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[Night Ember]

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[Night Ember]

I was training Sorrow when he had finally started to catch on to things. It was becoming harder to defeat him, and with the tasks I give him everyday to improve his strength, he looked more and more like Stone everyday. We had chatted over duels as well. Apparently, he didn't know who killed his father, but when his mother went into a terrible sickness, he begged the Ancestors to save her, but they didn't. So he turned his back on them. That's where Rage came in and took his soul.
One morning, a few people on horseback rode up to the campsite. They proclaimed "Envy is back, all those who don't bow before her might shall parish. The Council will be in ruins tonight!" and they threw torches at some of the tents, lighting them afire. I shot an arrow at one of them and he fell off of his horse, dead. I chased after them on James, my horse. I decapitated the last of them, and took in the meat and the bodies. They bore the symbol of a white wolf over a black moon. I knew what it symbolized. Rage had corrupted the world, and turned it black, so Envy is the white wolf who will save us. I am forced to fight with Rage, since I bear his mark.The Chieftain all told us to go into our tents, and sleep, leaving the camp unguarded besides the 5 apprentices to watch.
I awoke in front of the Council, but there was no wolves. I heard fighting in the background and I rushed toward it, Ripjaw at my side. A white wolf and Rage were in head-on combat. Rage threw her off and snarled before leaping back into the fray. Warriors, people in white armor rushed at me, and I thought I was alone. Then I saw Burn, and the other warriors who had been instructed to sleep. I slashed at one warrior, as one of our own impaled him. A spear went flying into a white-clothed fighter, and an arrow in another. I was constantly in battle, and I was lucky to only get a few surface wounds. I saw my friends die off, one by one, until the other side's ranks were gone. Rage snarled at the white wolf "We won, Envy. And we will win again and again until you are all dead!" She replied with a torn ear and an evil tone in her voice "You have not seen the last of us, Rage. We will kill your precious Council and all the wolves within it. This world will be freed of you, and I will be the one to decide their fates." then she darted off.
I re-awoke, scars still on me. I saw dead bodies beside me, many of them being close friends. Sorrow and the other apprentices were still guarding the camp, alert and ready for fighting. I asked about the list of the dead and I got the dreadful number of 8. Only about 20-30 of us were still alive. Their names were Crashing Waters, Leaping Frog, Ragged Ear, Pointy Thistle, Large Bear, Spotted Lizard, Burning Flame, and Midnight Hunter. I buried Burning Flame under the large oak tree that night as we sang the song to send off the dead to Rage. I was one of the ones to carry a lit candle around the sight in black robes and with a sorrowful face. I was going to kill Envy, and all of her warriors will die under my blade with no mercy. They didn't just kill my friend, they killed apart of me as well.

[Night Ember]

