[BayloneRose]

I need advice.
BES people, this is for the Lead Mare 2013 halter portion. it is just the sketch though, I plan on making it a line-less and add a handler, background, etc.

any tips on maybe making it better, or any ideas on a better pose/position/view?

[Baby bunnies!]

I would make the head bigger, and the feet less outwards.
Looks great though!

[quitting¿]

Shes good!
But her hooves are a tad big...

[BayloneRose]

thanks guys^^

[Ray.]

Her head needs to be a bit bigger.

Looks great otherwise bay!

[Penultima]

Perhaps the neck is a little short? It's amazing though :3

[Cydonia]

Hmm, The neck needs to either be longer, or the head bigger. That's the biggest problem I can see.

[stinkende]

She's pudgy all over, but the neck is too cresty for a mare. The relationship between the ears, eye, and cheek are off - the cheek extends too far back towards the neck, and the eye and ears are both too far forward. I agree that the head is too small if you're intending it to be profile perspective. The shoulder is too steep, scalenus muscle on the neck is incorrect - it does not curve the way you've depicted; it runs superficially from the point of shoulder to tie up near the atlas bone. Pectoral muscles are too wide and there is something odd going on with the perspective of the left foreleg. Both knees are too small.

She is pidgeon-toed in all four legs, but some of that gives her a nice character. Neck length is right on.

[BayloneRose]

thank you, stinkende^^ that helped me a lot. also, I am aware that she is pudgy, she is a fat broodmare XD

[BayloneRose]

Thanks SO much u guys!!!
she looks a thousand times better!
I think her neck might still be a bit cresty though I can't seem to get around it XP