You should keep going with this plot and make it bigger. Just a suggestion. And if you do and need help, I'm always willing to help with a story.
The Final Dance (please read)
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Re: The Final Dance (please read)
by WhoLocked » Sun Feb 13, 2011 4:43 pm
What is life but another story for the ages?
Names no longer matter when those we cared for no longer care for us.
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Spread the FAIL whale.
Names no longer matter when those we cared for no longer care for us.
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Re: The Final Dance (please read)
by Charlie13 » Mon Mar 14, 2011 11:58 pm
This is amazing! You've got a really good plot, you should try and expand it. If you need any help...I'm in PM-calling range!
Charlie xox
Charlie xox
The Pirate Ship
As I sleep alone upon the sea shore,
I dream of a pirate ship taking me forth.
They thought me a vagabond, a robber, a thief,
And so I was made Commander-in-Chief.
I was no longer dreaming, this life became real.
I’d become a true legend with a cutlass of steel.
My treacherous mission was one to admire.
The buccaneer, Blackbeard I was to acquire.
The Americans, his captors would not set him loose.
My plan was to save him from the hangman’s noose.
As Blackbeard, the pirate hung from the rope,
I sent my blade flying, to slash it with hope.
I had finally accomplished my dangerous goal,
The captain awarded me with a flag on a pole.
And then I awoke once again on the shore.
With the flag lying next to me, was I a pirate? An outlaw?
As I sleep alone upon the sea shore,
I dream of a pirate ship taking me forth.
They thought me a vagabond, a robber, a thief,
And so I was made Commander-in-Chief.
I was no longer dreaming, this life became real.
I’d become a true legend with a cutlass of steel.
My treacherous mission was one to admire.
The buccaneer, Blackbeard I was to acquire.
The Americans, his captors would not set him loose.
My plan was to save him from the hangman’s noose.
As Blackbeard, the pirate hung from the rope,
I sent my blade flying, to slash it with hope.
I had finally accomplished my dangerous goal,
The captain awarded me with a flag on a pole.
And then I awoke once again on the shore.
With the flag lying next to me, was I a pirate? An outlaw?
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Re: The Final Dance (please read)
by ZombiePoodle » Tue Mar 15, 2011 5:24 am
Ooh, this is very cool ^^
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Re: The Final Dance (please read)
by peppersdots » Tue Mar 15, 2011 6:04 am
Thanks for all the comments and suggestions! I might post some updates and make it a bit longer if I get the time. Thanks again everyone! ♪♫
trade thread ║ character thread ║ 1x1 search
not on as much as i once was due to a new sc
hedule but i am still around for trading and rp
ing. i am always trying to beat down my wl, e
specially the very few items i'm missing, and a
lways down for a little 1x1 rp so feel free to p
m me about either.
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