[Zap]

I'm really new to Oekaki, I usually only work with pencile and paper. This is just a rought sketch so far... any constructive criticism?

[Midnight66]

If you are going to put it in color it would look nice if you put faint blush marks under there eyes. =)

[okamishiranu]

i think its just my sick imagination but this seems a bit graphic... no i dont mean its too graphic!!! its awesome. io was just telling you what my mind told me... lol

[Sephinta]

Erm, yeah... It's very good, it's just due to the pose... I have to agree with okamishiranu a bit. Though don't get me wrong, it's very good!

[Zap]

Thanks for the criticism!

Midnight66- I will put it in colour, thanks you for the idea about under the eyes!

okamishiranu- um, thanks?

Sephinta- yes it's a bit mature, it's ok kids they're just haveing a tickle fight! teehee, I might change the pose...

[Zap]

'tis that better?

[okamishiranu]

'tis that better?

lol you didnt have to change the pose, but it stll looks amazing with a different pose i can't wait until its done

[Zap]

Thank you! You're so nice

[Zap]

I started to colour it! But I messed up and put it in another post, as you can see under the picture up there. I ment to edit it, not just colour it... ugh, it's so confuseing.

[Katsumi-Luna]

why have you ruined it? i want to see XD