viscet #1983 - winner by _Alex_

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viscet #1983 - winner

Postby _Alex_ » Sun Oct 29, 2017 2:46 pm

    username ;; WolfWinter
    name ;; Raymond
    gender ;; male
    owned as of ;; dec. 14



    my original theme for this adopt was going to be along the lines of a porcelain doll. somehow i don't think i managed to stick to that theme cx

    for this competition, i want you to tell me about something in this viscet's life that was shattered and how they reacted. this can be interpreted however you like, however i would like to be able to get a clear understanding of the shattered 'item' when i read through your form. there will be a minimum word limit of 250 words and a maximum word limit of 2000 words.

    in addition, you will be allowed 3 extras. each extra may be either a written piece totaling no more than 500 words OR an art piece. no comics or animations larger than a simple blink or bounce will be allowed. written extras may not be combined nor added to the main prompt to increase the word limit.

    rules wrote: - answer to the prompt above must be included to make a complete form
    - 3 extras allowed
    - off thread and/or off site forms are not allowed
    - be kind and respectful. any harassing, guilt tripping, or rudeness may result in automatic disqualification
    - prettying up is allowed
    - end date is nov. 10 at 5 pm central time
    - one extension may be given if requested at least 48 hours in advance of the closing date
    - one word extension may be given if requested by at least two participants at least 72 hours before the end date


    the skeleton form below may be changed provided that all basic information is included in your form.
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    [b]name ;; [/b]
    [b]gender ;; [/b]
    [b]gender for breeding ;; [/b]

    [b]prompt ;; [/b](something in their life that was shattered and their reaction)(250-2000 words)
    [b]extras ;; [/b](3 allowed. max word limit of 500 if written. no animations or comics)


    mutations wrote:boneshell - event rare
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Re: viscet #1983

Postby Thebattleangel » Sun Oct 29, 2017 3:02 pm

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Take me down to the river bend...
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Take me down to the fighting end...
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name ;;
Luna
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Wash the poison from off my skin...
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gender ;;
Female
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Show me how to be whole again...
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gender for breeding ;;
Female
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Fly me up on a silver wing
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personality ;;
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Past the black where the sirens sing
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Luna is a typically anxious viscet, she is also self conscious and has a low self esteem, she is headstrong and is always willing to take matters into her own paws no matter what it may be, she can get worried pretty easily, she likes to be in solitude most of the time, replaying her past in her mind, after her father, she felt alone and lost in the big wide world on her own, if it wasn't for her grandfather she would probably have gone insane, she is very graceful, she remains light on her feet at all times because you never know when a threat may emerge from the shadows, she is very anti social since she would rather spend her time training with her friends than hang out with anyone else, she is considered as a mute to most people since she's shy and won't speak unless she is called upon, she is always protective of young viscling's and incredibly loyal to her friends, she is the most intelligent viscet you will ever come across and will use it to her advantage in any battle situation, she is extremely independent and would rather do things for herself then have them done for her, she enjoys watching a sunset every now and again and imagine her father beside her, seeing him again, she is always observing her surroundings so she always knows her way around, she longs to help people but doesn't really know how to really approach them, however she always thinks about it though, she has a big hobby for going to local libraries and slipping twenty dollars notes into most of the books as a small deed and to make someone happy when they purchase the book, she has a big heart and wishes the best for everyone in the world and also everything, you can really rely on her, she will never let you down for as long as she lives, she will always put everyone else first before herself no matter what and she lives to spread smiles around the earth to every viscet and human no matter where they may live, she wants no one to be unhappy like she is and will stop at nothing to achieve her goal (378/500 words)
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Warm me up in a nova's glow
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relationships ;;
Apothas/Apo
- Whenever Luna needed to test her skills, abilities against a powerful opponent, she would always turn to Drax, Clara's son Apothas. While the two spar Apothas takes this as an opportunity to find her weaknesses and has Raika as a second pair of eyes to find more weaknesses. When he finds these weaknesses he immediately begins to teach her how to turn those into strengths. To make her a better fighter. Sometimes Apothas would have Luna spar against Raika and watch their fight closely. Sometimes he'd catch Luna singing, and he'd join, sing with her, then others join in too. (100/100)

