Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer [CLOSED]

[AnimalJamVIN]

I hope this isn't too rude to say but Keriae, a few prefixes other than Morning- that describes a red and white cat can be Bright-, Mottle-, Nerite- and Patch-. Hope this doesn't bother you!

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Image/Description:
Name: IvyWing
Gender: female
Clan: Riverclan
Rank: Deputy
Personality/Skills: IvyWing isn't afraid to stand up for whats right. She will fight for justice if needed. IvyWing really likes to help as well.
Important Notes:

[Arcaii]

Goodness gracious, I'm gone for a day...

Ah well, I've had worse. To work for me!

[Arcaii]

Image/Description: Red and white tom with green eyes. Click!
Name: Morningclaw
Gender: Male
Clan: FanClan
Rank: Warrior
Personality/Skills: Morningclaw, as his suffix suggests, is exceptionally skilled in combat. Levelheaded, patient and considerate, Morningclaw is known to get on well with just about everyone and can often be spotted helping out others, whether it be cleaning out dens when he is not busy or comforting someone should they be worrying about something. With a professional outlook on training, this tom is disciplined and will do his best to make an apprentice under his charge the best warrior they can be.
Important Notes: I swear I come to you every time I have a new character I like second opinions
I'm not too sure on his prefix (and to be honest I think a part of me chose it just to get back at people who think Morning- is a feminine prefix) but red and white cats are so difficult to name!

Unfortunately, his picture isn't coming up. I will be working off the assumption that he's a mostly red cat with large white markings. If he isn't...well, you heard what AnimalJam said.

Name Type: Traditional
Name Reasoning: I don't really have much to say here! His name fits him perfectly.
Alternate Name: None!

Character Assessment: This guy's pretty stellar to have in a Clan. I can see him eventually becoming deputy, if he can handle the duress. Again, not too much to add. He's good to go.
Character Suggestions: None!

[Keriae]

Really? Strange.
Does this work? There's a lot more red on his other side.
Thank you! <3

[Arcaii]

This sounds great that you went into great detail for some characters reviews and those first few posts describing the do's and don'ts of naming or making personalities and such!
This is a pretty old character that I know is really kind of a Mary-Sue, but I wanna see how bad they really were. The second is newer, and really just an edited character my friend came up with a long time ago.

Name: Silvermoon (As a leader is Silverstar)
Gender: Female
Clan and Rank: Wind Clan leader
Image Description: Grey and white skinny she cat, with slightly long fur and white chest, belly, and paws. Deep blue eyes, and pink nose.
Notes: Although a leader, she often backs away from battles and is seen by the other clans as a bit of a coward.

Name: Vinetail
Gender: Male
Clan and Rank: River Clan Medicine cat (Actually he is from a fan-clan, but it probably matches up to river clan pretty well)
Image Description: A fully dark brown tom, with just the very end of his ears white tipped. Skinny cat, with a very long tail and sleek fur. Olive-green eyes, black nose.
Notes: He is really a nice cat, but his temper with those who don't listen is really quite short. Although he planned on being a warrior in his apprentice training, he participated in a battle and realized he liked the idea of helping cats more than fighting. He isn't the best at finding herbs, but he is great at calming stressed cats out.

Hello, welcome, and thank you! We're all about improving characters here, so don't even fret.

Silvermoon
Name Type: Lyrical
Name Reasoning: I'm sure you've seen it on the front page, but Moon-/-moon (heh) are never recommended to be part of the average cat's name. The moon is a very sacred object to the cats, so naming some warrior after it both puts that cat on a pedestal they don't belong on, and brings the moon down to a mortal level, which would be considered blasphemous at best.
Alternate Name: Silverfur/Silverpelt or Knotfur/Heronpelt (suffixes interchangeable). Her description is a little unclear, but if she's a majorly grey cat with large white markings, keep her prefix. If she's patched, on the other hand, go with Knot- or Heron- (both of them are birds, before you ask).

Character Assessment: There isn't exactly a lot for me to judge, but I'm not sure what you're talking about. I don't see any Mary Sue traits. Well...except for the blue eye thing (which generally only shows up on very pale or white cats), but that's just a realism thing.
Correct me if I'm making too big of an assumption here, but my guess is that you're still in the (for lack of a better word) "teen" stage of character creation, which is almost always where the fear of creating a Mary Sue pops up (it did for me, anyway). With the massive amounts of contradictory definitions and the ever present threat of people boring down on you for making a character they don't like, I don't blame you.
My personal definition of a Mary Sue (or the gender-neutral OP) is a character who is lifted from any actual consequences, genuine risks, or critique in a story due to the creator's bias - essentially, someone who gets away with everything. Odd definition, I know, but if you take a look at a character like Batman (who is clearly crazy powerful and smart and charming, thus filling a lot of the classic 'Mary Sue' traits, but is constantly in danger from genuine psychopaths and under harsh critique by the actual law enforcement) vs Bella from Twilight (who isn't actually superpowered until the end, but gets everything handed to her on a silver platter and never once has to struggle for a single thing she wants, and gets to just do whatever she wants with no consequences), you can hopefully see why I use it.
Of course, people are always going to be harsher on female characters than male characters, which is why it's called a Mary Sue by default, but don' let that hold you back. I myself have an incredibly extensive female cast, and it's not actually difficult to create and develop them - characters are born of the same clay, after all.
Character Suggestions: Develop some more of this cat - you have an interesting idea going on with her pacifism actually causing her to get a bad reputation (consequences and critique!). Why does she not want to fight? Does she experience a lot of stress under her role, and the prospect of a battle is enough to fry her brain? Was she witness to some pretty terrible battles, and thus doesn't want to inflict that horror and fear on other cats? Is she peaceful because of her personality or because of her experiences? What other character traits does she have?
As for that Mary Sue biz, do whatever you want! Just remember to once in a while, take a step back, look at your characters in the most objective light you can, and ask, "Am I letting them do whatever they want? Have they been forced to develop as a person due to their experiences, or are they staying static and just running amok?" Remember that a Mary Sue is a boring character, above all else - Superman can still be marvelously complex, even with his god-powers.



