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Life is like a fresh blanket of snow
Beautiful as it comes
Sorrowful as it goes
it sparkles in the sun like gold
It is something to love and hold
No Matter what happens
Our love shall not be flattened
For whenever you go
I shall remember the snow.

I posted this in search for criticism, nice ones please..
Because I saw this:

Intermediate Oekaki
For experienced artists looking for some criticism and commentary from other artists

So, yeah... I drew a picture of my character Pyry (Meaning: Snow Storm) the poem is more of him just thinking about his family whom he lost ten years ago.



© The drawing is mine.
© Pyry is mine.
© And the poem is mine.
Ref for the Snowflake: http://4.bp.blogspot.com/_jW0fHcfb-L4/S ... tals_1.jpg

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Any comments???

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I really like your poem! I mostly write depressing things because I listen to music that's like that, lolz.

Let's see, critique... I don't know much about wolf anatomy, but these are the things I suggest:
-Make the ears more triangler and closer to the head. The look closer to bunny ears at the moment.
-Elongate the snout a little bit. (this might not work since your pretty snowflake is there...)

Otherwise, it looks good

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I really like your poem! I mostly write depressing things because I listen to music that's like that, lolz.

Let's see, critique... I don't know much about wolf anatomy, but these are the things I suggest:
-Make the ears more triangler and closer to the head. The look closer to bunny ears at the moment.
-Elongate the snout a little bit. (this might not work since your pretty snowflake is there...)

Otherwise, it looks good

Thank you ^^
I have been having trouble with the ears, they are suppose to be somewhat fox like, not wolf. My style is of a creature I created called a Foxingale so the snout is suppose to be short. ^^
But I will try fixing the ears some more, I never really liked drawing ears..