Clara Lilium/Clara
- Clara is the mother that she never had, she would always treat her like she was her own daughter, along with loving her like one, they have quite a lot of things in common, which they always do together, she has a huge mother/daughter bond with her, the two are two peas in a pod and Clara will always protect Luna as well as her offspring,
no matter what. (70/100)

Emmy
- Luna and Emmy are extremely close best friends, they are like sisters to one another, the train and spar often, you will rarely find them apart, that's for sure, they love each other so unbelievably much, ever since Luna and her grandfather arrived at their den, Emmy obviously saw that Luna felt incredibly out of place, not to mention awkward, but she approached her and they got to talking about saw that they had so unbelievably much in common and overtime bonded, strengthening their bond every passing day. (88/100)

Tau
- Ever since meeting Tua, Luna sensed a powerful singer within her. One who rock the streets of major cities and bolster her own voice as well. To immediately make the duet singing icons. After just a few short weeks Luna, got Tua where she needed her to be so they could win the world championship singing tournament in Auckland. And if they were to win maybe even start up a band, and go on tours around the world. (78/100)

Kleo
- Luna and Kleo want to own their own comedy show together and tour the world. So not just their group can enjoy their jokes, memes and what not, but everyone else as well. So that one day they could become the worlds most famous comedy duo. And do shows all over the world in every nation for everyone to enjoy, and get a good laugh.
(65/100)

(401/500)
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and drop me down to the dream below
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prompt ;;
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'Cause I'm only a crack in this castle of glass
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When Luna was a young viscling, her father gave her the bone structure to protect her from all threats. To keep her safe, even when he is no longer able to protect her. So he would never have to worry about his precious little girl getting hurt. But before the bone shell could grow alongside Luna, she experienced a battle that would scar her for life. A battle between her father Rex, and his arch nemesis Drake. The two have been arch rivals ever since they were visclings themselves, so they go way back. As they grew older their rivalry became more, more aggressive. Drake has always wanted revenge on Rex, he decided what better way to get revenge on Rex than eliminating him, and leave Luna to the scavengers. Ending his longtime rivals life, along with his precious daughters as well.
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Hardly anything there for you to see
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"Well well well, look who we have here if it isn't Rex and his little brat Luna!"
Rex keeps his daughter as close to him as possible, hides her behind him while staring down Drake.
"You leave Luna out of this you hear me!?!?!"
Drake laughs.
"If you wanted me to leave her alone, you should've left her back in your den!"
Luna angrily stands beside her father.
"We are heading to see my grandfather, who is currently sick. How dare you say such things!"
Rex looks down at Luna.
"Sweety, you really must be careful Drake is too powerful for you to handle. Maybe even to powerful for me to handle. I gave you that bone structure to protect you both now, and when I'm no longer able to do so myself."
Luna looks up at her father with a tear running down her cheek.
"Dad, what are you saying? Your the strongest person I know. If anyone can take Drake down I believe you are the one that can do it."
Rex wipes the tear from his daughter's cheek.
"Luna. You are my only offspring, I need you to survive. I need you to run as far away from here as you can. Run to your grandfather's den, and hide there. I will be there as soon as I can."
More tears begin to fall from her eyes.
"Dad no, I cant leave you, I need you dad!!"
"I'm sorry Luna, but there's no other option available to us. I need you to survive! Run Luna run!"
"Awww isn't that cute, a father spending his last moments with his daughter before he dies, sends his only offspring off on her own. Now, that's sickening."
Rex and his daughter Luna share their last hug together. The moment Drake begins to charge at them Rex orders his daughter to run, and she does so.

But unknowing to them she stops and hides, she is out of their line of sight so they cant see her, but she can see them. She sits their powerless to do anything to help her father. Several hours of biting throwing each other around, slamming each other against the ground, against trees. Rex's body began to give out on him, but he still continued to fight Drake. To give his daughter enough time to put as much distance between them as possible.
Drake slams Rex's head into the ground, hold his head there with his paws.

