@Ranger congrats!
@De same here. But we'll get it!
@Klain "that" would actually work better. Not sure how to explain why though.
Møriarty x. wrote:@Ranger congrats!
@De same here. But we'll get it!
@Klain "that" would actually work better. Not sure how to explain why though.
Møriarty x. wrote:@Klain "that" would actually work better. Not sure how to explain why though.
Klain wrote:Ranger of the North wrote:L.V.L wrote:People have told me my whole life that love can either mend a broken heart or can break it even more to the point of death. No one has ever tried to love someone to the point where one day they finally give up, because you were told if the other person wasn't right - you shouldn't chase after them. I never listened though - and it cost me my life.
He was perfect. He was the guy I always pictured myself with; even if I thought those feelings were for others. His bright mysterious green eyes and his chocolate hair - what part of him couldn't you love? I knew he didn't truly love me though; it's just what people said. He would pick up the pieces from broken hearts and try and put them back together without making it obvious of what he was doing and then at the last second when you thought you were safe - he would tear you apart. But I didn't care, I was in love with the idea of love and wanting to be with this boy made me insane. I would try my hardest everyday to see him, to be near him whenever I could, to hear his voice - it's what calmed me inside. He noticed me a couple of times before and then things escalated to the point where he'd walk me to the park and we'd just sit or lay there under the trees for hours just talking or being in each others presence; until we both had to leave. Those were the most magical moments in my lifetime. I had let my heart take over my whole body instead of my mind, because I didn't want to ruin anything. And yet things slowly started to happen; things I knew I noticed before but I ignored it at the time because I was to distracted by what was in front of me. That he was slowly distancing himself, not really meeting up, never making eye contact, never checking on me when I was alone or sad. It seemed like all the things that I heard was coming true, and it broke me inside. I thought to myself over and over again that it just couldn't be true, that someone wouldn't do that to a person... kill them inside like that. He would trick me at some points, look over at me and do his stupid little half smile that just lifted my spirit or he would brush against my shoulder when we pasted each other. I knew that I was letting this boy get inside my head, I knew that he wasn't really interested and yet I kept trying to keep him; I tried to do everything in my power to make him stay with me because I needed him. Days turned into weeks where we wouldn't show up and I kept thinking about the worst possible outcomes, but everyone told me that he was alright and I shouldn't be over reacting about this. But that's just it... I over react to so many things, and this is just another one of those things. When he did show up, I would look into his eyes and tell that what we once had was gone. And it left me broken, broken to the point where no one could ever fix me. I just sat there everyday looking at the people around me and hear them joke about how hard their life is and how they just want to end it, but I know they won't because they think it's funny to just say that. But I don't think they realize how much that phrase actually means to someone like me.
I'm a human being who's been broken by a boy who didn't think much of anything about me - who saw me as just an object he could mess with. And he left me with a breathing body who's dead inside.
I'm in need of opinions on this one and if you find any mistakes please tell me!! <3Wow.
That's deep.
I really like it! c:
I do think your last "who's" would be better as "that's", though? c:
So much motivation on this thread, now! I love it!![]()
I'm not doing NaNo, but my lil story now has 7531 words
Isn't "that" for objects/things? ._.
Groaning I wake up to a wall in my face. How did I get here? I wonder. The last thing I remember doing before falling asleep is helping Kaya get ready for work tomorrow. I think tomorrow has come and gone by now. I roll off my arm which has fallen asleep by now and sit up. Yelping as I bang my head into something really hard.
AriDeZu wrote:Groaning I wake up to a wall in my face. How did I get here? I wonder. The last thing I remember doing before falling asleep is helping Kaya get ready for work tomorrow. I think tomorrow has come and gone by now. I roll off my arm which has fallen asleep by now and sit up. Yelping as I bang my head into something really hard.
And that is all I have for NaNo. Help me
It should turn out a wonderful story. . . . . . now I have to get it out of my head and onto the computer in a way that makes sense. AAAHHHH! I'm doomed
AriDeZu wrote:Groaning I wake up to a wall in my face. How did I get here? I wonder. The last thing I remember doing before falling asleep is helping Kaya get ready for work tomorrow. I think tomorrow has come and gone by now. I roll off my arm which has fallen asleep by now and sit up. Yelping as I bang my head into something really hard.
And that is all I have for NaNo. Help me
It should turn out a wonderful story. . . . . . now I have to get it out of my head and onto the computer in a way that makes sense. AAAHHHH! I'm doomed
NopesaurusRexx wrote:AriDeZu wrote:Groaning I wake up to a wall in my face. How did I get here? I wonder. The last thing I remember doing before falling asleep is helping Kaya get ready for work tomorrow. I think tomorrow has come and gone by now. I roll off my arm which has fallen asleep by now and sit up. Yelping as I bang my head into something really hard.
And that is all I have for NaNo. Help me
It should turn out a wonderful story. . . . . . now I have to get it out of my head and onto the computer in a way that makes sense. AAAHHHH! I'm doomed
It doesn't have to make sense! You just gotta write and not worry about editing or having it make sense until after the month is over.
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