Creative Writing Club (CWC)

[pancreas]

I saw. x3 I'm trying out a name at the moment, but I'm keeping the others in mind if I go off it! c;

[Kiliann]

Nice story! Confusing... but great! Don't worry, it's not THAT confusing.

[Faint]

The story is actually confusing but I think it is supposed to be a mind-twister. c;

[pancreas]

My story? *Flails* How is it confusing? xD

[Kiliann]

Well, it oesn't explain very well what 'the other world' is, and still don't really get what a 'tamer' is... you've set this up in either a fantasy world or a sci-fi world- I can't tell. Those are a few reasons why your story is confusing... no offense meant.

[pancreas]

Well, well, well, she's going to explain more what a Tamer is when they go inside the building. There's a lot of Tamers inside, so she'll give more information. As for the planet, she's never been there, so she's just as confused as everyone else. Someone shall tell her though. And, it's just set on Earth. A little in the future, obviously, but not by much. Sorry it's so confusing, but everything will begin to make sense soon~ :3

[Faint]

In order for the story to have a cliff-hanger, the introduction has to be crystal clear. Imagine having a story with a confusing start and with an confusing end. Though overall its a good story.

[pancreas]

Okie dokie, thanks for your help~ It will all become clear soon. ;3

[*Skylar The Plant*]

I posted my stories in an idle bit, no one had posted in a while and I don't think it was in the middle of a conversation. Someone posted their story right after mine though, and there's was critiqued on but mine was not...

I've started writing a new story ^^ It's called Strangers. It may seem like it's a bit "weird" at first, but later on in the story it takes a twist and has ACTUAL morals. Like it proves very well the whole "Pedophile relationships are bad" and "Don't talk to strangers"
So I'm still a nice kid.

Strangers Prologue
Strangers Chapter one

I would like some feedback on this.
Also I'm in the middle of writing up the second Chapter of Stardom, which I had posted earlier on this thread.

[Bumping so I can get critiques on them ]

I'll be entering the contest, defiantly~! I PMed you an idea Hope you like it Leafy~!

I wrote the prologue and first chapter of my new story "Stardom" last night. Take a look if you want :3
Here are the links: Chapter 1, Prologue
I sorta thought up the stupid plot randomly and I don't really know if I wrote it very well

[This only got one critique, and that was from Leaf :3]

And also this:
Strardom Chapter 2

Thanks in advance everyone, sorry to sound pushy for critiques ^^
[Oh and please ignore the mild cuss's in Stardom's chapters. I have a potty mouth ^^;]

And again. Not one critique >.>

And I agree with the others about your story Nightingale, it's very good, but rather confusing.

[Kiliann]

... the only thing that wasn't blocked was the Prolouge to Strangers. If you want more people to read your stories, please don't write anything that is considered mature. Now a perfectly good story cannot be read by people like me...