"Your daughter won't make it there Rex. Once I'm finished with you, I'm heading after her myself. I shall drag her back here, tie her to that tree right in front of us. And force her to watch as I rip your dead body to shreds."
Rex tries to fight back but just gets slammed back into the ground even harder.
"There's no point in resisting anymore Rex. Your death shall give me my victory, and your daughter's life shall bring me peace."
"You will not harm my daughter!!!"
Rex forces Drake off of him, slams him into a few trees with every bit of strength he can muster, before getting his head slammed into a boulder with enough force to shatter bones, thus ending his life.

Luna having watched the entire fight, cries, and cries. Drake drags her father's body across the ground and throws it into several trees. His body going straight through them. Before Drake could get a glimpse of her she bolted to her grandfather's den, with tears pouring from her eyes. After a day of travel, she finally made it to her grandfather's den. When he woke up, he noticed her laying there next to him, with dried up tears on her. When she woke up they began to talk. She told him everything that had happened, he was furious, depressed just as she was. But they both knew they were no match for Drake. She wanted to get her revenge on Drake for killing her father, n she thought what better way than to end his life.

Several years had passed since her father sacrificed his life to save hers. Her grandfather who went by Valkyrie, but he prefers to go by Valkyr. He's taught her everything he taught her father, and even more. He worked on the bone shell that's on her himself he gave it to her father when he was young to protect him, but he stashed it away to keep, to put on his daughter, which he was fine with, as much as he wanted his son to be safe, he respected his wishes. He designed the bone to spread along the body and fuse with the body's bone itself, to become one with the user. But once the fusion is complete it is up to the user to unlock its full potential. Wich encases the users entire body with the bone shell. You'd have to do some tremendous, amount of damage to even damage the shell. Since it was designed to protect at all costs. Can even activate its self to protect whoever controls it.
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Bring me home in a blinding dream,
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When she turned twenty-six she had gone out on a scavenger, exploration trip. She had gathered everything she was needed to and returned the supplies to her grandfather, then went out exploring. Along the way, she came across two viscets who were sparing with each other with two others sitting on the sidelines watching their fight. Luna decided to hide behind a bush and watch, thought she wouldn't be discovered. But soon noticed one of them look in her direction. That viscet excused himself from the rest of the group, walked behind them. She didn't think they spotted her, but she climbed up a tree just to be safe. When the next sparing match started, she heard a voice call to her quietly, from the tree next to her.
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Through the secrets that I have seen,
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"Who are you, and why are you here?"
Spooked, she slowly turned her head.
"Wow, I didn't hear you at all! Your movements have no sound to them at all! Well, my name is Luna, and I was out here on my normal hiking route when I heard fighting nearby so I decided to stop by and watch for a bit,"
The stranger looks at her, then back down at the sparring match, she does the same.
"Well, you could've come over to us, ya know. We are rather friendly, won't bother anyone, unless they bother us. By that i mean, if they start a fight with us, we will fight back."
"Yes, I understand. I just didn't know if I'd be welcomed or not."
Apothas bows his head, with his paw going over his heart.
"Allow me to introduce myself, I am Apothas, son of Drax, Clara. Both are well-respected leaders. My father Drax is the leader of Legion, we fight to protect our friends, family, and everyone else as well. While my mother Clara is the leader of her own community."
Luna looks at Apothas.
"They both sound like fun parents Apothas. My father passed away trying to defend me from his arch-nemesis, Drake. I escaped unharmed but his death haunts me to this very day, and that was years ago when I was a young viscling."
Apothas looks towards Luna, reaches his paw out to rest it on her shoulder.
"I'm so sorry for your loss if you'd like we could escort you to my mother's group?"
"Sure id love that, can I bring my grandfather with me?"
"Sure you can Luna."

