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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜

Postby dove. » Sun Oct 30, 2016 3:30 pm

─Yᴜʏᴀ (X4)- wrote:@dove,
good luck

I have the oddest desire to write a Rocky Horror/Black Butler crossover. I kind of have a summary...thing.


Thanks! Also you should write a crossover, it sounds like a amazing idea!


Also here's the first chapter. There is most likely going to be like 5-6 chapters maybe? So it's kind of a long horror story or it's a short horror book. It's not officially edited, anyways it's kind of cliche but tell me what you think!



We we’re all walking down the street, Pearce, Carrie, Freddy, Regan, Sabrina, and I.
“Looks like were here”. Pearce said as we stopped. I looked up to see a huge mansion. It was definitely haunted in some way or another.
“I can’t believe we are actually doing this”. Carrie said. It was about completely dark out, and I pulled my flashlight out to make sure nobody was stalking us or something.
“It’s not really haunted is it?” Sabrina said flipping her pitch black hair that blended in with the darkness.
“Maybe it is... Maybe it isn’t. We’ll find out”. Pearce said, leading us up to the front door of the mansion. Once we got to the top of a small hill with the mansion residing at the top. I realized it was a lot scarier then it looked from the bottom of the hill. There was multiply dead trees with no leaves on them hanging on the side of the house closing in on it.
“We should go over a few rules?” Regan said. Regan was into the whole scary movie theme recently so he’s most likely going to tell us the basic concepts what not to do and what to do. Just like in the cliche horror movies.
“ Number one, whatever you do... Don’t split up.
Number two, don’t be that one couple that runs off and starts kissing.
Number three, If our giant group does split up try and stay in pairs so the death count won’t be as high. Since you’ll have each others backs.
Number four, don’t be loud. You might awaken the dark spirit or whatever lives in there
Number five last but not least, don’t die”. Wow that was such a soothing list and death count? Jeez dude, you’re acting like this is the hunger games or something.
“Shall we go inside now?” Regan said, and Freddy put his hand on the door of the haunted house.
“Frik, it’s locked”. Freddy said trying to shake the door handle to unlock it.
“That means we don’t have to go inside right?” Sabrina said, trying to reassure herself that she wouldn’t have to go inside the house.
“No worries, I was prepared for this!” Pearce said grabbing a paperclip from his pocket and unlocking the front door. He held the door opening, it was like he was almost anticipating this for his whole life.
“Step this way”. He said, and we all turned our flashlights on entering the dark mansion.
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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜

Postby birbmememaster24 » Sun Oct 30, 2016 3:56 pm

I wanna say something. I'm not super happy, and haven't been. So I wanted to come say this.


You're beautiful. You're amazing. You don't deserve to be hurt, but, hey, that's life.
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    I hope someday my sadness will be replaced by something beautiful
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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜

Postby Ranger of the North » Sun Oct 30, 2016 4:26 pm

CJClaire wrote:hey would anyone mind giving me some feedback? i rewrote this scene from the first time I wrote it and i'd like some input and criticism owo

"Close your eyes," Zeph instructed, and Ben did so, shutting his eyes to the world around him and breathing in deeply. He exhaled and tried to push his own energy out again, and as he breathed in once more, tried to drag the ends of what he felt must be his uncle’s energy back towards him. Zeph took a deep breath as well, beginning to speak softly in a language that Ben had never heard before; the language of magic and fae. Zeph’s magic focused on the circle, and the circle focused it towards the cup. Ben’s magic focused on Zeph’s. There must have been something though, something that changed, or interacted, or collided, because suddenly Ben’s senses were once again, completely overwhelmed.

The blackness behind his shut eyes lit up, and Ben could see faceless figures laughing and cooking and smiling together, he could hear laughter and silverware clinking gently against plates. He could spell herbs and dust and honey; bread baking in the oven. The energy this time though, didn’t feel intrusive. This time, it only felt strong and different, but pleasant. It felt like his uncle. Ben took in another breath, and this time, felt another presence. There were no overwhelming sensations, but there was a soft buzzing, like the hum of something that wasn’t yet running. And even though Ben had never felt this energy before, not like he had felt Zeph’s, he immediately knew that it was his own. It was dormant, and not taking over the room, but it was there. It was his.

