{ ＩＮＫＬＩＮＧＳ v.4 } A Thread For Writers

[minimire]

hey guys! just wanted to update anyone who is interested in what's going on with my writing life! XD

well i started writing a high fantasy story with a friend of mine from another country. we actually brought the idea up last year and had started writing before we realized that our characters were too flat and the plot felt too rushed. so now, we are restarting everything from scratch. the worldbuilding, character creation all that, all from scratch. so we're starting small, we're starting with the races. and since we already did a very in depth creation of the elves last time, we decided to start with that.

i'll just tell you guys something small about the elves

there are a total of five elven kingdoms: Tasirdil [north], Tadirien [northwest], Nimrastir [south], Cilost [center], Vallonde [west]
the tasirdil kingdom is in a pine forest full of fog and very little light. the tadirien kingdom is also in a forest but full of greenery and light. nimrastir is on the edge of a cliff, where the ocean is just below. cilost is in the desert where there are longer days and shorter nights and water is also scarce there. sandstorms and heatwaves are very common there. finally, vallonde is up in the snow-capped mountains where there are longer nights and shorter days. it's really cold there and avalanches and blizzards are common.

[Musicality]

Alrighty, here goes my first post here! I'm trying my hand at something new that I've never attempted before and I would really love some opinions on it. Its A Walk Down Memory Lane and while I'm hardly into it I don't wish to continue something if it is dry and boring. I usually write fairly crazy stuff (my main thing I'm working on is about a physcopath who is taking over the world by turning everyone against eachother with fear, but I can't post it on cs) and so this (idk what genre it would be) is very different for me. Any feedback is apprieciated (:

[watermelon.]

@lucas the shade wasn't necessary
yes i'll make a chatzy soon enough,, bring back the OG inklings.
anyway - yeah, i haven't written in a long time and i'm sure i
haven't even improved. yesterday i deleted a lot of old writing
threads, and i realized how cringey i was (and am), so it almost
makes me not want to post any stuff for a while in fear of that
happening again. oh well, i guess life goes on.

@Minimire Galfindo
that sounds really interesting, actually. it's nice to see that you're
so dedicated to getting the details of it! i think if you continue
on writing that it will be really good. it reminds me a tiny bit of
warrior cats? just in the whole division idea, but other than that
it's not really like it at all cx.

@The Succulent Queen
i like what you wrote, and it's pretty dramatic sounding, and it
looks like you were going for that? if you would want a larger
critique, i can do that over pm, but i'm notsure if you wanted
it. just keep writing and you'll get even betterwith time! (don't
be like me and give up for a whole year cause that sorta kills it)


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to everyone:
- make sure you are responding to others and giving feedback be-
fore asking for your own. this is a community, and if nobody is
ever responding, we're just going to get a whole lot of people
talking and asking.

- yes, i am going to make a chatzy, so look out for that in the
near future, and feel free to join at any time and talk!

- and lastly, i decided it might be interesting to have a little qotd.
(question of the day)! just to keep things moving in here and get
discussion going a bit more.


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[b]what is an area of your writing you think could use improvement and why? (grammar, detail, dialogue, etc.)[/b]

[Demonic Rooster]

what is an area of your writing you think could use improvement and why? (grammar, detail, dialogue, etc.)

Dialogue. Definitely dialogue. I can write 1,000 words describing a character's personality, but as soon as I have to demonstrate that personality by giving them a natural, yet unique, way of speaking that also advances the plot -- I'm at a loss.

[Stonefly]

what is an area of your writing you think could use improvement and why? (grammar, detail, dialogue, etc.)
I personally could use a lot of work in pretty much everything listed. Although my grammar and spelling are getting better it is still something I struggle with.
If I had to pick on I would say detail. I have a problem with writing things without enough detail or too much detail. I find that I can never get that nice in between point? If that makes any sense. Right now I am working on a story about a mute girl and a deaf boy who fall in love, and because there is such little dialogue between the two and a lot of sign language and body language I need to show, I've been struggling to find that perfect point. I would help if I took the time to work on it but I can never seem to get the motivation to work on anything or I just don't have the time to sit down. Oh well

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[Musicality]

@lucas
Personally when I have writers block I open a new document (or perfected medium) and just write whatever comes to mind. I once wrote a short story about the blinking cursor comming to life and haunting me because I had writers block.

@qotd
Hmm, defainatly my grammar/ spelling. I can't spell worth a crap and I'm constantly looking up wether to use what punctuation where.

[minimire]

@watermelon. thank you! there's still a lot of work to be done, and in fact we're not even 10% done, but since i'm working with a friend, it's less stressful and boring this way. not that world-building is boring, it's just that sometimes i'll have no muse or inspiration to continue.

what is an area of your writing you think could use improvement and why? (grammar, detail, dialogue, etc.)
well i would have to say it would be writing descriptions, for anything really - places, people, creatures. i can picture them very clearly in my head, but when i try to write them down, i can't seem to add in every detail that i see in my mind and when i read what i wrote, i can't really picture it. so i really need more improvement on that.

[lucas.]

what is an area of your writing you think could use improvement and why? (grammar, detail, dialogue, etc.)
more detailing - for sure. i think i'm pretty good with grammar and dialogue (at least i hope so), but detailing.. not so much. you've (referring to melon) read a few of my stories before and i'm sure you can agree with me. i'm working on it though, so that's great. cx

@watermelon. ;; oh but it so was. anyway, i really can't wait for the chatzy to come back. i know you told me to make it but we all know in the end you're going to end up doing it because i'm too darn lazy.
@the succulent queen ;; thanks for your little tip <3 i'll make sure to try that out in the future if i remember to with my awful memory! also i read the first post for "a walk down memory lane" and it seems like it'll be a fantastic story, honestly. i'll be watching out for when you post more of it! can't wait. c:

[inspiration.]

@Lucas,

Honestly, what i do is browse the fourms and become inspired! Ironic, i know, but i find it really helps.

[Nitro Indigo]

what is an area of your writing you think could use improvement and why? (grammar, detail, dialogue, etc.)
Pacing. In all of my now-dead chapter fics, I never had a chapter more than 2,000 words long, and kept putting in filler to make them longer, glossing over the journey. RIP in pepperoni Secret of the Great Sea 2015 - 2016.