I fought with more vigor now, more fire in my eyes. Sorrow had long since gotten out of apprenticeship, and tonight I will succeed on to be an apprentice of Rage. Sorrow will continue training other fighters until he gets an apprentice, and I will join the deadly fighting. Only a select few joined the Undead Army, the army the Council has filled with elite warriors who are and were trained by the Council members themselves. Now I am joining them. As I lied my head back on my mat tonight, I thought one thought before I drifted off into the realm of Rage: Burning Flame's death.
I awoke in a clearing, when I saw the Council before me, I saw Bone beside a person. I saw Night beside a werewolf-human. I saw Venomfang beside a reptilian-human. I saw Scarface beside a person. I had no idea what their names were and I wondered why I didn't know them. Snowball had no apprentice beside her, nor did Rage. Rage said Come here, my apprentice. Let me introduce these hard working creatures to you. Bone's apprentice is named Gray Stone. Night's apprentice is named Deadly Nectar. Scarface's apprentice is named Scarred Beast, how ironic. Venomfang's apprentice is named Ashen Sky. Snowball's apprentice passed on to the Shadow Realm after we exiled them. And you are my apprentice now. Come here, and join us. The Undead Army is waiting. I stepped forward, and Rage said Fearless Cheetah, I give you armor and weaponry no human or humanoid has lain their eyes on. I enhance your abilities and I give you a sword which will now be known as Fearless Cheetah. Your name of your sword is also your name. It shows bondage between the sword and the sword user My sword disappeared to be replaced by a light orange blade the length of my arm, with a hilt big enough for my hand and it glimmered as I turned it, with a citrine gem in it's hilt. I said it's name in Greek, "Atromitos Acinonyx" and all of a sudden, the sword turned into a cheetah with fiery orange eyes and at the end of it's tail was a citrine embedded in it. It told me Hello. My name is Fear, just as yours is. I am swift and really good in battle. Do not lose your mark, for that is my summons. I was confused. Mark? I looked at my ankle, which started burning and I saw the black outline of a cheetah. You can lose the sword, when you lose the sword, just touch the mark with the one on your wrist and say my name in Greek, and the sword will appear in your sheath. I understood.
I walked up to Rage's side, and I saw that Fear had turned into a sword again into my hilt. Rage nodded to the other Council members and we all dashed into the forest. We came to a riverside, but the river was full of blood. rage said River fighting. Everyone, step into the river! I felt the blood seep into my armored shoes and it sucked on them like quicksand, only not as strong
Do not fall in the blood, it has deadly bacteria, leeches, and carnivorous fish in it. Fight until the other has fallen into the river and they can't get up. We fight Envy tomorrow here so we need to be ready! Ashen Sky, your paired up with Fearless Cheetah. Scarred Beast, you're paired up with Gray Stone, and Deadly Nectar, you're fighting Night since we have no other apprentice good enough to be here. We took our places and Ashen Sky drew out her sword. She had ash-gray hair, blue eyes, and soft freckles. Her sword had the letters Ashen Sky on them, but it didn't show what animal. Her blade was a deep silver color that looked like lead. It was two handed and looked like it bludgeoned more than it sliced.
She swung it at me, and I ducked. I stabbed her in the gut with Fearless Cheetah, but it parried off her armor. I tried to trip her in the river, but it didn't work, and she only half-fell. She took the opportunity to bludgeon me on the head with Ash. I felt a large lump appear on the back of my head, and darkness appeared at the edges of my vision. I took my sword and I found a soft spot in her armor and stabbed down far and hard, until she dropped her sword. I kicked it away, and used the hilt to try and bludgeon her down into the river. She touched her mark on her ankle, which I saw was an owl, and her sword came back. She beat the side of my face with it and I jabbed at hers. It was a constant duel, at the same time the other pairs were fighting, which I had realized that the Undead Army came and they were paired up and training as well. I used my hilt and hit her right above the gut, but below the chest. I heard a groan come out of her, but before I heard anything else, she swung her sword and bludgeoned me on the head again. I tried to dodge it, but it was too quick. I fell to the ground, and darkness finally came into view and I was passed out in the deadly waters.

[The Last flower]

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[Night Ember]

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[Night Ember]

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[Night Ember]

