Test Runs (Please give opinions)

[wildfire6]

Lol, well Sepia's from the Kingdom of Riocht if you want more of her, her counterpart is awesome as well

[Midnight Tails]

After(only just did) reading through all of Break(which is awesome by the way), I've decided that my opinion is that Shatter and Tear would be better together, but the reason for this is that I think it would increase tension between the characters, and increase distrust and all. It would just increase the drama and the fun of writing/reading it.

First idea is for Shatter to either fall in love with Razor, and then have something happen so that she breaks up with him and then she goes out with Tear instead or the other way around, she falls in love with Tear, and then Tear does something that causes distrust and have her break up with him, then decide to go out with Razor.
I think adding tension as to the two boys disliking each other and distrusting one another because of their feelings for Shatter, and Shatter not wanting anything to do with one of them (or something like that) would make their lives a bit more difficult, and the story just that little bit more interesting.
As this would cause a large rift, and possibly prevent them from having Tear's group supporting them as much as they do now.
Or in the other way, possibly having Razor no longer being so much their ally anymore.
Which them having it harder to stay alive because of less options for help, would make it more interesting.


Or perhaps Tear dies somehow, and Shatter had fallen in love with him, and then eventually decides she has feelings for Razor too, but then he feels bitter a bit because he was the 'secound choice' or something.
Or the other way around.
(I don't like this one so much)


Or Shatter could just not choose, but tell them both that while she likes them, but she doesn't favour one more than the other, which would also cause a rift between the characters....
(I think this third idea of mine sounds the most interesting, you can do more with this one I think)


These are just thoughts of mine that I've just come up with, and reading them now, they definitely don't sound as good or make as much sense, as they did in my head, I've explained the ideas I've gotten so badly...
Eh, you don't really have to listen to me, I'm just throwing out the ideas I've thought of, you are asking for people to give their opinion on ShatterXTear and ShatterXRazor.
(and I know you love drama, so I tried to think of drama increasing things that involved those characters romance wise like you were asking people. Though I now really want you to make a rp based of this, so I can join. :3)
((And I'm about to put up my reply to Dream Theif! ))

EDIT:I shall give critique/feedback on Break itself if you want me to.

[wildfire6]

Thank you Talia! I was actually considering something similar! Please do so on Break. And once again THANKYOU!

((I'm working on Damien's book now actually, so it's ironic you said that))

[Midnight Tails]

You're welcome!
Do you want my to critique/feedback on Break actually on that thread/story or want me to give you the critique/feedback to you here?
And again, you're welcome, I thought you might like getting something from me, seeing as I'd feel the same about getting stuff from you, I value your opinion highly, and I'm sure you feel the same(or at least feel similarly).
(on a sort of random yet relevant side note, we've known each other for almost a year now...That's a pretty long time!O.O)

(Really? Is this the one where Alex is writing his story down? I find that extremely interesting by the way, but I haven't had time to comment on it yet. )

[wildfire6]

I'm happy as long as I get it.
I like to hear that.

It is 0.o

I'm writing the first and second at the same time, the first is from Damien's point of brow starting when he gets out of the hospital after his brother's death and the ending when he moves to the US. The second is Alex's writing about the last year of his life. They don't have I be chronological though, so I may only post the one from Alex))

[wildfire6]

Dream Theif- Nightmare
From Damien
Word Salad
((A note to those of you who Rp with me when I use Damien, I try not to make his word Salad this random))
((To everyone else, this is just a few Word Salad quotes because one of the symptoms of Damien's schizophrenia is that when he's off his meds he starts talking in Word Salad, which you'll get in a minute. These quotes take place outside a McDonalds and between Damien and his hobo buddy Kayla, who may or may not make a small appearance in Theif))

Damien counted over the money, "Sixteen pounds and two cheeseburgers."
Kayla, despite being blind, arched an eyebrow, "Somebody put two hamburgers in your guitar case without you freaking out?"
Damien rolled his eyes, "No, I-Cole McCauny, who is Cole McCauny?- am going to get two- Macadamia Nuts- cheeseburgers."
Kayla sighed, "Damien, Word Salad, repeat what you just said."
...
"I'm going to get two cheeseburgers- Santa Claus has flying reindeer- forget that last part, because we have the money for it."
Kayla laughed, "Well you do that... And see if you can guilt them into giving us more food like you did last time, I'll be fine out here."
...
Damien sighed, "Whatever you say Lady Kayla, just make sure nothing happens to my- Walrus Soup- guitar while I'mgone."

((Try to read that with a strait face, Damien was perfectly Serious when he said it))

[city;]

You cease to amaze me, Wild. Word salad. DYING. ;} I'll read the rest [thouroughly] in a few hours.

❤,
City. :}

[wildfire6]

Lol, I'd been being serious for like five chapters and a prolouge (never spell thst right) when I wrote that; I needed something funny))

[city;]

haha! I read them all again ... 0.0 Damien's schizophrenia still makes me giggle. I tried to make Donovan a little more sane ... But I just ...

HOLY BEJEEBIES, HES OFF HIS ROCKER.

I kind of want to know what his hallucinations look like!

[wildfire6]

yeah! It's an actual symptom of skitzophrenia, glad you like it. Glad yo hear I get to play with two craxies))