My extremely-sloppy redlines. xD
I added some critique to it, too, if that's okay. I just wanted to point out a couple things so it would be easier to fix. It seems like I wrote about alot of mistakes, but there really wasn't that many since I wrote alot in each comment.
~Lunar
I added some critique to it, too, if that's okay. I just wanted to point out a couple things so it would be easier to fix. It seems like I wrote about alot of mistakes, but there really wasn't that many since I wrote alot in each comment.
~Lunar