I awoke in my tent, and I realized that my wounds had bandages on them. An apprentice, who went by the name of Swooping Crane, came in with a bowl of water. He saw me and dropped the bowl, which shattered into ceramic pieces. "You're alive! We all thought you died last night. You've been asleep for three days!" Then he ran out of the tent. I saw my armor and my weapons lying on a portable table on the far side of the tent. I armed myself and slipped on the armor. The chieftain walked into the tent, followed by Rage himself, in human form. I was astonished. "Rage? I thought you were dead." He answered with a deep voice that contained power "We lost, Fear. Don't you get it? I was casted out of the spirit world to die here. I'll explain more later. If you were alive, why didn't you fight!? We needed you on the front line!" I told him "I didn't even know that I was alive. I just woke up here less than an hour ago. It wasn't my fault. Talk to Ashen Sky if you want answers, she can tell you precisely were she hit me!" He answered icily and calmly "Was it your body?" I told him "Yes." "Then it was your fault." and he walked off. I walked outside and noticed the silver-clad warriors that I recognized from the blood river. I asked Dark Promises "Is the whole Undead Army here?" He nodded. That meant that the other Council was here. I could tell the differences right away. The Dragon Hunters looked soft compared to the Army members. I went through a crowd to find a Dragon Hunter apprentice on his knees with his hands tied up behind his back. Scarred Beast pulled his head back by the apprentice's hair, and Gray Stone kicked the apprentice's face with the bottom of his boot. "How do you like that?" said Gray Stone. The apprentice's face was dirty and bleeding. This was not the first time he'd been kicked. I thought should I help him? Should I walk away? I ran up to Gray Stone and said "Stop! He has had enough." Everyone went silent and they gave me shocked looks. Gray Stone glared down upon me and he said "Are apart of us" and he swept his arm around the crowd "Or them?" and he pointed at the apprentice, who had the most fearful of looks on his face. I stepped back into the crowd, and he grinned "Good, I'm glad we got things sorted out." I walked up to Scarred Beast and used an Uppercut punch, and cut the bonds holding the apprentice. I dashed for my life as Gray Stone and Scarred Beast chased me through the encampment. I said the words "Atromitos Acinonyx" and the sword turned into Fear. Fear snarled at Gray Stone and Scarred Beast, but instead of cowering, Scarred Beast said "Nomadicus Onega" and a hyena came from his sheathe. Gray Stone said "Viridian Harangues" and a deep gray Tiger came out. Fear was overwhelmed. We dashed off into the forests, far enough to where the others wouldn't chase us. I didn't realize how far we had gone until I heard a Hunter's ambush patrol and a dog. Fear snarled and leapt into the fray of Hunters. Fear and I killed the Hunters, and I had forgotten what blood tasted like from a human. I drank them dry. I saw the entrance to the Vampyre coven as well. I sheathed Fear into a sword form and stalked up to it. The entrance was partly open, and it seemed vacant. I walked inside the familiar corridors, and I heard scuffling. I withdrew my sword, which emanated a light glow in the darkness. I saw red eyes behind a corner and I lit a candle from one of the walls. I shouted "Get back here! I have a few questions for you!" The figure turned around and said "Ember? Is that you?" I heard a muffled whisper "Get back, Anise. It's an illusion." Anise. That was my sister's name. I cheered in my head softly, she's alive! and then I realized that the voice that had said that wasn't my father's, it was my brother's voice; his name was Eric, and he was the eldest. I walked up to where the voice was and I was astonished. Only a few Vampyres were alive. I sheathed my sword and I said "Where's father, Eric?" The Vampyres all looked at a body lying on an altar, holding a sword pointing across his body. "Is he...dead?" I asked. They all nodded. I walked up to my father, and I said "Kcylunum Monice Entenium" or ""Spirits accept him" Eric said "Who are you, you seem to be a Vampyre, but you came from the outside." I answered "You know me as Ember." Everybody gasped. "We thought you were dead! Ozark told us he had killed you himself." I shook my head. "I am not dead." "Why are you here, Ember?" my brother asked. I told them "Come with me if you want to live. Or you can stay and die in this hole." Everyone looked at Eric and he said "We're staying! It's what Ozark would've wanted." I glared at him and said "I didn't want to have to do this, but it seems I have no choice." I pulled out Fear and said "Atromitos Acinonyx" and he turned into a cheetah again. He growled and Eric said "What are you, Ember?" I told him "That's not my name anymore. My name is Fearless Cheetah, and you all are coming with me or I will kill you. Step over here if you want to live. Remember, you exiled me. I will not hesitate to kill you." Most of the remaining Vampyres stepped on my side, except for Eric and his followers. "Eric." I said "Come and live. Be a predator once more, or die by my hands." He said "I won't follow a murderer to victory. You still killed Stone, don't forget that. I will never forgive you." I answered him "Let that go. Would you rather die over a lost cause?" He said "A lost cause? You killed him in cold blood, Ember." I growled "That's not my name anymore, Eric. I feel that the only way I can put sense in your head is this. Eric, I challenge you for leadership of the Coven." The small crowd gasped. I said "We use claws, teeth, and no armor except for the clothes we have on. In here, right now, traditional." He nodded and we removed our armor and weapons. I signaled to Fear to stay put. He said "We begin" and I said "Now!"
He leapt at m, his claws extended to the fullest, and I just ducked and raked my claws on his stomach. He hissed and I jumped at him precisely, aiming my teeth for his throat. I succeeded and his inky blood tasted starved and useless. He was abnormally light as well. I threw him aside, and jumped over him. He barely made any response back. I raked my claws over his eyes, and blinded him. He feebly moved his arm in an attempt to defend. I caught his arm and snapped his bone, causing him to shriek. I said "I cannot and I will not kill you, Eric. Surrender now or I will sic Fear on you." Fear snarled and licked his jaws. "I will never surrender to you, outcast. I would die first." I told him "Have it your way then, brother." I walked away and signaled to Fear. All you could hear was growling and shrieking, until it went silent and Fear walked back up to me, blood on his jaws and feet. I rubbed Fear's head and said "Good boy, Fear." And I turned to the population, who bowed to me and said "Fearless Cheetah, we accept you as our leader." I said "Come." and walked to the entrance, the whole coven consisting of about 30-40 now following me.