Vinetail
Name Type: Canonical
Name Reasoning: There actually is a name that would be quite similar to his prefix, and fit in with traditionalism (us cursed traditionalists, with our over specifications and ~rules~). His suffix is generally used to refer to a cat who's a skilled and agile climber, not someone who has a long tail (since that's not really worth mentioning unless he uses it to help his Clan by going up into the trees to get food or scout out trouble).
Alternate Name: Ivycloud/Dippercloud. Both prefixes describe a dark colored cat (Dipper- specifically referring to a dark cat with a white chest marking - more on that later), and -cloud will also be explained below.

Character Assessment: There's only one real issue I have, and that's his generally calm demeanor combined with his sudden shortness with cats who don't listen. I mean, granted, I become unreal levels of angry when dealing with stupid people, but I think it would fit him better to keep a level head no matter what.
Oh, that, and I suggest moving the white on his ears to a small marking on the chest. White on ears is a thing I haven't seen replicated in reality, so I can't recommend it.
Character Suggestions: Make him calm in any situation (which is where -cloud would come in, as it defines a cat who's extremely calm and clear-headed, to the point of it being a near impossibility to upset them), and change that marking.

[Arcaii]

Hi Arcaii! Thanks for reviewing the last trio. I think I'll have Shrike manipulate Brunet a little. Anyway, I've come with some less-villainous characters today.


Name: Eveningstorm. Pretty awesome, huh?
Gender: Molly.
Clan: Wondering where to put her.
Rank: Warrior.
Personality/Skills: Eveningstorm; The cat that can't sit still. She has heaps of energy and gets bored easily. Not a very safe combination. She is constantly shifting and trying to get up to mischief. Whatever it takes, she will stay amused. Evening loves competition and while she doesn't mind loosing, it annoys her when the fun ends. As you can see is a really lively whirlwind. However, she is super-sensitive to weather changes and may grow dull or generally sleepy and tired very suddenly.
Important Notes: Next up is her sister, who is fleshed out better.


The gray one.
Name: Breamtail.
Gender: Molly.
Clan: Wondering where to put her.
Rank: Warrior.
Personality/Skills: Breamtail's main quest is to inspire and encourage everyone. She knows about slow beginnings a little too well. Bream quickly catches on new things, and practices new techniques, she is a diligent and concentrated worker for the greater part. When she grows familiar with the profession she's been learning about, Bream can become overconfident and overestimate her skills. She's had some accidents she wishes her sister hadn't seen. She loves trying new things and enjoys competition, tough she loathes loosing and can be touchy about it. Bream has an excellent balance tough, she's very proud of her climbing skills. Unusually enough, she waits for ice each year because she adores ice-skating. Bream is usually rather patient, except when she's dying to get better at something, and is a social cat, interested in the other Clans' lore and tactics. Not that anyone would tell her.
Important Notes: Nope!

Right, all for now, might come back with Dawnwhisker's family and/or a -cloud villain.

Ooooh, a -cloud villain? Now you've piqued my interest. (Always bringing me the fun stuff, you are.)

Unfortunately, the pictures are just refusing to work for me. I'd like to review them fully, but I'm kinda stuck here with that. If you could find some alternate pictures or just write a quick description, that'd be wonderful.

[Arcaii]

Image/Description:
Name: IvyWing
Gender: female
Clan: Riverclan
Rank: Deputy
Personality/Skills: IvyWing isn't afraid to stand up for whats right. She will fight for justice if needed. IvyWing really likes to help as well.
Important Notes:

Oh, the face-only pictures...how hard my life you doth make.

Name Type: Canonical
Name Reasoning: Ivy- is better suited on a much darker cat than this, and I really have no idea what -wing could refer to. That's covered on the front page, whatever the case may be.
Alternate Name: Nettleheart/Thistleheart. Both prefixes describe a grey cat, and -heart will be further explained below.

Character Assessment: I mean, honestly, I don't think there's much I can say here. From what I can gather, she puts a lot into her Clan and its way of life (given that she helps out a lot and has a fierce sense of justice), but that's about it.
Character Suggestions: Give her some more traits (such as impatience, or bossiness, or daring, etc), and perhaps have her sense of justice and morality be a huge factor in her life. A -heart cat is one who lives so by their morals that they'll do anything to uphold them, and I think she'd be great for that.

[Arcaii]

Really? Strange.
Does this work? There's a lot more red on his other side.
Thank you! <3

That, I would consider too patched to go for Morning-. You could try something like this or this - there's enough white on there to keep his original description, but enough red to keep his prefix.

[mistywater]

Okay, Evningstorm is solid dark grey, with short plush fur [I'm thinking part British Shorthair, their father could as well be a housecat] and Breamtail is a slightly silverish classic grey tabby.