Apothas signals the others, and together they set off to her grandfather's den, to bring him to Apothas's mothers with his granddaughter Luna. But unknowing to them, they would be coming across Drake really soon. Just hours later they had reached her grandfather's house, brought him into the group and set off on their destination. Out of the corner of Luna's eye, she spots Drake. So she sneaks away from the group, rushes straight for him, to get her revenge. However, Apothas notices this, orders the others to get her grandfather to his mother's group safely. And they do so, while Apothas, follows Luna, through the dense forest to the spot where he killed her father, with the trees were still broken stood. Apothas spots Luna staring down Drake with vengeance in her eyes. The bone shell immediately completely surrounds her entire body.

Thus completely protecting her from everything Drake could send her way. At one point during their fight, she lost all control of herself and began pummeling Drake into the ground and smashing his body into everything she could, thus ruining his body for the rest of his life. Apothas stood there watching her destroy him. But just before she was about to land the finishing blow, which would end his life, Apothas, quickly got behind Luna, pulled her off him, which allowed her to regain control of herself. The moment Apothas sensed Luna was in control again he released her.

"You can release me now Apothas."
Apothas releases Luna, from his grasp.
"You could have killed him, now I understand you want revenge on this guy for killing your father, but is death really what your father would do in this circumstance? Would he kill this guy for killing you, or would he let him live out the rest of his life, in his ruined, destroyed body, with no way of ever hurting anyone ever again?"
Luna looks down at Drake.
"This is what you get for killing my father Drake, you will live out the rest of your miserable life behind bars for what you did with no chance of release. And if you somehow manage to get out, I swear, I shall come for your head myself!"
And with that being said, Apothas, escorts Luna, back to his mother's group, where her grandfather anxiously awaits her arrival.

Surprising to her, the leader of Legion is also there, cuddling with Clara. Along with a few others cuddling together, Commander Raika, cuddling with Uniqua. Everyone happy with their peaceful lives. Even though those that are Legion members are off saving lives from the evil members of Chaos, one such member being Draxis their leader. Who will stop at nothing to completely eradicate every form of life. Awaken the previous devil, Tronis, and together either corrupt or eliminate everything.
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Wash the sorrow from off my skin,
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From the moment they step into Clara's group's territory, Clara walked over to her, bowed her head, to which Luna returned. The two walked to Luna's den to chat for awhile, and when she returned to her grandfather they had both become members of her group. After his defeat, Drake was locked away in her group's prison. Secured to the bench that was there. Living the rest of his life in isolation. While living there Luna reached the peace that she has only dreamed of reaching ever since that fateful day. But with the help of Clara, her friends, allies. Luna was finally able to be happy again, although her father's death is a scar that will never vanish from her mind, will always haunt her, no matter how happy she becomes.
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And show me how to be whole again
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credit wrote:Lyrics - Castle of glass by Linkin park
Story - Abraxis - I couldn't write it since I'm phone bound but I gave ideas

Viscets in story:
Apothas -Titan commander - Owned by Abraxis
Drax -Legion leader - Clara's mate - Owned by Abraxis
Clara Lilium/Clara - Leader of her own pack - Drax's mate - Owned by me
Raika -Commander - Uniqua's mate - Owned by Abraxis
Uniqua -Raika's mate - Owned by me
All viscets that aren't mine are used with permission
Art credit to the amazing ash wolf!
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Re: viscet #1983

Postby WolfWinter » Sun Nov 05, 2017 3:05 am

name ;;
Raymond
gender ;;
Male
gender for breeding ;;
Male


prompt ;;
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Raymond was wandering around at night. He was still very young and wanted to see more of the world. So, he decided to buy bus tickets. His parents always warned him of leaving town where no one knew him. He hadn't understood, not then. The driver looked at him and smiled, until he saw the ticket, then the smile faltered a bit. Raymond took a seat in the middle of the bus, bag at his feet and tail curved around to give others room. It was late, so there weren't that many people riding. When it came time to pull out of the station, the driver asked him if he was sure he wanted to go. Raymond nodded his head.

