• A poet's clouded mind - poems from an aspiring young poet

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Re: • A poet's clouded mind - poems from an aspiring young p

Postby Ranger of the North » Thu Jun 15, 2017 6:11 pm

Ooh, I particularly liked 'Black Thoughts' (:
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Re: • A poet's clouded mind - poems from an aspiring young p

Postby livingdeadhorror » Thu Jun 15, 2017 7:17 pm

Ranger of the North wrote:
Ooh, I particularly liked 'Black Thoughts' (:


Thank-you so much!!c: I'm glad 😁😁
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Postby livingdeadhorror » Thu Jun 15, 2017 8:50 pm

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Re: • A poet's clouded mind - poems from an aspiring young p

Postby livingdeadhorror » Thu Jun 15, 2017 9:05 pm

Tired

Much like myself,
I am tired.
Overwhelmed by the sea
Named an illness-
I rot from the inside out
My brain numb with
Medication
I want to fall asleep,
Yet I will wake up half tired.
I wish I could be awake.
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Postby livingdeadhorror » Fri Jun 16, 2017 12:28 am

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Re: • A poet's clouded mind - poems from an aspiring young p

Postby livingdeadhorror » Fri Jun 16, 2017 1:25 am

Blue
Today,
I feel blue.
Not a polite pastel blue,
But the kind of blue
That destines the storm.
The kind of blue
That is worn
On your face
When sadness takes over.
I'm yet to become
The blue sky,
My day will come.
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Postby livingdeadhorror » Fri Jun 16, 2017 1:51 am

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Re: • A poet's clouded mind - poems from an aspiring young p

Postby livingdeadhorror » Fri Jun 16, 2017 2:24 am

If I tell you
Will you laugh at my face?
Throw it straight back at me
Just like before.
You became a ghost,
Much like the rest.
That does not matter,
For I am always changing.
Much like a sunset,
I change in colour.
Will you read my true ones?
Will you warp them in your own way?
I refuse it.
You watch me from the far,
Try to cloud me with your guilt,
One more time
For I will shine through.
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Postby livingdeadhorror » Fri Jun 16, 2017 4:41 am

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