After what felt simultaneously like hours and seconds, the power faded, and Ben felt the energy leave his limbs, leave the room, and the levels returned to normal. Zeph took a step back. Ben opened his eyes.


ah okay so yeah this has no context but it's this part that's really throwing me off so i'd really like some tips or anythign

thanks <3

Oh woah, that's actually super interesting~!
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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜

Postby dove. » Sun Oct 30, 2016 5:14 pm

Am I the only one who has trouble sticking to a story? Currently, I'm writing three stories, and I just finished the first chapter of one of them. Anyways, here it is. Can someone give me a little bit of feedback if they can? I would love it <3 Also, if this is confusing the stories i'm currently writing is my scary story which is Murder at Midnight, and Starry Sky. And then this one is called Playing Cupid. Ok Anyways! Here it is, sorry if I took up anyone's time. Have a lovely day or next day or the day after.



“Everyone! This is Raven Spark”. I heard the new name go in a flash. I quickly grabbed the piece of paper out my desk and smashed it onto the table. It was a list of all the names in the school (almost everyone).
“Let’s see... Raven Spark”. I muttered to myself and I added it to the bottom of my list, scrolling through all the names on the paper looking at all the lines I have drawn to each other.
“May I sit here?” I almost jumped out of my seat, it was Raven. She had brown hair barely going past her shoulders. I started thinking of a good match for her, but I completely forgot to answer her after I saw her standing there just staring at her for a few seconds.
“Oh! I’m so sorry. Of course you can sit here”. She looked at me wondering why I was apologizing to her.
“I’m Robin”. I said sticking my hand out for her to shake. Hopefully, she didn’t think I was weird. Since I am quiet socially awkward but it’s not that I try and be I just forget sometimes.
“Nice to meet you Robin. I’m Raven”. She said shaking my hand. She seems friendly, so it won’t be difficult to find her a match who will like her, I just need to find out a little bit more about her.
“May I ask you Robin... What’s on that piece of paper of your’s?” Raven asked me with curiosity pointing at my list which I was studying. She seems to be a bit curious, I took that to note inside my large database of personalities and traits.
“Oh... Umm... It’s nothing. I just write a list of everyone’s name on here so I don’t forget it”. That’s my usual excuse for my list, since my cupid work does better when it’s more of a secret. Which surprisingly, I haven’t been found out. Something I might add is I’m not a actual cupid, but since I don’t seem to fit in as much. I spend most of my time playing cupid, such as helping people find there soul mates, or helping people admit there feelings towards each other, or one of my favorites... Breaking people up who don’t belong together. Now that seems kind of opposite of me, but it’s easier then helping people get together, but I usually don’t do it as often.
“Robin!” Suddenly, my head bounced out of my alternate world.
“Huh? What is it?” I asked trying to sound as if I wanted the question repeated but I was still paying attention, which I can’t really pull off but I try to. “Ms. Smith. How many times do I have to tell you to stop day-dreaming in class”. I gulped as I listened to Mrs. Glass talk about how I’m the perfect example of a “bad” student.
“Sorry...” I said and I slouched back in my chair as Mrs. Glass brushed my “sorry” off and continued the lesson. Sometimes, I wish I could just pay-attention once in class, but that’s not how my life works.
Finally, the class bell rang. I thought I was never going to her the end of Mrs. Glass’s annoying voice fitting my attention span into her lesson. I got up out of my seat grabbing my list and heading out the door. Time for the nightmare of the world... The halls...
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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜

Postby Silver Pandorica » Sun Oct 30, 2016 5:45 pm

Okay, I need to get to sleep but wanted to post this here really quick. It's super late but I was inspired by De's prompt. Thanks a lot for that as I'm trying to sleep XD

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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜

Postby dove. » Sun Oct 30, 2016 5:50 pm

SilverCrescentMoon wrote:Okay, I need to get to sleep but wanted to post this here really quick. It's super late but I was inspired by De's prompt. Thanks a lot for that as I'm trying to sleep XD

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Awesome job! It was lovely <3
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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜

Postby DeMaizu » Sun Oct 30, 2016 5:50 pm

*reads Silver's story* O.o I've inspired greatness! And all from one dream (that strangely made sense, even after I woke up . . .).
Also, I may write something like that myself sometime in the future.
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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜

Postby NopesaurusRexx » Wed Nov 02, 2016 11:14 am

I have written 0 words for NaNo today, mostly because that requires getting off of the couch to get my outline and I just don't want to go get it. So I've done nothing XD
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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜

Postby BucketORandomness » Wed Nov 02, 2016 11:35 am

One sec! You just wrote...*counting*...33 words! Hooray! *Ignoramus cheering for something they know nothing about*
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Re: ❛ the lazy writers ❜

Postby Silver Pandorica » Wed Nov 02, 2016 11:44 am

XD I've written 874 words so far. 793 more to go to reach the daily word count!
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