The Critique Cafe- Need Active Critics!

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Re: The Critique Cafe

Postby neonfrozen » Mon Sep 03, 2012 3:01 am

I would like some critique on my form please!
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I'd like the critique to be done by 5th, but the codedrop is on the 7th.

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Re: The Critique Cafe

Postby Ray. » Tue Sep 04, 2012 8:26 am

I would like some critique on my story please!
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~RayRay~
Link to what needs critiquing:
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Re: The Critique Cafe

Postby Papyrsatyr » Tue Sep 04, 2012 10:48 am

This is a critique for KoowieTheDog!
Who the critique is for: Koowiethedog
What you had to say about it: Honestly it's a nice form and I don't have all too much to add to it. If you're going for it without competition you should be fine for the most part, however if you are facing compeititon and need some advice on what to add. A little bit explaining a bit more of their personality and why they act as such might help strengthen your form. So going into his past, maybe a small bit on it even if it's a "normal" life.

may edit this later because oh my god headache.
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Re: The Critique Cafe

Postby neonfrozen » Wed Sep 05, 2012 10:22 am

Applefiend wrote: This is a critique for KoowieTheDog!
Who the critique is for: Koowiethedog
What you had to say about it: Honestly it's a nice form and I don't have all too much to add to it. If you're going for it without competition you should be fine for the most part, however if you are facing compeititon and need some advice on what to add. A little bit explaining a bit more of their personality and why they act as such might help strengthen your form. So going into his past, maybe a small bit on it even if it's a "normal" life.

may edit this later because oh my god headache.

Okay, thank you! I just needed some critique becaue I have writers block and I dont know if that is making my stories turn out bad xD

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Re: The Critique Cafe

Postby Papyrsatyr » Fri Sep 07, 2012 11:46 am

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Re: The Critique Cafe

Postby Lizbutt » Sat Sep 08, 2012 4:02 pm

Carry wrote:I would like some critique on my poem please!
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Link to what needs critiquing:Here
What is it: The poem on the image
Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? PM please.

bumping this, it was never given a critique.
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Re: The Critique Cafe

Postby Ray. » Sun Sep 09, 2012 2:30 am

~RayRay~ wrote:I would like some critique on my story please!
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Link to what needs critiquing:
http://www.chickensmoothie.com/Forum/viewtopic.php?f=53&t=1383996#p41209310
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Re: The Critique Cafe

Postby Papyrsatyr » Sun Sep 09, 2012 4:05 am

Nothing stops you from doing a peer to peer critique of your own stories together. The motto of this place is practically "you scratch my back I scratch yours."

Also drawings should be taken to the artist army for critique. This is mainly for writing.
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Re: The Critique Cafe

Postby maliy » Fri Sep 14, 2012 6:12 am

I would like some critique on my form please!

Username: Maliy

Link to your form: viewtopic.php?f=53&t=1391983&p=41503737&hilit=22#p41503737

Adoption Agency you are applying for: Jelly bean dragons.

Deadline for your form: (Please give us a date as well as the actual day it's due) Sep 16.

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I want pretty harsh critiques please!
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Re: The Critique Cafe

Postby Tatzel » Fri Sep 14, 2012 8:27 am

I would like some critique on my story please!
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See it? Look up...a little to the right...there it is! Wow!
Link to what needs critiquing:
viewtopic.php?f=57&t=1398401&p=41742029#p41742029
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I guess you could call it a diary. It kind of is...?
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