the runt of the litter. She had two brothers, Jasper and Hermes, and two sisters, Hedwig and Lupeii. Sadly, she never was able to get to know Hedwig and Jasper, as they passed away at two weeks in life. The new mother would have never guessed they would be the first to pass away in the harsh winter.
Two more weeks passed by, and now Tawny was a month old. She was starting to form friendships with her only brother, Hermes, but rivalries with her only sister, Lupeii. For some reason, Lupeii envied Tawny's way of survival through the harsh winter. Sometimes they would get into fights that their mother would have to break up if they got bad enough. She didn't like the fights, but they always did need to happen at one point in life.
Finally, Tawny's mother found a new mate. Her new mate was a muscular, black wolf with navy blue eyes. The pups automatically accepted him to be their new father considering he was very caring, and they had never had a real father. Tawny especially loved her new father, as he would teach her things that he wouldn't teach her siblings. She loved him and could never leave him alone... Well, that is until he was murdered by a violent wolf that no one had even noticed in the forest. They had found his body near a waterfall, soaked in blood and water.
That same day, the small wolf family was ran out by a much bigger pack. Tawny immediately knew they probably had something to do with her father's death and almost fought one of the pups. Her mother pulled her back away from the fight, and the small family left, leaving Lupeii behind for the pack to take care of. Sadly, the young pup was happy about her sister leaving. She was so rude at times...
The small wolf family finally found a new den that wasn't far from the old den, but far enough from the den so that they were safe. The area was plentiful with prey and even had a small waterfall near it. It was perfect to raise a family of pups, as it was safe from enemies... Or so Tawny's mother believed.
A month had passed since Tawny was forced to relocate with her family, and the fact that their only father had passed away had been a month ago had been erased from their memories. Lupeii's memories had been erased from the pup's memories. Everyone had moved along from the past... But now their life was about to come tumbling down upon them.
The day was a perfect spring day; a gentle breeze blowing, sun shining brightly, waterfall sparkling in the morning sunlight, and birds singing their happy songs of the spring. Tawny was playing with her brother, Hermes, near the bank of the waterfall. They would have never guessed what was about to happen. Suddenly, gray soot started to rain down from the sky, and it became very hot all of a sudden. Flames suddenly shot up from the sky, and the pups started careening blindly towards the only exit that was possible. At that moment, thoughts of their mother was completely gone, and at the time being, the pups had to survive. They didn't stop for at least thirty or so minutes, or at least until they got to another river.
The tired pups plopped down at the side of the river, tired. Then it hit them; they didn't see their mother any where. They called out for her over and over again, searching for her until the rays of dusk met their eyes. At that point, the pups were tired, hungry, and cold. They worried that they wouldn't even make it through the night. Not caring where they were, they plopped down in a forest clearing to at least get some shut eye.
For the next two months, the pups wondered aimlessly. They taught themselves how to hunt, how to get along, and which plants are poisonous and which weren't. Life was harsh for the two pups, but they somehow managed to survive.
Finally, they met the Assassins. They found them while stumbling around their rocky territory and met the Alpha male of the pack. He was kind, a lot like Jett, and was a strong, iron gray wolf with stunning light gray eyes. He took the pups in immediately, and the mothers of his pack accepted them almost as quickly as they came. Everyone was kind to them, offering food to them before everyone else. Even the Alpha male, whose name still remains unknown to this day, allowed them to have things that even the pack born pups weren't allowed. They loved it there... That was, until they turned a year old.
It all started with Hermes being dragged away with the other year old males and all the males of the pack disappearing. Tawny knew immediately that something wasn't up. All the other males disappeared, and the she-wolves of the pack were acting extremely awkward about something. When she asked around, the she-wolves would just say that everything would be fine, and that her brother would return soon or later. Tawny knew that the females were lying and went out in search of her brother.
She found him... Training with the Alpha male in a bloody fight to the death. Having seen the scene, Tawny was immediately taken into training since she saw what had happened. The training was brutal, and she would wind up with large, gaping wounds each and every day. No matter her wounds, she would never be given breaks. Despite this, she was still a caring wolf and was known to not fight the wolves. Because of this, after a year of brutal training, she was ran out of the pack with a twisted paw that would never heal in her lifetime.
After a year of wondering about on her own, the she-wolf finally stumbled into Aerial Pack territory. She was taken in as a captive, but the Alpha female thought differently. She accepted Tawny into her pack under one condition; she would be the Omega of the pack. Of course, she took this kindly since she could deal with anything at all.
Now she still lives with the Aerial Pack as the Omega. She restlessly searches for her family day after day and may have found whereabouts of her sister though she can't be sure. She still wonders who her real father was after this whole time...

I personally think there's far too much detail in that. Anyway, I would revise it tonight, but I need to get off for now.

[Smamm]

Sorry this took me so long guys! D| Let's get back into the swing of things! |3

zboe;;
Yes, we need to lengthen this dear. Honestly include EVERYTHING. We need to get to know your character, help us learn them inside and out! Here are a few pointers for ya to get started. |3 It's not bad, just too generic. Use your imagination! Have fun with it! Maybe listen to some inspirational music, really try to just elaborate. |3
- You did good describing her, but your being to generic. Have some fun! Throw in some similes and phrases! Describe her build and fur and color and everything. Here's a few examples. "Ny is a petite breed of wolf, Mexican wolf with a unique pattern of colors. She has an autumn sort of color scheme, colors ranging from a reddish-orange to browns, blacks, and even a light off-white cream sort of color." "Her back is peppered in colors of black, brown, russet, and white, making up the darkest portion of her soft, shorter fur." Just let it come to you, but think outside of the box! |3
- History... hmmm... be more descriptive! We need to know Ny like we are her! Did she have siblings? Was she the only heir to the throne? What made her pack blood thirsty? Was there a specific event, events, or mindset spreading through them? When she broke away from her pack, was life hard? Did she think about turning back? Did she not even consider it? Why? Was she regretting leaving her warm, dry bed? Or was it better than dealing with those self-absorbed wolves she formerly knew as her pack-mates?
- Personality needs a lot of work. We need to understand her! Why is she the way she is? Any specific reason, or does she just have a short temper? Does she not like acting the way she does, or does she not regret a moment of it? GO INTO DETAIL! Include everything! Does she act differently if you get to know her? Does she have a sterotype toward male and female? Does she have a gender preference on who she selects to ever talk with? Explain, explain, and explain! Think of quirks, maybe even relate her to someone you know and add a little of what they do into her.
- There are no end to strength's and weakness's! Just add even the most simple. Does she like water? The sky? Stars? Grass? Running? Being alone? The list is endless. Just bulk em' up a little!


Saga;;
You kidding me! It's soooo much better! I can really look through Tawny's eyes and see it all happening, relate to her! It's such an improvement! |D I actually really enjoyed reading it. Very unique and creative! Very nice work, honestly! |3

[zboe]

Okay thanks ill listen to some songs and update it.

[Smamm]

-pokes you two-

Common guys! Don't die on me! D|

[TheTravelingWriter]

Sorry, my life is just a bit busy and I can't work on things as often as I would like.