Re: Sabal Dancer Elkrin Doe

Postby Tyasi » Mon Mar 04, 2013 12:07 pm

I decided to give it a shot, I can't let Illuma miss her match. <3 I couldn't get the story I have for her out of my head. Hopefully I can get the art I dreamed up done. ;-; My mouse broke and touchpads are a pain and take forever. orz| At least I was able to have completed the rider spinning in Indrani's ring piece.

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Indrani
The name's meaning is "Possesses a Drop of Rain" in Hindu. This is a feminine name based off of the Hindu god Indra who is depending on Hindu viewpoint is the leader/ruler of the gods. He controls the rains and lightning as well as weather, signifying grand power. Within this doe lies the power of summoning rain, not at will, but with the ability to communicate with the sky and beckon its tears of joy after witnessing one of her heartfelt dances. Like the saying goes, "He who controls the water has the ability to govern others." Revered as a rain goddess to many of the arid people, made this name to be beyond fitting.

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Yes, but RP required. A long one to build up a relationship.

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Short Story:

This story after lots of revision is 1,999 words. ^^

Shali wrote:Pitching up a sign embroidered with golden lettering printing, “Shali’s Stupendous Show”. Marveling at his own artisan talents the man in his milk shaded turban and lanky size hidden beneath fairly exquisite clothes that wouldn’t be seen usually on such an unkempt man.

Clearing his throat he let his thick clear voice take a spot in the air. “Welcome and Welcome those of all ages to see something they’d never known before on any stages! A tale not heard by all ages!” A small audience appeared in front of the miniature theater.
Fixing up and standing behind his drama box he gave a confident cough. “Children, adults, and any who drop in, let me tell you the story of our rain goddesses! Now you all know on how everyone is receiving annual rain, but remember before where there wasn’t even enough water for the sand to obtain? Learn the story and with my puppets I will explain our previous history!” he called with his eyes twinkling, pulling some strands the curtains slid open revealing an elaborate room back drop and two male puppets on stage.

“Young Chief Malek, I have news,” cried the bowing doll. Whipping around dangling on the string glared the carved face of arrogance, “What is it that it requires me?” he scoffed.

The whimpering servant doll only replied with a simple, “Its urgent, sir.” Grumbling the one called Malek stormed through the exit with his sniffling servant. With a flick of the button the backdrop switched to a savannah-like edge of the village.

Hovering above a dune in between two large puppets was a female marionette. Her long brown hair and beautiful garments that flowed with her shape seemed to portray her as a belly dancer, though the confidence and regal stance proved otherwise. Gracefully sliding down the grassy hill with the jangling of her metal bracelets and the flapping of her translucent sashes, and landing firmly and proudly in front of the on lookers.

With an abrupt jab to the chest the woman pressed her slender wooden finger to the bark chest of Malek. Her jaw flapping quickly in anger as she barked, “YOUR village has had been prosperous recently, has it not? You gain your rain, you have crops, but yet you refuse to return the ewes you have stolen from us! We parted some of our precious oasis water so you could irrigate your crops! Yet, you refuse to return any of our favors and still stole an additional half our herd and claim some of our land?”

The Malek pushes the female away and her body only moves centimeters back. “Ha! We are only claiming what has been ours, we just now have a goddess supporting us, that is all. And how dare you with that nerve come barging into my village like that. I should have you executed,” he retorted curtly.

The guard puppets took their spot by their client and filled the space between the two nation’s people with mini X crossed spears. Shrugging the girl spins away with her trail of shimmering cloth. . “A goddess is no reason to become a revolting neighbor. Just return our chattel and there will be no further complications.” she quipped with no surprise to the thought of a goddess.

Folding his arms the doll stomped a foot in anger. The stage producing soft thuds to it as well. “Your Desert Rose tribe should be eradicated! Your land is covered in filthy gray sand that doesn’t radiate like our golden grass gleams. Your people come out dirty from work after farming or laboring in your dreary old mines. We who live in on the border of plains to desert should own both sides and not one. And you Illuma who knows better than everyone else that your sand was once grass, but were forsaken and became that arid wasteland,” he accused.

