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Hollyfrost was never intended to be a warrior, and it is read just from his build that Starclan had different plans for him than fighting for his clan with tooth and claw. He's slender, short, with a lithe form that better matches a well cared for queen than that of a roughened warrior that bears scars or just an air around them that suggest they're tougher than stone. His fur is long and thick, which takes a long time to groom but considering there aren't medical situations that immediately require his attention
all the time, he does manage to spend good parts of certain days caring for himself and his abnormally long tail.
Name: Hollyfrost
Gender: Tom
Clan: Shadowclan
Rank: Medicine cat
Personality/Skills: At first, second, and third glance, Hollyfrost comes off as rather aloof and snobbish with way too much of a passion for his appearance to be on point. He looks down on everyone, even the leader - but there is more of an air of respect - and he makes sure that the apprentices are aware of his ranking above them. To put it bluntly, Hollyfrost is a brat that has been blessed and cursed with an incredibly sensitive nose. He can smell herbs, prey, and intruders before they get anywhere close to camp (much like Dovewing, but he doesn't get the whole sense package) and he'll usually make a snide comment to any nearby warrior before he slinks off to go take inventory of his herbs. He's also got rather large paws and is a renowned hunter during the time that there is plenty of prey, but during the winter he is rather busy worrying over herbs, kits, and the clan members. He may act like a snob on the outside, but the inside hides a young tom that has an incredibly soft spot for kits, wants to treat the apprentices tough so that they'll one day be stronger than him - because what's better motivation than to prove someone was wrong?- and he does his best to make sure everyone is at least healthy.
Important Notes: Hollyfrost comes from a long line of weather - specifically that of winter - related names, no matter what the appearance, as in his father's side of the family it was custom for the male of a pairing to be cold and a little more detached from the rest of the clan. Reasons for this detachment have long since been muddied and made unclear, nor are they fully followed, just the names seem to have stuck over the moons.
Hello there!
HollyfrostName Suggestion: Patchnose or Brightnose.
Name Reasoning: Holly- is only for white- or dark ginger-furred cats (representing the flower or berry, respectively). -frost is not a traditional suffix, and it doesn't really imply anything useful, like a skill or personaity trait (and, if anything, it seems to imply a cold attitude at first glance, and even then the meaning itself is rather shaky).
The cat appears to be a calico tom; this is an unlikely and pretty dangerous combination, realistically. The only calico or tortie toms that exist exhibit Kleinfelter's Syndrome, where a cat has the genes XXY - torties and calicoes are created when different pelt colors are inherited on either X gene (and Y does not hold the pelt gene) - therefore, I have to suggest that you either make this cat designated female at birth (so as to avoid the nasty health complications - he can easily be transgender) or change his pelt color.
As it stands, he has a skill worth noting - he has a nose for tracking, even if it's not explicitly said, and that usually warrants the -nose suffix; however, as you noted him to be equally as skilled with hunting, it's a bit hard to find out which is more prominent - in this, I'd like to suggest that his hunting skill is lessened enough that his tracking isn't outshined. Calicoes are pretty hard to name, so Patch- and Bright- act as a catch-all for bicolor cats without implying a specific color. (This is assuming the lightish tan is actually a white - if this cat is to be more realistic, this should be the case.)
Character Rating: 8/10
Character Reasoning: What's said before applies here - calico toms are a no-go realistically and you'd be better off either changing gender, changing
designated gender (at birth), or changing pelt. His skill in tracking shouldn't really be compared to a canon cat; it's best to let the cat shine through without having to compare to a canon cat in terms of skill.
In addition, names shouldn't follow a 'theme' that doesn't fit them; if the cat isn't a white cat, you can't name it Frost-, and if the cat isn't a ginger cat, you can't name it Fox-, for example, and naming a cat either just because that's "how it's been" doesn't really make sense in a traditional sense!
