Pound of Love - JUDGING!! 155 kennels to adopt!

[OrangeSocks]

I asked for a critique a few pages back and never got a response, if staff are busy I totally understand >.<

I'm in college, and don't have a lot of time to put towards this site now, but since today is a bit of a slow day for me, I'll do a critique for you real fast here.

Thank you so much :3 School/life should come first. Sorry to be a bother owo

[booklover789]

I asked for a critique a few pages back and never got a response, if staff are busy I totally understand >.<

I'm in college, and don't have a lot of time to put towards this site now, but since today is a bit of a slow day for me, I'll do a critique for you real fast here.

Thank you so much :3 School/life should come first. Sorry to be a bother owo

It's fine - it's just that with my hectic school schedule and Sabje being a new mother (her baby came into this world fairly recently), we don't always have time to put towards this. This is why there are other mods and critique-givers and artists and donators who help us, and who we appreciate receiving help from. You're not a bother at all - I'm merely explaining why we won't always be on or be prompt with responses to certain things.

[booklover789]

Username: booklover789
Kennel numbers: 16 and 72
Credit for lines and color in: Revamped by booklover789 using Rinmaru's Games: Mega Anime Couple Creator
korenalis




Username: booklover789
Kennel numbers: 67 and 78
Credit for lines and color in: Revamped by booklover789 using Rinmaru's Games: Mega Anime Couple Creator
korenalis




Username: booklover789
Kennel numbers: 102 and 108
Credit for lines and color in: Revamped by booklover789 using Rinmaru's Games: Mega Anime Couple Creator
korenalis

[SabrinaB]

Thank you for the revamps booklover789!
I would like to add that I have a very big school paper to finish by the end of the month. After that I will have more time again to give Critiques etc.
I might give another extension if I dont make it this month. But I will do my best!

[ahirked]

What is the current date for entries for characters because I am slightly confused ovo'

also markkk

[SabrinaB]

What is the current date for entries for characters because I am slightly confused ovo'

also markkk

I plan on closing this for judging by the end of this month

[Electric~Lime~Zebra]

Username: Electric~Lime~Zebra
Kennel number: 29
Why do you want this character? wip
Where will you use it, and what will you use it for? wip


Name: Drift
Gender: male
Personality: wip
History: wip
Likes, dislikes: wip
Extras: (optional)

Uggh Ill have to come back and finish gtg for a family dinnerdarrandor

[SabrinaB]

Up

[SabrinaB]

The code drop has been set: March 6
Same for the Take Us Home thread!

[nyctorin.]

{ T i e n. L i l i t u. }

"Life is a beautiful lie,
and death is a painful truth."
-- Unknown

by me
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{ B a s i c. I n f o r m a t i o n. }

Username:
.::DJ-Wolfie::. , though you can call me DJ, Wolfie, or Infinity. There isn't really much of a
story behind why I chose the name, aside from the fact that I love music of all kind and
obviously love wolves. X) As for why I also use Infinity as a nickname, I am often referred
to as Infinitely_Sarcastic on other web sites, and have been considering a name change.

Kennel number:
136
X - X - X

Why do you want this character?:
I've recently created an idea for a story, but I'm not sure how I plan to execute this idea. A
novel, a series of short stories, or simply just a fantasy world I can use to place multiple RP
characters in. Either way, I am determined to use this idea in some way, and I've already
developed the "Main Character", which is Tien here. Originally, I was going to use one of my
already existing OCs and call in an AU version of them, but I figured it was time I stopped
recycling the same character over and over again.

Where will you use it, and what will you use it for?:
As aforementioned, I will use her in presenting this story, and then maybe in role plays as
well. It really all depends on how I decide to use this idea, but I WILL be using her,
regardless. I would be delighted to draw/order more art of her as well.

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{ C h a r a c t e r. I n f o r m a t i o n. }

Name:
Tien-
A name that means "Angel/angelic". After being
accepted among the Angels, most are given new
names to signify their new place in the afterlife,
and it is very common for these names to be
associated with the Angels.

Lilitu-
This was her name as a mortal, which she still
goes by at times, since she is neither fully angel
nor mortal. This name means "of the night".
Placing the two names together, you would get
"Angel of the night".

Gender:
DFAB Cisgender
She/her

Species:
Feral-Anthro shifter, meaning that she (as well
as everyone else in her world) can shift between
a four-legged form and an anthropomorphic form
at will. Not human forms.