Unimpressed the puppet dubbed Illuma pressed her strong toes to the earth, feeling the damp presence within. They had rain, she thought and it was a large quantity as well. Spreading her feet she allowed them to bounce and move across the plain, leaping in a continuous circle around the haughty chieftain. “If we are so forsaken, why are we prosperous and your tribe wilting like your grass?” she remarked slyly.

The marionette flipped and spin to the enchanting words of Shali, his voice not of his own, but of another. The inflection pressed through with every word and seemed to make the doll alive. His whole troop was alive.

Saying nothing Malek creaked his arms apart and spun trying to encompass the whole land. None of the grass was wilted and produced a healthy golden shine. The people of the tribe had been watching over the hill. Pressing a button the scenery changed once more, the gold plains with several painted people sitting in the tall grass.

Grumbling Illuma slowed her cocky movement and neared Malek once more. “Your Goddess may have given you rain, but their other Sabalian tribes needing such liquid desperately like you once did. If you won’t return our chattel then give it to those who need it. This drought has been going on for too long and you know it,” growling she was soon to continue.

A wooden hand place itself against her mouth. “Never,” it whispered cruelly. The speared guards now had their weapons pointed in the face of the chieftain. Relinquishing his force on her lips, he retreat with the sharpened stones to his tender twig-like neck. Illuma tapped her food with her dying patience and was coming to the decision of the outcome.

“WAIT!” cried the meek servant. “As the advisor of the chief, I will try to appease both sides…” he shouted with all the confidence he could muster. Craniums turned and spears were lowered, but still kept in piercing distance. Beckoning his hand the servant asked them to be closer to the blades.

Listening intently to the proposition, the button was tapped to the next panel. All the painted eyes and heads of the spectators focused on the Advisor. Shrinking and hanging to the exit of the stage he stammered his idea. “I-I-I th-think th-that we sh-should h-hold.” Quickly he was interrupted by the unknown comment of a villager, “SPIT IT OUT ALREADY,” he snapped.
Fumbling with his hands he suddenly finished mixed in a splurge of anxiety. “We should a festival! A rain festival and have our goddess compete against the best villager of the desert rose tribe in a dance. Whoever dances for the longest wins! If Illuma's side wins we return what they wanted. If we win well, we claim your land and the losing dancer is exiled from our united territory. As the daughter of your tribe’s chieftain, I believe you have enough authority to decide.”

In her rash thinking, she knew no real goddess was in a form to commit a true dance so she agreed. Malek bent over laughing in delight with then leaving his sting of the terrible decision Illuma had made.

The curtains closed for a few mere minutes as the play was being adjusted for its final act. He tinkered and inserted the new backdrops and brought out his newer puppets. The man so enthralled by his performance failed to realize his audience had grown. Shop owners closed temporarily to sit around the stand, people on errands sat down as well. His narrative style was intresting and appealing as he wove the story.

The curtains opened and the tale continued. Fake torches stood in a raindrop orientation as the puppets took their places. Smiles were carved in the Sabalians and frowns were carved into the desert Roses. All the puppets of the tribes propped up neatly next to each other. Only one kept on smiling and that was Illuma. She took her place at the center as the top dancer of her tribe, with endurance and confidence she was sure to win.

Her father had laughed at her decision and chastised her, but if they did lose he would accept the defeat honorable. The only real issue would be their new chieftain, Malek. Illuma was going to dance with pride her apparel was more of the professional kind. It was intricate designs stitched into the fabric as they draped her legs and bosom. Her mouth barley covered and her hair wrapped against the jewelry of a queen. Her opponent came out into view, a strong woman who had no divine air to her at all. She seemed more of a harlot that had the skills to entertain men, but not bring rain. The real goddess had been watching in the distance of a hut’s window.

The two dolls danced spinning and twirling in their own motions. Illuma in a slow and graceful dance, while the ‘goddess’ doing elaborate shakes and spins while swiftly being on her feet. After two hours of dancing the goddess collapsed. The greedy chieftain in fear of losing such a great deal guffawed and clapped to Illuma. The Desert Roses cheered in happiness, but were shushed by the rising barked hand of Malek. Desperate now he decided to reveal the true goddess, the one of true abilities. He didn’t expect one his best harem girls to be bested and refuse to take defeat of such a grand chance.

“I congratulate you on passing the test, now let’s see how you best against our goddess!” he shouted. The winning tribe booed and hissed at the dirty stunt.

