Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer [CLOSED]

[I r o n.]

Name: Robinpaw
Description: if broken image, click here
Important Notes: Robinpaw is a determinded, quiet, and wity cat. She doesn't really like to talk, but she has her moments when she ends up in a conversation. She does join in on her jobs, but is quite lazy, and doesn't always do them properly. Robinpaw is normally snappy and quick, but sometimes she can be mellow and soft; she isa't really that hyper nor calm, she can be all of the place at times.

Robinpaw is a skilled fighter and hunter, more so the 'fighting combat' part. She knows her streangth already, and sometimes gets complemented, but she doesn't really care about what others think about her, negative or positive.

[Arcaii]

Name: Robinpaw
Description: if broken image, click here
Important Notes: Robinpaw is a determinded, quiet, and wity cat. She doesn't really like to talk, but she has her moments when she ends up in a conversation. She does join in on her jobs, but is quite lazy, and doesn't always do them properly. Robinpaw is normally snappy and quick, but sometimes she can be mellow and soft; she isa't really that hyper nor calm, she can be all of the place at times.

Robinpaw is a skilled fighter and hunter, more so the 'fighting combat' part. She knows her streangth already, and sometimes gets complemented, but she doesn't really care about what others think about her, negative or positive.

All the dumb trips are over! Now I can properly respond. I do apologize for the wait.

Name Suggestion: Emberfang/Newtclaw (prefixes interchangeable).
Name Reasoning: There's two ways you could go about her suffix. The first is having her be equally above average in fighting and hunting, just a little more talented at fighting, which would give her -fang. The second is to make her more notably skilled in fighting, and give her -claw.
As for her prefixes, Robin- is best suited on a reddish-brown cat, so Ember- and Newt- (which are more for dark tortoiseshells) are suggested in place.

Character Assessment: I feel like she could have a few more traits, but what you have here is pretty solid, a few inconsistencies aside (the quiet and snarky bits contrast with the "all over the place" thing).
Character Suggestions: Just eliminate the contradiction and perhaps finesse her personality a bit more (like, determine what makes her so quiet, why she's so sarcastic, if these two things are connected, etc).

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Hey look, I'm back XD How's the CYOA going these days? c: For this I'm not really looking for advice on the names, but more on the personalities? It's for a post-apocalyptic warrior cat fanfic thing me and a friend are writing hehe Thanks ^^

Image/Description: The lightest coloured one here. She's blind in her left eye, and by the time she gets to Warrior age she's already riddled with scars.
Name: Emberkit/Ember
Gender: Female
Clan: FoxClan/Loner
Rank: Kit/Loner
Personality/Skills: After her mother died in the Skyfall (when twolegs dropped bombs on their city and its surrounding area to stop the spread of some kind of epidemic), she climbed out of the bunker that the Clan had been hiding to see if she was still alive. After seeing the bodies of most of her Clan-mates, and because she was already disoriented by the smoke and debris, she panicked and ran into the city. There, she was attacked and almost eaten by a street cat, until a loner named Xander saved her life. He trained her to hunt and fight, and raised her with a very "kill or be killed" attitude. She would regularly start fights on purpose, to just practice her combat. She goes from being a sweet, spunky kit, to an intelligent, somewhat callous, and extremely truculent loner. She does retain some of the sweetness though, especially towards her street cat mentor.
After her brother follows a series of dreams to find her, he is shocked by what he finds. He was told that she would be the next, rightful leader of the Clan, but what he finds is a cat who is totally unsuited to Clan life. She practically scoffs at the idea, and assumes that he is crazy.
Important Notes: Nothing I can think of?

[Arcaii]

Hey look, I'm back XD How's the CYOA going these days? c: For this I'm not really looking for advice on the names, but more on the personalities? It's for a post-apocalyptic warrior cat fanfic thing me and a friend are writing hehe Thanks ^^

Image/Description: The lightest coloured one here. She's blind in her left eye, and by the time she gets to Warrior age she's already riddled with scars.
Name: Emberkit/Ember
Gender: Female
Clan: FoxClan/Loner
Rank: Kit/Loner
Personality/Skills: After her mother died in the Skyfall (when twolegs dropped bombs on their city and its surrounding area to stop the spread of some kind of epidemic), she climbed out of the bunker that the Clan had been hiding to see if she was still alive. After seeing the bodies of most of her Clan-mates, and because she was already disoriented by the smoke and debris, she panicked and ran into the city. There, she was attacked and almost eaten by a street cat, until a loner named Xander saved her life. He trained her to hunt and fight, and raised her with a very "kill or be killed" attitude. She would regularly start fights on purpose, to just practice her combat. She goes from being a sweet, spunky kit, to an intelligent, somewhat callous, and extremely truculent loner. She does retain some of the sweetness though, especially towards her street cat mentor.
After her brother follows a series of dreams to find her, he is shocked by what he finds. He was told that she would be the next, rightful leader of the Clan, but what he finds is a cat who is totally unsuited to Clan life. She practically scoffs at the idea, and assumes that he is crazy.
Important Notes: Nothing I can think of?

What's up, man?! The CYOA's been cancelled (second one, anyway), but I currently have a Let's Read going on that's updating later today.

And, at your request, I'll just stick with a character review.

Also... "truculent". Nice word.

Character Assessment: My first question is how old she was when she ran into the city. Kittens stop needing to nurse at around 2-3 months old, and in the warrior world, 6 months is when a cat is eligible to become an apprentice. Given that she was raised without any apparent issues by a tom (plus was small enough to be considered a meal for another cat), I will guess that she was around 4 months old at the time. Any earlier than that and I'd definitely recommend aging her. If she's around that age, though, then I can see this backstory working.
Also, if the city was bombed, how are cats alive? Given that the surrounding area was bombed as well, and the Clan (who was a distance form the city) was nearly entirely destroyed, I can't really see how there would be anyone alive to mentor her afterwards.
Her personality is just fine, but those questions ought to be answered.
Character Suggestions: Address those two things up there.

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Cancelled, eh? I had a quick look at the "Let's Read" though, and I must say I agree with a lot of it hehe

Oh man, I didn't even notice that second problem ;A; I'll have to discuss that with my co-author, we'll figure something out and get back to you I think c:
As for the first thing, she is about 4 moons old when she runs off, probably even closer to 5.

[Arcaii]

Yeah, that is a bit of a...well, not a plot hole, but a certain convenience, I guess?

GL on the story!

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Plot holes ftw hehe

Can we just officially rename Longtail Wrongname? Can that be a thing?

[Arcaii]

I'm assuming that this was meant for the let's read, but yes. Yes, we can.

[deku baba]

Name: DuskFoot
Description: Small, wiry molly. Has the fur colour of Brown Tabby on the catcolours, but with dark grey paws as well.
Important Notes: From Windclan, a fast runner.

[Arcaii]

Name: DuskFoot
Description: Small, wiry molly. Has the fur colour of Brown Tabby on the catcolours, but with dark grey paws as well.
Important Notes: From Windclan, a fast runner.

Name Type: Traditional
Name Reasoning: If she's just a brown tabby of medium coloring, I can't recommend Dusk-, since it's explicitly for a dark colored cat (and not just their feet). Her suffix is just fine.
Alternate Name: Dustfoot/Volefoot. Both prefixes describe her coat color, and her suffix stays as it is.
Notes: I should note here that a brown cat can't really have grey feet. You could make 'em white, though!