Age:
4 (28)
Four years old as a feral, twenty-eight as an anthro. In her world, you are based on your anthro age, and your feral body ages every seven years.

Mortal Status:
Half mortal, half angel (Angel Reaper)
By being a Reaper, Tien has one foot in the afterlife, and one in the mortal world. She knows too much about what happens when one passes on, therefore cannot continue the life of your average mortal, but she is still too connected to her body to fully immigrate into the heavens as an angel.

Powers/Abilities:
Tien doesn't have any true abilities herself; most of the things she can do are channeled through other items, such as her scythe/cloak. The only ability she posses on her own is the ability to communicate telepathically with angels and souls that are dying.

Place of Residence:
She lives in a land known as Avira Ula. This world is quite similar to our own, in a sense of the climates and geographical features, even some of the cultures are similar. The major defining differences are that there are no humans, and electronic devices don't exist yet. She herself does not reside in any one town; she usually travels to the places her targets are.

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{A p p e a r a n c e. }

Feral
Lilitu has always been a tall and slender wolf, her frame skinny and narrow, carried on long, lanky legs.
In terms of height, she is 30 inches tall at the shoulder. Her fur varies in length, depending on the
location; the fur on her undersides, muzzle, ears, and legs is of average length, and the fur on her
cheeks, tail, and down her back are long. Her features are sharp and angled, giving her triangle
shaped ears with pointed tips, a slightly pointed muzzle, and diamond shaped eyes, often appearing
narrowed, even when not. This type of body build has always given her great speed and agility,
without having her abilities enhanced by the angels. She is not incredibly strong, for she is rather
light weight and has never had a reason to build up her muscle as a mortal. As such, she can not
overpower others very easily without wearing them down first, and she herself could be taken out
quick, if their attacks are strong enough. She is primarily a creature that relies on the guise of the
shadows for sneak attacks, and dances around oncoming attacks to avoid getting hurt, then focuses
all her strength and energy into precise hits. Her fur is primarily grey with a white "cape" starting at
the back her head and going down her neck, along her spine, then ending at her tail tip. Her other
white markings include two white stripes,- one which bands around her chest, and the other which
stops in a point half way down her sides - a series of dotted lines going down her front legs with an
X on her shoulders, a white arc marking underneath her eyes, a similar marking above her eyes,
and her ears, which are entirely white. Her underbelly and lower chest are covered in dark grey
fur, her nose, paw pads, and lips are red, and her eyes are a very pale silver that glow white when
she's using any angel-given powers.

Anthro
Most details about her physical capabilities and palette have already been explained, so not much
else needs to be said. She stands at 5'6" as an anthro, and unlike most, due to the already long fur
on her head and neck, she does not have a mane or hairstyle. Her figure is hardly curvy, though
she isn't exactly flat chested either, and the only noticeable areas of muscle would be her legs and
upper biceps. These muscles have developed from her time working as a reaper, running and jumping
here and there to avoid attacks and swinging her scythe. Her style of clothing is considered a bit
traditional, compared to the modern society, but since most mortals can't really see her anyway,
she figures it doesn't matter. She wears dark green, short style cheongsam with a black collar/
embroidery, black pants, black padding around her torso, arms, and legs, and black combat boots.
In both feral and anthro form, she has a dark green Reaper's cloak, which, when worn, allows her
to blend into the shadow easier and make herself less known to nearby demons/demon reapers.
She also wears a skull mask in the form of the upper part of a wolf's skull, to conceal her identity
from dying souls, and has the ability to make her scythe materialize at any time. Bandages have
been wrapped around the middle of her tail to make the fur stay down; fur is less likely to be
pulled out this way, reducing the chances of distraction in battle.

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{A f t e r l i f e. }

(( Disclaimer: The following is just a fictional take on the afterlife, meant for storytelling
purposes. It is not meant to offend anyone's beliefs or religion. ))