Mere moments later from the right exit of the stage a large hunched figure draped in crimson satin embroidered with gold walked out and into the center. The goddess said nothing and the two of them began to dance once more. After the first hour the goddess threw off her robes and revealed her true form. A Sabal Elkrin, the ones whose dances summoned torrents of rain, the Elkrin decorated in gold from head to hoof, all matching her coat like the grass.

Through their dancing the two met and locked in steps. With their feet and hooves they wrote to each other their messages and their love of dance and bringing happiness to others. They exchanged their words and names through dance. It had been several hours and neither had given up, the storm clouds came rolling in to spectate as well. A downpour came and the torches went out, but the two still danced. Neither letting up. An eternal contract exchanged through dance. A yearning for each other's company and started to match in dance, as one.

The two decided and agreed on a draw. The elkrin had disliked the chieftain who had stolen her from her old tribe and would prefer to be free. Through her life she danced with glee, but had been forced to do it against her will to bring rain. She wanted to dance when she wanted to and not when others did. The two of them at the same time dropped to the ground. Their puppets lying still before rising up and providing a bow to their audience, Malek stormed around and the people cheered as there was no deal for a tie. Both sides were losers and winners at the same time. In the end as technically both losers the Elkrin, Indrani and the Rider, Illuma, were exiled and traveled to provide rain to all in desert an Sabalian land.

The curtains closed for their last time and the crowd that had gathered cheered. Even in the far back the Rider and Elkrin clapped and stomped hooves as well to the story before proceeding to continue on to a town suffering of drought.

“Trust me this is what happened; I Shali saw it all with my eyes. As I was the advisor and could not deny this tale to be told to us all! So, your prize today is knowledge and insight, because I can promise there will be more rain tonight!”


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Re: Sabal Dancer Elkrin Doe

Postby Melonbread » Mon Mar 04, 2013 4:30 pm

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Re: Sabal Dancer Elkrin Doe

Postby pecan » Tue Mar 05, 2013 1:44 am

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Name: Hiromi (Japanese for 'generous beauty')


Breedable:

Yes

Short Story:


I gasped for air though there was plenty in the wide, open desert. The sun beat down on me, hotter than ever. My tongue felt heavy and painful. It was impossible to move. The bright yellow sand rippled in the heat as I panted like a tired dog. Spots of light dotted my vision as I flopped down on the sand. No, I thought. I couldn't afford to black out again. There was a high chance that I would not wake up ever again. Instead, I feebly crawled through the sand to give my mind something to focus on.


Five days. Already five days since the start of my 'fun and educational' trip to the desert. I regretted my choice. It seemed stupid now, utterly stupid. No guide, no map, and a camel which disappeared off in the night. Just one measly backpack. I silently cursed the camel. All my supplies were gone with it. Now my water had been drained. I forced myself to accept the fact that I was going to die in a few days.


A clopping of hooves broke through my jumbled thoughts. I looked up to find an elkrin dancing her way towards me. Nah. Must be a mirage or an illusion of my sun-fried mind. Suddenly, cool water trickled into my mouth. My mouth automatically parted to accept this sweet gift. Oh, it was wonderful!


I blinked, and gasped in wonder at the glorious elkrin before me. Her coat gleamed a bright yellow-gold. Black markings swirled down her body and gentle, liquid-brown eyes blinked at me as the elkrin tilted the leaf between her teeth. More water dripped into my mouth. I finally had enough strength to talk. "Hello," I croaked. The Sabal Dancer elkrin turned her regal head towards me and dipped a greeting. "Thanks," I rasped like a crow with a sore throat again. The magnificent creature whinnied softly and nudged me firmly as I struggled to sit up. "I'm lost," I continued, glad that my voice was okay now. It was still husky, but better. Then, more timidly, I asked,"Can you help me?" The elkrin pulled away from me. Her cloven hooves suddenly darted arund, and soon she was nothing more than a graceful blur of honey and ebony twirling on the pale sand.


Finally she stopped and trotted towards me, head held high and proud. "That-was-amazing," I breathed. She huffed a grateful breath right in my nose, and I huffed it back. Our laughter and whinnies merged together and rang out through the desert. For the first time in my miserable expedition, happiness and hope flooded me. The dancing elkrin had accepted me.


