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The Mime's Box by Desmond

Artist Desmond [gallery]
Time spent 1 hour, 20 minutes
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The Mime's Box

Postby Desmond » Sat Feb 05, 2011 9:32 pm

... I get really depressing sometimes. ._.;; Soni's trapped in a too-small-for-him plexiglass box tonight.

Hope this is good enough for Intermediate; I figured out that one should not stay zoomed in and in one area while doing Oekakis. They turn out small, like this one. Dx The background's plain for lack of inspiration... and I liked the feeling of the desolate darkness he's stuck in. So I guess it all works out.

I'd like some crit on this one- not on the design, since it's not going to change- but my method of approach on the piece. Does the glass look like glass? And the shadows...? Does it all convey that sense of utter despair I was trying to get? .-.;; I'd like to get those answers, at least.

Timer doesn't lie. Whatever it says... other than talking to Tiki and restarting my comp, that's what it is. It's close enough.
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Re: The Mime's Box

Postby Xx_Bex_xX » Sat Feb 05, 2011 10:19 pm

O.O Awww Looks so sad :(
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Re: The Mime's Box

Postby Orbitsy » Sat Feb 05, 2011 10:21 pm

D'aww :c
I think it's definitely worth intermediate, your anatomy is perfect ^^
Still.. kind of sad ;__;
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Re: The Mime's Box

Postby Lady Norrington » Sun Feb 06, 2011 2:06 am

very pretty! i hope you feel better soon! =)
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Re: The Mime's Box

Postby Desmond » Sun Feb 06, 2011 8:12 am

@all: Thank you. :)

@Arisu: If you say so- I see a few errors, but that's just me. ^.^;;

@Lady Norrington: I certainly hope so, too.
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Re: The Mime's Box

Postby Icesky » Tue Mar 15, 2011 12:41 pm

Sorry to hear about your depression ):
I'll try to give you some critiques, and feel free to disregard them if you believe they are not helpful/true xD I wont claim to know much.
-The lighting is a little strange. I can't detect an exact light source. Is it coming from behind the box? Inside the box? While the box is 3D, the background light is in the center, not really in the back of the box. I'd move the back light to the right a little, as well as up. And why is the box glowing? Like on the top and right side.
-Another thing is the front left leg. First of all, it's a little fat. I'd slim it down a bit, especially in the knee area. It's also pretty short too, but they might even be fixed with a slimmer leg.
-The hind leg confuses me. Well, actually, it's the hoof. I'd suggest is being more smooth.
-One last thing. Most zebras have a dip in their back, instead of being kind of flat.

I hope I helped. It's a nice drawing :3 I think worth intermediate.
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