SkyroWolf wrote:I know this is probably lots- but may you please rate all of my cats on this page? I think the only one which would have gone a bit over the top is Nutleaf. If you wish to know why they got their names, just ask and I will gladly explain.
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Well, it's not an entire Clan, at least. Don't worry about it, I'm always happy to help. This did get a little blunt, so I do apologize. There's been a million and one factors today that have nothing to do with you.
StormbreezeName Rating: 4/10
Name Type: Lyrical
Name Reasoning: Storm- is a traditional name, but it's for a much darker grey cat. I'm not really sure what -breeze would mean. It could mean a cat who's a little breezy - someone who's completely lax about things, but she's pretty much the exact opposite of breezy. It could mean a fleet-footed cat, but breezes are slow and gentle. Plus, you know, we have -foot already. She isn't a fast cat either, but she is a really good swimmer, and that has a suffix.
Alternative Name: Mintstream/Pebblestream. Mint- and Pebble- are for a pale grey cat (Pebble- has the bonus of being for a small cat as well), and -stream notes her swimming abilities.
Character Rating: 5/10
Character Reasoning: We got a lot to cover, and a lot of cats, so let's make it quick as I can.
There's a couple of "A, but Z" traits in this cat. She's fiery and snappy, but is a complete sweetheart. She's socially awkward and "nerdy" (which wouldn't really mean anything for cats), but has no problem being confident enough to yelling at anyone who annoys her. It doesn't make sense. She can be a snappy cat who doesn't think through what she's saying, though she means well, but someone who yells at others for something minute and then turns around and acts all deary towards someone else is two-faced at best.
Also, cats can give birth when they're under a year old. A nearly 2-year-old cat would be at the perfect time to have babies, and since a wild cat lives a short life, they'd want to have babies quickly. Why did she agree to start a family in the first place if she was so stressed about having 3 babies (the average number for mothers to have)? And why did she pick on the runt at all? Why wasn't she cruel to all of them?
Also also, devotion to one cat won't get you to deputy position. In addition to having to mentor at least one apprentice, you need to have a full, equal commitment to everyone, not just your sibling. The entire Clan is your responsibility, and frankly she doesn't seem like someone who would work as a deputy. She's too ill-tempered and impulsive.
IcepoolName Rating: 4/10
Name Type: Canonical
Name Reasoning: Ice- works for a white cat, but not a grey-brown one. -pool doesn't really say anything that's useful or that another suffix can't - -stream would cover a good swimmer, -cloud would cover a calm and serene cat, and wisdom (a very popular meaning) is gained over time, not born with, and if you aren't putting that wisdom to good use, then what's the point of having it?
Like his sister, his name is misaimed in both parts. He does have a good skill worth naming, and I'll be giving him a grey-based prefix for reasons I will explain below.
Alternative Name: Smokefoot/Cinderfoot. Both prefixes cover a grey cat, and -foot denotes his speed.
Character Rating: 5/10
Character Reasoning: Quick thing! A mixture of grey and brown patches is a dilute tortoiseshell. I covered this
here, more specifically this quote:
Tortoiseshells, and their coat color cousin calico (eyy), are almost exclusively female. The only way a male could have either of those coat colors is if he was a chimera, which is what happens when two embryos in the womb merge. As a result, these chimeras tend to be sterile (meaning they can't have children), and tend to get sick very easily. Cats like these are incredibly rare, and I don't suggest you going for it unless you feel up to some heavy research.
With that in mind, let's get to the rest.
A calm, polite, and and easy-going cat can't really be easily offended. It's just too contradictory (and it says nearly immediately after that he's hard to anger). I would suggest removing both of these traits for the sake of consistency.
Plus, I'll be honest, these two cats' entire past is a mess.
First, why on earth would any kitten be treated as above their siblings by their mother, the one who hated kits and didn't want any, or by the other Clan members, who don't have a chance to judge them yet and see them all as equal? If anything, special attention would be directed towards the runt, because she's the one who needs the most help to grow. And there's absolutely no indication that she
is any better than her siblings, with the exception of excelling in hunting and fighting - her siblings just hate her because the Clan loves her for...some reason. You can't tell if a kitten is going to be leader-material or not; that's the entire point of apprenticeship, to help a cat grow and develop into a fine warrior. Just because she happens to be a great hunter/fighter doesn't mean that she's going to be mature or calm or hard-working. Skill alone does not make a warrior worthy of leadership status.
And then, despite having no indication that she was any better in anything other than being able to catch more prey or even that the leader was planning to make her a deputy, her brother is later glad that she died and thinks that his sister, the one who's more likely to cause problems than solve any thanks to her apparent inability to keep from insulting or hurting anyone, is a better deputy choice.
Say what you will, but this dude has the worst choice of judgement I've ever seen.
This is getting too long, but basically you really need to rework this past. It doesn't make any sense except for angst-fodder.
MinnowfootName Rating: 4/10
Name Type: Misplaced Traditional
Name Reasoning: This cat has an extremely difficult pelt to name, as there are no cats with
ragdoll coloring born naturally in the wild. They are selectively bred, and thus she would need to be a kittypet, or have kittypet origins. I could give her a brown and white patched name, but it's still shaky.