As the elkrin nuzzled me, a briliant beam of sunlight made her coat burst into pure gold, I knew her name. It just came to me from a Japanese anime I had once read, but it suited the elkrin of imperfect beauty. Hiromi.
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Re: Sabal Dancer Elkrin Doe

Postby The Royal Mirage » Wed Mar 06, 2013 5:42 am

Added art to my form, it took forever but I think it's worth it ^^
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Re: Sabal Dancer Elkrin Doe

Postby rose; » Wed Mar 06, 2013 8:10 am

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Name:

Sidereus, meaning heavenly, starry, or divine in Latin.

Breedable:

Yes

Short Story:

    In The Desert wrote:The desert is a formidable place, I've come to discover, and I'm realizing I perhaps bit off more than I could chew in venturing into the wide open sands without a guide. It's hot too, but that was expected, and with Nyx at my side, it is a bit cooler. Last night a wind storm came up however, and now I really haven't any idea where we are heading anymore. I can only guess that it is the right direction. I think I see things, on the horizon, but who know show far away that could be? Everything is so flat around here. Perhaps my eyes are playing tricks on me, just as they rumor them to start doing under the hot sun, but I cannot be sure, and our best bet is to keep moving that way.
    It hasn't all been a futile attempt however; I have come across a wide variety of plants, animals, and a few runes already, who have been recorded in the back of the journal. Quite happy with what I have collected.

    February 23rd. Elijah.


    A Town? wrote:It seems I was not mistaken about the town, and reached the outskirts of it this morning! I had suspected that the citizens might welcome me, but quickly learned that they did not take kindly to new comers. I do think they would have turned me around and sent me on my way had I not brought to their attention how low on supplies I was. They seemed quite entranced by the two runes that consequently showed themselves as I opened my bag, and I do believe that's a large reason why they let me stay. Both Tennebrae and Nyx are enjoying themselves fully, being pampered and played with by the children of the household I am staying with for the time being.

    These people are quite interesting, and spent a majority of the past two days simply exploring and sketching. They find me as intriguing as I find them, although I sense a wariness upon them. I've been told as, I have found out on my own, that they are preparing for a festival, but of what sort, I do not know. I spent most my time directing my research to their culture, and found a few elderly ladies who were more than happy to tell me all about themselves, and didn't mind that I wrote as they talked. I found out quite a lot about the culture and traditions of the people, quite a few of the legends too, and you can say my hand is cramping as I write this, with all I sketched and wrote about them and the new runes I found. I'm amazing at how hidden they've stayed, and how… old fashion things seem. I like it.

    The lack of runes or elkrins disturb me, and I'm beginning to wonder if it's simply me being here that's scared them into hiding, which brings me to wonder what might have caused them to become so wary of outsiders.

    March 24th. Elijah.


    The more I learn the more amazed I become. I really can't believe these people have not been made more known to the world, although I think that is the point of them being here. They want to stay hidden. They still do not trust me, though I've been here almost a week, but I sense they trust me more than they did when I first got here. I spent my day learning how to make pottery (which it turns out I do not excel at), how to make dye (and what they make it from), and before supper, the children taught me a few of their games, and I taught them a traditional gypsies tune. It seems they have a fondness for music around here.
    I haven't the time to continue for today- I shall be finishing the notes and sketches I took for today and heading to bed.

    March 3rd. Elijah.


    A Festival! wrote:It's been a long day, but I have finally found out what everyone was anticipating. A festival! As I walked around today, I saw more than the very few runes I normally saw, and most were carrying things back and forth. Brightly colored feathers, dyes, beads, or string. I even saw the elkrin carrying things back and forth. The amount of elkrin in this place astounds me, for most places have a few here or there, but here, there are many kinds, and almost match the amount of humans. It wasn't until mid afternoon that I fully realized what was going on, and had to be told by the youngsters. They told me that there was to be a festival tonight, a festival that they waited for all year, every year. They won't tell me more- they told me that I have to wait, to see for myself. They also said that only special outsiders are ever allowed to see these happenings, so, apparently, I am special? I am not sure in what way that I am, but I did not argue.
    I am writing this before I go to supper, and after that, we shall go to this such long awaited festival. I will record my experience tomorrow morning.