For Raymond, his world had been made up entirely of the small city he grew up in. It wasn't quite a town, and too small to be called a proper "city". As the bus left the station, and the buildings gave way to the suburbs, and then the fields. He watched in awe as his world grew before his very eyes; small paws and nose pressed against the glass. Fields filled with cattle, grain, and horses. Here and there he saw sheep. His world grew, and grew. Then they left the fields behind, and trees rose up around him like looming giants, growing ever taller as the bus drove on.

He looked down at his ticket again, and gulped. He had picked the furthest route from his home station without transfers. The ride was supposed to take around a day, and it had been only an hour. The warnings of his parents rang loud in his ears, now. He looked at himself, and compared himself to the other viscets around him. Realization hit him then, of how different he was. His mom looked like he did, so it never really struck him that he was unusual. And still, the bus drove on. Instead of panicking, he did his best to remain calm. Then, that joy came back. He pulled a candy bar out of his bag and started munching on it.

A sound behind him caught his attention. There was a baby, a human baby, cooing in her mother's arms. She looked at him and laughed, a cheery sound. He caught his reflection in the mirror and saw that there were crumbs all over his muzzle. He wiped them off and and turned back to the baby. He made noises and silly faces while her mother tried to deal with the other child next to her. He caught the other child's attention, and said hi before babbling back at the baby. The little boy's pouting faltered a bit. The rest to of the bus ride passed pleasantly.

Raymond had brought a notebook with him to doodle in. He and the little boy passed it back and forth, drawing creatures. The mother finally had a break, as her son was now being entertained. The baby was sleeping in the carrier. Raymond found out that the boy had made this trip many times. His uncle lived on one of the farms they had passed, and they visited him often. Raymond was fascinated while he was told about horse-back riding, feeding cows and chickens, and dealing with jumping barking dogs. It had felt like little time had passed when the reached the place they were to get off at. Raymond carefully tucked his return ticket into his bag in a safe spot.

He jumped off the bus and onto the platform. He waved goodbye to his new friend, and didn't see the worried and searching look of his mother as she watched him leave alone. The first thing Raymond noticed was that it didn't look that different from home, at first. The further he got from the station, the more differences he noticed. The smell in the air, the way people and viscets moved, and the looks he got. Everyone seemed to be watching him. Even though he had put on a light jacket, his blades showed. That was because his mother had cut holes into it and mended the seams specially to keep him from tearing his clothes.

The looks varied. Some were curious, others were wary, and others showed outright fear. It made him feel scared. Cracks began to appear in how he saw the world. He walked around the street. Eventually walking in front of a fast food restaurant. He was hungry. There was a park down the street, and he walked to it. He found a bench to sit on. He pulled out the food packed, and settled on the beef sandwich. Then he noticed something. In the bushes across from he saw a tail. A viscet's tail. He carefully walked around the bushes and saw an aged viscet sleeping, wrapped in an old blanket.

Raymond felt his world come crashing down around him. The old viscet opened one eye, and watched him curiously. Feeling rather sad, and wanting to help her, he held out his sandwich. She eyed him suspiciously before slowly sitting up. She looked around, and narrowed her eyes. "Where are your parents? they wouldn't let you out here alone," she said with a hoarse voice.

"I came here alone, because I wanted to see things," he said.

She chuckled, "And what have you seen, little one? How cruel the world is? How others simply turn their backs on those in need, or turn a blind eye?"

"So? Not everyone is like that. I want to help. I want to help people," he said.

And he did. He turned his bag upside down and dumped it out, being careful of his return ticket. He gave her the candy bars, the other sandwich, and the money he was going to use to get himself a toy. She looked at him, and he didn't know what the look meant then. It would take a long time before he'd come to understand what that look meant. She walked him back to the bus station to wait for the next bus home.

Extra:
Traveler

The sun beat down on his back as he moved through the grass. He looked up and felt relief when he saw the clouds in the distance.
Someone was shouting his name. It was Janet, she was waving her arms frantically at him. He turned around and walked back to the construction site. The bare earth was quickly becoming something that was recognizably a hospital. It wasn't a large one,
but it would do for the population here.

