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Redline please by Gael

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Redline please

Postby Gael » Mon Mar 25, 2013 12:28 pm

For an HARPG... i totally messed up on the fullbody head.... im happy with the headshot neck..... if not redlining, Crit is welcome as well
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Re: Redline please

Postby Cammeraugepony » Tue Mar 26, 2013 2:05 am

The shoulders in the head shot need to be a little wider. Unless your horse is starved, it should've be a bit thicker. The back right leg is in an unnatural pose. I would understand if the horse was moving, but if it is standing still then please place the foot back on the ground. The head is way to big, so either shrink it, or ,make the body bigger. Hope it helped! I didn't mean to sound to pushy
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Re: Redline please

Postby Gael » Tue Mar 26, 2013 6:39 am

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Re: Redline please

Postby uunicorn » Tue Mar 26, 2013 7:07 am

i agree, the head is too big, the neck is a little too long, see where the head starts, that should be where the horses ears are, i think its a really good drawing on the other hand, colours: yes and also, be careful when drawing the lines for muscles around the legs because muscled drawing look better with a muscled neck, down the legs, a bit on the face and maybe some lines down the stomach, i will try and post an oekaki that is the same, not coloured but without the small falts, didnt mean to offend just hope this helps
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Re: Redline please

Postby Fellefan » Tue Mar 26, 2013 9:28 am

I lined it! hope it helps! c: <3
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Re: Redline please

Postby midnight133 » Tue Apr 02, 2013 6:48 am

I'll help if you want me to :)
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Re: Redline please

Postby PaintLily » Tue Apr 02, 2013 9:24 am

The neck should to be thicker, the belly/chest should to be wider, the legs should be a bit thicker, the muzzle should to be a bit bigger up/down, and there is a small bump around the end of the neck, but mostly you did great!
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Re: Redline please

Postby Gael » Tue Apr 02, 2013 12:41 pm

Ok and guys from now..... If it hasn't already been stated before (such as the bump on neck) please don't post it..... I wasn't feeling drawing that day and my images were very wonky because of it
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Re: Redline please

Postby midnight133 » Wed Apr 03, 2013 3:21 am

I finished, Hope this helps :)
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