    March 4th . Elijah


    Chosen wrote:There are no words to describe what happened in this small village last night. Still, I wonder if it was just a dream. The amount of elkrin and runes that frolicked about outmatched that of the humans running about- the kids and young adults dressed in brilliant colors. It seemed I did not fit, but the young ones found colorful feathers for me to wear, along with beads like everyone else. The music was loud but merry, and just by the people's expressions I knew this was a happy time of year, where all worries could be put behind or a night. There is nothing I can compare it to.

    I was told I had a friend as dusk came, and I first thought it was only Nyx or Tenebrae, who had come back from their frolicking. The children grew too excited for that though, and I turned to see one of the most stunning creatures I have seen in a very long time. The elkrin was beautiful, with no other words to describe; a species I had never seen or heard of before. She came forward reluctantly, and the children fell back for some reason, large grins upon their faces. I did not understand why, because once she got what she was after, she disappeared back into the crowd without a trace. It turns out she was only after the treats I had in my back pocket, and I could not blame her. I had thought, for a moment, that she might be there to choose me as her rider, but I knew that could not be possible. Such a graceful, elegant creature would not take interest in someone like me; clumsy, and nothing out of the ordinary.

    The children were just as disappointed as I, and when coaxed, they revealed to me that this is not only a time of celebration, but also a time where a lot of the bearer-less runes or riderless elkrins choose a rider of bearer, which is cause for celebration in itself. I put the incident behind me as we went about our evening though, enjoying myself and the parade and all the new things to experience. I witnessed three people be chosen by an elkrin, and I realized how great this public event is for the community. There's something about seeing the joy of someone becoming a rider that fills you with happiness too.

    The night wound down around a large fire, the children almost falling asleep on their parents lap. There was one last show however, and to me, it was the best of the night. Dancers emerged with their elkrin, and it was clearly a carefully planned routine, as intricate as it was. The dancers were dressed in colorful outfits with feathers and beads and everything else to imitate their elkrin. There were elkrin following as they preformed their dance that did not have a rider, and this was the time when the rest of them that were going to choose a rider sought them out. I was so entranced by this, how flawless it was, that I did not realize one had approached me. Not until I felt teeth trying to pry open my back pokcet.

    When I turned around, I realized it was the same beautiful elkrin from before! She was back, looking for more treats. I told her I had none, tried to shoo her off to find her rider, but she would not leave, not even when I tried to push her away. I wondered if this meant she had chosen me, but I could not dare to think she would. It was not confirmed until the gathering broke up, and she began to follow me home. As people walked by, they congratulated me on being chosen by such a beautiful elkrin, and I finally began to believe them. I was, still am, overjoyed! The people, they seem to accept me now too, now that they know an elkrin has deemed me trustworthy.

    March 5th, recalling the 4th. Elijah.


    Leaving wrote:I must leave this town, although I dearly wish I didn't have to. I have spent the past few days learning as much as I could before I have to go, and learning the wonders of becoming a rider. They are right- it does change you. My eyes are no longer pinkish, but rather light golden, and I don't feel quite so... overlooked.

    My elkrin, Sidereus, will be accompanying me, and I still have not gotten over the fact she chose me. Of course, I must keep a steady supply of treats around, but it's worth it. She let me rider her for the first time, and it truly was one of the singular most amazing moments of my life. Even Tennebrae and Nyx seem to like her, which is quite good.

    It seems my time spent here not only enlightened me on a new way of life, but also shown me the joy of being told I do not always think of myself as highly as others might... It gives me a renewed sense of courage, and I will continue my journeys upon the back of a majestic elkrin tomorrow morning, to travel to places I wouldn't have been able to before. I plan to come back here, if not next year then for sure the next year, to partake in such great events again.
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Re: Sabal Dancer Elkrin Doe

Postby toccata » Thu Mar 07, 2013 2:51 pm

dropping out I have no time
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Re: Sabal Dancer Elkrin Doe

Postby Benathorn » Sun Mar 10, 2013 1:31 pm

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Re: Sabal Dancer Elkrin Doe

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Re: Sabal Dancer Elkrin Doe

Postby The Royal Mirage » Mon Mar 11, 2013 12:51 pm

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Re: Sabal Dancer Elkrin Doe

Postby Tyasi » Mon Mar 11, 2013 1:13 pm

Good luck to everyone!

Didn't get to do much art. orz All the other stories are so good though, can't wait to see the winner. <3
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