He grinned as he approached her, "Hey Janet, what's up?"

"We need you to sign off on this supply delivery. With Angelina away for the next few days, you're the only other one here who can sign off on these," she said, holding out the clipboard.

He signed off for the delivery. Raymond's chest swelled with pride as he saw them working. His break was almost over, and soon he would be back with them, putting up walls, laying wire, and hauling material. The next three months passed quickly, but he remembered all of it. Insects biting him, the smiles of everyone as they finished the hospital, the plane ride home, and the knowledge he would do it all over again. Every ache and pain was worth it.
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Re: viscet #1983

Postby padaleckii » Mon Nov 06, 2017 4:44 am

Name ;; Cahya
Gender ;; Male
Gender for breeding ;; Male

Prompt ;;
Tonight I shall tell you the story of a scar. No, not a physical one, but the one left on my heart.
It started with a simple fight.
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      a hound chased a rabbit, but gave up after a long run.
      a shepherd who watched came up to the hound and said,
      "the rabbit is the better runner." the hound replied,
      "i only ran for dinner.
      he ran for his life."


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Re: viscet #1983

Postby _Alex_ » Thu Nov 09, 2017 2:24 pm

    due to both a request and my own packed schedule over the next few days, this comp is being extended until the 15th at midnight cst.
































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Re: viscet #1983

Postby Thebattleangel » Sat Nov 18, 2017 9:02 am

Goodluck! I forgot to add in my form that Tau prefers to be called Tua c:
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Re: viscet #1983

Postby padaleckii » Sat Nov 18, 2017 9:32 am

Goodluck guys <3
Despite having extra time, I could't finish my writing as I scrapped over 1/3 of the writing and didn't get to finish rewriting it as I was unaware of going to all the events because of my best friend's mother passing.

      a hound chased a rabbit, but gave up after a long run.
      a shepherd who watched came up to the hound and said,
      "the rabbit is the better runner." the hound replied,
      "i only ran for dinner.
      he ran for his life."


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Re: viscet #1983

Postby Thebattleangel » Fri Nov 24, 2017 7:37 pm

~Prophecy~ wrote:Goodluck guys <3
Despite having extra time, I could't finish my writing as I scrapped over 1/3 of the writing and didn't get to finish rewriting it as I was unaware of going to all the events because of my best friend's mother passing.

that's horrible, I hope things look up <3333
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Re: viscet #1983

Postby _Alex_ » Fri Dec 15, 2017 9:57 am

WolfWinter wrote:
name ;;
Raymond
gender ;;
Male
gender for breeding ;;
Male


prompt ;;
Image
Raymond was wandering around at night. He was still very young and wanted to see more of the world. So, he decided to buy bus tickets. His parents always warned him of leaving town where no one knew him. He hadn't understood, not then. The driver looked at him and smiled, until he saw the ticket, then the smile faltered a bit. Raymond took a seat in the middle of the bus, bag at his feet and tail curved around to give others room. It was late, so there weren't that many people riding. When it came time to pull out of the station, the driver asked him if he was sure he wanted to go. Raymond nodded his head.

For Raymond, his world had been made up entirely of the small city he grew up in. It wasn't quite a town, and too small to be called a proper "city". As the bus left the station, and the buildings gave way to the suburbs, and then the fields. He watched in awe as his world grew before his very eyes; small paws and nose pressed against the glass. Fields filled with cattle, grain, and horses. Here and there he saw sheep. His world grew, and grew. Then they left the fields behind, and trees rose up around him like looming giants, growing ever taller as the bus drove on.

He looked down at his ticket again, and gulped. He had picked the furthest route from his home station without transfers. The ride was supposed to take around a day, and it had been only an hour. The warnings of his parents rang loud in his ears, now. He looked at himself, and compared himself to the other viscets around him. Realization hit him then, of how different he was. His mom looked like he did, so it never really struck him that he was unusual. And still, the bus drove on. Instead of panicking, he did his best to remain calm. Then, that joy came back. He pulled a candy bar out of his bag and started munching on it.