Minnow- only works for a grey or dark brown cat, depending on location, and she isn't exactly a swift cat, so -foot wouldn't work on her. She is a great fighter, and very pretty (which in itself can earn a suffix), but skill goes over appearance here.
Alternative Name: Brightclaw/Chubclaw. Bright- refers to a majority white cat with stark patches of color, and Chub- is for a brown-and-white patched cat. -claw is for her fighting abilities.
Character Rating: 8/10
Character Reasoning: Overall, the only complaints I have are that she shouldn't really be weak around toms since she's so confident and flirty, and that being shy bit, for the same reason. And the odd pelt color. Otherwise, she's a pretty solid cat.
GingerfrostName Rating: 8/10
Name Type: Canonical
Name Reasoning: -frost isn't exactly a compliment of a name. It implies a cold, distant cat who doesn't have high empathy. About the exact opposite of what you want in a Clan. Her prefix is just fine, though. Since she's a good climber, she should be named for that instead of something, uh...rude sounding.
Alternative Name: Gingertail, for the reasons above.
Character Rating: 7/10
Character Reasoning: Parental issues seems to be a recurring theme here. As well as deputies that reaaaally don't deserve the position. And mollies being amazingly pretty. Hm.
Anyway, why would someone who can't even keep her balance (I would seriously suspect her to have kitty Parkinson's or epilepsy if she falls over twenty times a day -that's not cute and clumsy, that's a serious problem), who avoids interaction, and doesn't come up with anything or take the charge be considered the stuff of leadership? Like...why? Why would the leader turn away from every single other, most likely infinitely more capable and confident cat, and choose the Neville Longbottom of the Clan?
Maybe she should have left to become a kittypet instead of her parents, eh?Plus, she's also got some A-but-Z going on. Shy, but flirty. Withdrawn and awkward, but the clan clown. Etc.
If you were to make her just a normal warrior, who kept a consistent personality, then everything else would be fine.
NightfrostName Rating: 8/10
Name Type: Canonical
Name Reasoning: -frost has been argued above, so I won't go into it. Night- fits him perfectly, though. Since he has equal skill in hunting and fighting, we'll take the middle man route and go for -fang.
Alternative Name: Nightfang. -fang covers a cat with equal, above-par skill in hunting and fighting.
HawktalonName Rating: 2/10
Name Type: Canonical
Name Reasoning: Hawk- isn't available thanks to a) there being a LOT of hawks in the world, and none of them in England, and b) no real white hawks that I know of. -talon is simply a rendition of -claw or -fang, so it's unneeded.
She seems to have -heart qualities, being someone who strongly believes in doing the right thing, so we'll go with that for now.
Alternative Name: Paleheart/Cloverheart. Both prefixes cover a white cat, and -heart indicates her strong morality.
Character Ratings: 8/10
Character Reasonings: Why are so many mothers abandoning their families? Is it a cult thing? Is there some kind of alien device that just summons queens away into the night, never to be seen again (queen beacon
(c))? Is it Cthulhu?
I'll bet it's Cthulhu.
Anyway, these two don't seem to have too many issues, other than the fact that whole mother thing, and that their goals seem to be switched around. I would see Hawkpaw being the better leader than her brother, who's careless and oblivious. He should probably strive to be the best warrior he can be, and she should strive to be leader.
SnowcloudName Rating: 9/10
Name Type: Traditional
Name Reasoning: She doesn't seem to be the type to relax and be laid back. She's actually a hard-worker, and can be perfectionist because the image in her head is just right.
Alternative Name: Snowheart.
Character Rating: 8/10
Character Reasoning: I could make a drinking game out of how many times a deceased or disappeared family member shows up on this list. I really could. Holy grack. It's like Tim Burton and a lack of color.
COUPLE NOTES HERE: Wiseness =/= perfectionist. Wiseness = wise. Patience is also a difficulty for a perfectionist.
Other than that? She's fine. She actually seems like someone who could be a deputy.
NutleafName Rating: 6/10
Name Type: Creative
Name Reasoning: I've never seen Nut- before, so...congrats, I guess. Still isn't a traditional name due to the vast amount of varying nuts of species, color and shape, but good try.
While he does know a little about herbs, he's a better hunter, and he should be named for that instead.
Alternative Name: Darkwhisker/Beetlewhisker. Both prefixes indicate a black cat, and -whisker denotes hunting skill.
Character Rating: 5/10
Character Reasoning: Again with the parental abandonment- look. I don't know if, like, you had a parent figure abandon you or something, or you just think it's cool, but come on. Every single character in this review has had their parents and siblings just vanish from their life. Please,
please, please just find another backstory.
Anyway, so some girl got fridged or whatever and now he's a bitter, vengeful cat. I get that he would be hurt that someone would kill a girl he loved, but why is he letting it define him? Someone entirely focused on some outside force from the past instead of the present cats around him that need to eat is a liability to the Clan. He needs to be in present day.
Also, there's something I want to discuss: the fact that quite a few of these cats are from loner backgrounds or former kittypets. Along with the mommy issues thing, this is overdone. Some Clanborn cats would be nice, dare I say interesting. God knows there aren't enough of them around.
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