[Night Ember]

When I got to the entrance of the Dragon Hunter's camp, I saw Rage look at me with a snarl on his face. He looked at me and said "Why have you brought these... Traitors to our encampment!?" I was about to reply when one of the Vampyres, who went by Torn, said "Rage? Is it really you? Ozark said that you were dead, but I never thought you lived." Rage answered "I was dead, Torn. Ozark burned me alive until the Council took me in and fulfilled their promises of my leadership. Now Envy rules and now we are all going to die in the Shadow Realm." Torn looked shocked, like she was staring at a wall of flames. I told Rage "I will not let my race die out, Rage. I don't want to be the only one left. Let most of them live, at least until I find a suitable mate." Rage snorted with disbelief. "Why should I let your people live?" I answered coldly "Because I am their leader now. Eric died at my claws and Ozark's body wasn't burned. These are not just my race, they are my people. My citizens now, Rage. If you want to kill them, you will have to go through me." This was as good as a challenge to him. Rage snarled and he backslapped me so hard, I fell to the ground. He said "Don't talk to me like that, little apprentice" he said with a snarl. I was not astonished, I just lied there in the dirt thinking how I should've avoided it with ease. I got up and shook off all of the dust off of me and saw a Vampyre staring at me with wide eyes.
I said "What are you staring at!?" He looked away shyly and he scurried off into the moonlight. He was about 19, at least he looked it. I went up to him and asked "How old are you and who are your parents?" He answered back "I am Eli, my parents are a different coven from your parents, but they all died off. I am about 329 years old and I joined your Coven last spring." I was astonished. I was only 3 years behind him. I told Eli "Where are you going when you die?" and he said "I didn't believe in your little ancestors, and my religion beforehand was the leader of our Coven, who died, so I had no choice but Rage." I smiled. He was perfect to be my mate. I said "My name is Fearless Cheetah, and I think I want to get to know you better, Eli. But first you need a name."
Three nights later, Eli got the name of Swift Fox. Along with many of the other Coven members, he became apart of the Dragon Hunters. The remaining few I let Rage slaughter. I always talked to Swift, after Dragon Hunts, and before them, and I took a liking to him. Too bad he was always talking about Torn, the one who thought Rage was dead and who got the name of Torn Cliff. He always fantasized about her, and I had to admit, I was a little envious of Torn. I was dead set on Swift being my mate, I was sure of it. Then a thought occurred to me, but it wasn't Rage's deep voice that wanted me to carry out this deed, it was my own. Kill Torn