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Re: •••- T h e - W h i t e - S t o n e -•••

Postby Kisiel » Fri Feb 11, 2011 10:18 am

Thanks for the comments everyone!

The banner is finally up on the front page!
Thank you Chry!
Stay positive.

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Re: •••- T h e - W h i t e - S t o n e -•••

Postby ~Supernatural Life~ » Fri Feb 18, 2011 11:18 pm

AmazinG story! :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap:
"At the foot of Mount Tibor, surrounded and outnumbered,
the Order's only chance lay in this sword - the Runeblade.
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The weapon was borne by the warrior Heron, and the dragon, Arokh.
As the armies clashed, Navaros entered a mystic trance,
drawing power for a massive spell of destruction.
With the stolen strength of his dragon's soul,
Navaros had grown far mightier than any mage before him.
As the words of destruction rose to his lips,
a lone dragon came shrieking from the clouds,
weaving amidst the streams of lightning and fire that flooded the sky.
On Arokh's back, Heron gripped the Runeblade in both hands,
and with one final cry,
drove it deep into Navaros' blackened heart.
All sound went silent somehow, in the moment of the act.
The tremendous forces Navaros had summoned were unleashed without direction.
The clash of swords was heard no longer, and blackness hung over the field.
When at last the smoke cleared, the two great armies lay decimated.
Where Navaros had stood, a wound-like rip had been torn in the very fabric of space.
In the smouldering crater below, Heron lay dead, the Runeblade broken in two at his side.
In that blackened pit, only the dragon Arokh still clung to life..."


Legend of the Order of the Flame,
of Arokh the Hero
and Heron the Mighty Rider
of how they saved the world of Drakan...
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Re: •••- T h e - W h i t e - S t o n e -•••

Postby `Hypnotic » Mon Feb 21, 2011 10:56 am

Hey Kasu?
When you said;
tyre
did you mean;
tire?
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Re: •••- T h e - W h i t e - S t o n e -•••

Postby Geronimo. » Thu Feb 24, 2011 4:46 am

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Typing on my iPod is kinda hard XD

Wow, you're typing on your iPod? That makes it doubly impressive. I only have one piece of critisism, and that is the length of your chapters. They are longer than most that I have seen onsite, but when you compare that to published novels and even some good fanfiction, "The White Stone" can be considered short. That's just a small thing that isn't really that important though.
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Re: •••- T h e - W h i t e - S t o n e -•••

Postby Kisiel » Sat Feb 26, 2011 2:56 am

The Dungeon Mistress wrote:
Kassua wrote:
Typing on my iPod is kinda hard XD

Wow, you're typing on your iPod? That makes it doubly impressive. I only have one piece of critisism, and that is the length of your chapters. They are longer than most that I have seen onsite, but when you compare that to published novels and even some good fanfiction, "The White Stone" can be considered short. That's just a small thing that isn't really that important though.


Thank you ^^
The first chapter is short for one simple reason: it's an extended introduction to the character's life, and I thought that a relatively short amount would be fitting. Also, I had to end it there to add to the effect... And remember, it's all building up to one event where the name of the story comes from. Later on, the chapters will be longer than the first one, as each one will be covering up a bigger part of her life. [spoiler]After all, I will have to write about four years of her life, because *cough* she'll conisde ending it at the age of seventeen C= [/spoiler]
The second chapter is only about halfway through, if not less than that, so you shouldn't really worry about the length ^_^
Again, thanks for reading.
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Postby longlive » Fri Mar 04, 2011 11:53 am

Love it <3
Can't wait for more!
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Re: •••- T h e - W h i t e - S t o n e -•••

Postby ~Supernatural Life~ » Mon Mar 07, 2011 2:15 am

If this turns into a novel(hopefully!) I'll read it right aaaaaawwwwwwwaaaaaaayyyyyyyyyyyyyyy!!!!!! :clap: :clap: :thumbup: :thumbup:
"At the foot of Mount Tibor, surrounded and outnumbered,
the Order's only chance lay in this sword - the Runeblade.
Image

The weapon was borne by the warrior Heron, and the dragon, Arokh.
As the armies clashed, Navaros entered a mystic trance,
drawing power for a massive spell of destruction.
With the stolen strength of his dragon's soul,
Navaros had grown far mightier than any mage before him.
As the words of destruction rose to his lips,
a lone dragon came shrieking from the clouds,
weaving amidst the streams of lightning and fire that flooded the sky.
On Arokh's back, Heron gripped the Runeblade in both hands,
and with one final cry,
drove it deep into Navaros' blackened heart.
All sound went silent somehow, in the moment of the act.
The tremendous forces Navaros had summoned were unleashed without direction.
The clash of swords was heard no longer, and blackness hung over the field.
When at last the smoke cleared, the two great armies lay decimated.
Where Navaros had stood, a wound-like rip had been torn in the very fabric of space.
In the smouldering crater below, Heron lay dead, the Runeblade broken in two at his side.
In that blackened pit, only the dragon Arokh still clung to life..."


Legend of the Order of the Flame,
of Arokh the Hero
and Heron the Mighty Rider
of how they saved the world of Drakan...
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Re: •••- T h e - W h i t e - S t o n e -•••

Postby Alina_Mau » Fri Mar 11, 2011 7:41 am

Hey hunny! ^_^ This is still completely awesome 8D and where did you go to get the banner? I'd love one for my stories X3
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Re: •••- T h e - W h i t e - S t o n e -•••

Postby Kisiel » Fri Mar 11, 2011 7:44 am

I got the banner from Chry's art shop XD
And I have absolutly no motivation to continue writing....
I want to finish, and I will, because I have the whole plot planned out and everything.
It's just that something is stopping me from typing another word.
Stupid memories, they will never leave me alone....
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Re: •••- T h e - W h i t e - S t o n e -•••

Postby Alina_Mau » Fri Mar 11, 2011 7:47 am

awww *cuddle* do it when you feel like it it'll come out way better :3 ♥ (if you need to talk never be afraid to pm sweetie)
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