➳ - Shadow Children { weekly story / critique please }

[I'm Not The Only One]

This is such an awesome story all ready! I love your writing style and the hints of what to come you've managed to slip in c: Great job so far!

[qwill.]

This is such an awesome story all ready! I love your writing style and the hints of what to come you've managed to slip in c: Great job so far!

I like how Jack is actually speaking with the reader It gives the story dimension

thank you both so much! I hope to work on this more in the coming weeks; it was just sort of an idea I had that I needed to get out of my head, and then I got back into school, and I haven't really had time for it c: but I'll try to work on it more as I get past other things that are going on in my life and making it hectic .3.

[WilloweWolf]

bump

[sparrow;]

I love this! Especially the way you mention something, but you bring it up again instead of just forgetting about it, like the way her stories are about heroines, and then saying she was proving her stories wrong.