A sound behind him caught his attention. There was a baby, a human baby, cooing in her mother's arms. She looked at him and laughed, a cheery sound. He caught his reflection in the mirror and saw that there were crumbs all over his muzzle. He wiped them off and and turned back to the baby. He made noises and silly faces while her mother tried to deal with the other child next to her. He caught the other child's attention, and said hi before babbling back at the baby. The little boy's pouting faltered a bit. The rest to of the bus ride passed pleasantly.

Raymond had brought a notebook with him to doodle in. He and the little boy passed it back and forth, drawing creatures. The mother finally had a break, as her son was now being entertained. The baby was sleeping in the carrier. Raymond found out that the boy had made this trip many times. His uncle lived on one of the farms they had passed, and they visited him often. Raymond was fascinated while he was told about horse-back riding, feeding cows and chickens, and dealing with jumping barking dogs. It had felt like little time had passed when the reached the place they were to get off at. Raymond carefully tucked his return ticket into his bag in a safe spot.

He jumped off the bus and onto the platform. He waved goodbye to his new friend, and didn't see the worried and searching look of his mother as she watched him leave alone. The first thing Raymond noticed was that it didn't look that different from home, at first. The further he got from the station, the more differences he noticed. The smell in the air, the way people and viscets moved, and the looks he got. Everyone seemed to be watching him. Even though he had put on a light jacket, his blades showed. That was because his mother had cut holes into it and mended the seams specially to keep him from tearing his clothes.

The looks varied. Some were curious, others were wary, and others showed outright fear. It made him feel scared. Cracks began to appear in how he saw the world. He walked around the street. Eventually walking in front of a fast food restaurant. He was hungry. There was a park down the street, and he walked to it. He found a bench to sit on. He pulled out the food packed, and settled on the beef sandwich. Then he noticed something. In the bushes across from he saw a tail. A viscet's tail. He carefully walked around the bushes and saw an aged viscet sleeping, wrapped in an old blanket.

Raymond felt his world come crashing down around him. The old viscet opened one eye, and watched him curiously. Feeling rather sad, and wanting to help her, he held out his sandwich. She eyed him suspiciously before slowly sitting up. She looked around, and narrowed her eyes. "Where are your parents? they wouldn't let you out here alone," she said with a hoarse voice.

"I came here alone, because I wanted to see things," he said.

She chuckled, "And what have you seen, little one? How cruel the world is? How others simply turn their backs on those in need, or turn a blind eye?"

"So? Not everyone is like that. I want to help. I want to help people," he said.

And he did. He turned his bag upside down and dumped it out, being careful of his return ticket. He gave her the candy bars, the other sandwich, and the money he was going to use to get himself a toy. She looked at him, and he didn't know what the look meant then. It would take a long time before he'd come to understand what that look meant. She walked him back to the bus station to wait for the next bus home.

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The sun beat down on his back as he moved through the grass. He looked up and felt relief when he saw the clouds in the distance.
Someone was shouting his name. It was Janet, she was waving her arms frantically at him. He turned around and walked back to the construction site. The bare earth was quickly becoming something that was recognizably a hospital. It wasn't a large one,
but it would do for the population here.

He grinned as he approached her, "Hey Janet, what's up?"

"We need you to sign off on this supply delivery. With Angelina away for the next few days, you're the only other one here who can sign off on these," she said, holding out the clipboard.

He signed off for the delivery. Raymond's chest swelled with pride as he saw them working. His break was almost over, and soon he would be back with them, putting up walls, laying wire, and hauling material. The next three months passed quickly, but he remembered all of it. Insects biting him, the smiles of everyone as they finished the hospital, the plane ride home, and the knowledge he would do it all over again. Every ache and pain was worth it.


    winner!

    i really enjoyed your story and i absolutely loved the character you came up with.
































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Re: viscet #1983 - winner

Postby Thebattleangel » Fri Dec 15, 2017 1:14 pm

Upset that I didn't win this girl, but, congratulations
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