Ever since the passing of the first Aviran, there has been an afterlife. A whole new world, opened
up to us after our souls depart from our bodies and pass on, invisible to the mortal eye. As the
myths would tell you, in the afterlife, there are two distinct realms and two distinct types of souls.
That of the Heavens with Angels, and that of the Underworld with Demons. Though there are
various "other realms" and other states of being for a passed soul, these two are, for the sake
storytelling, the only two of importance for now. Before we get into those, it is important to
note just how a soul passes on into the afterlife. You see, when a soul is in danger of being torn
from it's body, be it by natural causes or other Avirans, it can sense this coming before hand and
sends out a signal that ripples through the afterlife realms. This signal can be sent out anywhere from
24 hours to a week before the soul is destined to be torn, and as you can imagine, the Aviran itself
won't know it's going to die soon. These signals are in no way set in stone; there are rare occasions
where the individual narrowly avoids their fated death, which we call miracles, but even if they
manage to survive it, they will still meet their fate. It'll just be postponed in that case. When this
signal is sent out to both realms, demons and angels alike will set their sights on the soul, which are
often referred to as "dying souls". Their goal is to claim it for their side, but Angels and Demons
themselves are not powerful enough to physically interfere with the mortal world. They must wait
until the soul has fully detached itself from it's body and entered the world of the afterlife. For this,
we have Reapers; beings that still have mortal bodies, but have partially entered the afterlife.
They basically do the dirty work of the Angels and Demons; whichever side claimed them. Now then,
let's go into detail.

First and foremost, we have the Angels. The weary souls that suffered through a life of various struggles,
were claimed by Heaven, and passed on into a peaceful life. These beings are benevolent ones, striving
for order and peace for everyone. They do not wish harm upon any mortal, but instead want to grant
them a stress free life once they die, not matter what crimes they may have committed. To become
an Angel, you must become fully at peace with everything that's happened in your life, let it go,
and move on to the next. When Angels seek to claim a soul, they use their Reapers to protect it
from demonic corruption, then carefully guide the parted soul to heaven, granting it wings and a
new name for a new life. The only thing that can destroy an Angel* is the unholy metal of a Demon
Reaper's scythe.

Next, of course, are the Demons. The exact opposite of Angels, these pour creatures were dying mortals
that were put under a lot of strain and corrupted by other Demons, whispering things in their ears
and driving them to insanity. They pass on (often ripped from their body by a Demon Reaper versus
waiting for their fated death) and are taken to the Underworld, where their darker thoughts are
amplified and turned into sadistic goals. Any wish they had for vengeance or to simply to harm
unto another becomes the entirety of their being, turning them into wrathful creatures with the
soul goal of destroying/corrupting every mortal. As aforementioned, because Demons can't physically
touch souls in the mortal world, they usually work their ways by "haunting" the dying soul and placing
fear in it's heart to make it weak. The only thing that can destroy a Demon is the holy metal of an
Angel Reaper's scythe.

Lastly, we have Reapers, which would be the faction Tien belongs to. Reapers are mortals that have
gone through some type of accident which brought them extremely close to the afterlife, to the point
of being claimed by either an Angel or Demon and learning of how the next life works, but the
connection to their mortal bodies was just strong enough to pull them back and bring them to life
again. Having already seen too much of the afterlife realms and already establishing a link
with their soul, they take on the qualities of an immortal being, such as being immune to
mortal limitations (hunger, sleep, injuries, sickness, etc.) and gaining the ability to see/touch beings
of the afterlife. They cannot die by any cause other than the blow of another Reaper's weapon or
old age. Eating and sleeping are not necessary, but can weaken their body, so they do it occasionally
to stay on top. They are more noticeable without their cloak, but with their cloak on, they blend
into the afterlife realms and become almost invisible. Only those with dying souls will see a Reaper
clearly. The job of a Reaper is to seek out a dying soul being targeted by their side and protect
it from anyone else trying to claim it. For Tien, this would include finding a dying soul, hanging
around it to watch over it, and destroy any Demons/Demon Reaper's trying to get to it.

*Destroying an Angel's or Devil's soul means to banish it into a third, inaccessible realm known as
"The Gray", where that soul will wander endlessly alone forever.

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{ H i s t o r y. }

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Childhood
Birth City: Aadi (awe-dee)
Duration of Stay: Thirteen years

Living Family: Laika (Mother), Akan (father),
Drystan (brother), Marius (brother)

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Different cities and regions in Avira Ula have different traditions when it comes to how they live their life. Some prefer an entirely anthro life, living in buildings and working jobs of the anthros. Others might prefer entirely feral lives, where they clump together in packs, establish an untamed territory, and live like four-legged wolves. Then there are a few that have a mixture of both; semi-city and semi-rural set ups where the shifters are free to choose whichever form they prefer at any time. That was the kind of city Aadi was- a moderately sized area with lots of rural land surrounding it and a few little towns here and there.

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{P e r s o n a l i t y. }
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darrandor
Note: whether I win or not, if anyone has looked over this form, please do not use this idea. This world, this concept, and the character itself (not the design, but the personality, history, etc.) belong to me.