Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer [CLOSED]

[elfish]

Image/Description: bleep bloop.
Name: Starlingface
Gender: Female
Clan: FanClan
Rank: Warrior
Personality/Skills: Starlingface, named for her pretty appearance, has proven herself to be a warrior of average fighting and hunting skills. Her personality, however, betrays her beauty. She is characterized as being flirtatious, vain, arrogant, and patronizing. Starlingface truly believes that she is the best out there, and her tone nearly always seeps of superiority. She's a very superficial cat who judges things at first glance. She doesn't like to get her paws dirty and often cowers from combat, fearful of scars. However, that is not to say she is all negative. She is self confident, witty, quick to act, and offers blunt (and rude) advice to those who will listen.
Important Notes: None to note. Thank you c:

Oh, goodness, that is a cute picture.

Name Rating: 10/10
Name Type: Traditional
Name Reasoning: Her name fits her perfectly! I don't have too much to say here.
Alternative Name: None!

Character Rating: 10/10
Character Reasoning: A pleasant cat to have in the Clan? Probably not, no. But, honestly, I will give her a bit of a pass on that since she's a -face cat, someone characterized by their beauty, so I can see her wanting to preserve that and being the way she is. Hopefully she's trying to improve.

Thanks c: I've always wanted to play a beautiful but vain cat! The only problem is that I'm having trouble trying to find a reason for the Clan to keep her. Starlingface doesn't like to fight, preferring to preserve the beauty she was named for. She's not too good of a hunter, though adequate enough. And not to mention her intolerable personality, to boot.

[Arcaii]

So I've been developing a couple of characters for the idea I mentioned a couple pages back, and there's one I'm a bit iffy about using since I feel his personality isn't too great. Mind rating him real quick? (Note: I am terrible at describing personality, so hopefully it's not too messy)

Name:
Bitternmint/Wrenmint/Hawkmint

Gender:
Tom

Clan:
Moonclan

Rank:
Shaman (Like a medicine cat, but constantly in touch with all spirits, not just the clan's ancestors)

Personality/Skills:

*Observant: When a cat feels a sudden chill run up their spine, like something is watching them? It's probably the Shaman. The clan finds it odd, and a bit unnerving. But he does have a point for it. Which leads to...

*Intelligent: And I don't mean just about his work. He can read a cat's basic body language like he reads signs from Skyclan. There is no lying to this cat, or at least lying he doesn't know about. And if he wanted to, he could tell you the habits of every cat in his clan.

*Blunt: This cat is very to the point, no sugar coating anything.

*Cold: He's not exactly the friendly type. He does his job as learned, and that's all he has to do with a cat. He's basically a walking icebox of herbs and that's all most cats can see him as. Which often leads to cats disrespecting him.

*Stubborn: He has a moral code, a looser one then other clan cats, but he still does. Even if it conflicts with the Warrior's Code, he will still stand for what he believes in.

*Bitter: He never thought the clan life was for him. He debated leaving the clan after he became a shaman fledgling, but he was told by the spirits that he would be the decider of life and death for cats to come. So he stayed. When he felt like he did what every other shaman did, he felt like he was lied to. But with his guide dead and no cat to take his place, he knew that leaving the clan at the paws of their new leader would be murder, he remained.

Important Notes:
Named after a bird as is tradition for shaman. The suffix -mint given after he treated his clan and the other clans around him of greencough, an outbreak severe enough to kill two full-named shamans and a leader.

Thanks for the time! (And sorry again for the messyness, I typed this up quickly)

Don't worry about the messiness! I have to say, that cat has an interesting coat. Not quite charcoal, not quite classic.

Since he has multiple possible names, I'll just offer some suggestions!

Name Suggestion: Grouseleaf/Swiftleaf.
Name Reasoning: This took me a bit, but I think these two prefixes would be your best option. Both are named after birds (and, yes, there is a bird called a swift, and no, you can't use Swift- with -step), and both describe a brown or dark brown tabby. -leaf will be explained more in detail below, as will his original suffix, -mint. The three prefixes you decided on fit better on a differently striped tabby (Bittern-), are the wrong color (Wren-), or just plain don't work in the Warriors setting (Hawk-).
As a side note, thank you for reminding me to put Hawk- up on the front page. For some reason I didn't have it on there.

Character Rating: 10/10
Character Reasoning: Honestly, he's pretty solid. I do have one suggestion, and that is to make him highly skilled at being a shaman, at least in herbs.
-leaf is used solely for medicine cats (or any healers) that are prodigious in their abilities. They come up with new and more efficient methods of healing others, have had a clear skill since they were apprentices, and often dedicate themselves wholly to their craft. They're known for working themselves to the bone, saving lives where an older cat might have failed. They tend to be incredibly intelligent and have a great memory.
This cat reads off like a perfect -leaf cat (with the delicious irony of being completely bitter about his position). Even if he used one particular plant to save his Clan, he saved several Clans where other shamans failed! That takes a lot of skill. Curing an entire Clan, let alone more than one, isn't just using the right herbs, it's quarantining the deathly ill and keeping those who weren't affected healthy by preventing the further spread, keeping kittens away from sick mothers, and among all that, orchestrating this entire thing yourself.
The boy is incredibly talented, without a doubt, and he does well under pressure (obviously). I think he would be a perfect -leaf cat.

[Arcaii]

(I'm so tired I can't do a proper form)

Name: Flamekit
Gender: Tom
Age: Five moons old
Rank: Kit
Personality: Flamekit is a brave kit. He is courageous whenever something goes wrong, and and he has a habit of bullying others when he doesn't mean it.
Looks: Orange tabby with green mossey eyes and white paw tips.
Desired rank: Leader!
Family: Mother: Lizardstripe(Died as a warrior) Father: Hailstorm(Died as a warrior) Sister(s): Lilystem(Died as a medicine cat) Brother(s): Brokenshadow(Loyal warrior of Fierceclan)
Crush: Fleetfoot(Warrior of Mintclan)
Mate: None
Kts: None
Skills: Climbing, Fightning and hunting.
Date of birth(something I like to do): July 4th, 2014 on a summer Thrusday, 2:18PM Central.

(Ok, maybe I'll do my original form)




The basics

Name: Smokekit
Gender: She-kit
Age: Four moons old
Personality: Shy, smart, nice, kind, sweet.
History: Not that much.
Rank: Kit
Desired rank: Kit

Looks

Main color: Smokey grey
Eye color: Misty shades of blue.
Markings: Black stripes-original tabby.
Other: Scar on head from Flamekit.

Relationships

Family: Mother: Swiftfoot(Died as a warrior) Father: Hawkshadow(Deputy of Mintclan) Siblings: Lionkit(Died as a kit)
Friends: Shadowkit(Not my charrie), Cheetahspots, Echopaw(not my charrie), and Willowpaw(also not my charrie)
Crush: Flamekit
Mate: None
Kits: Ain't nobody got time for dat :3

Flamekit
Name Suggestion: Firefang/Morningfang.
Name Reasoning: Flame- is discussed on the front page, so all I'll say is that Fire- is a much better name and that Morning- also serves as a good name for a ginger cat. -fang is recommended because of his skills in fighting and hunting, which will be further discussed below.

Character Rating: 6/10
Character Reasoning: Honestly, I don't know what to say. There's not a whole lot to either of these cats, so I can't properly critique their personalities, other than suggest that you give them more fleshed out traits.
I will, of course, offer some ideas. This is a review and help center, after all.
What we have so far is a bold, somewhat careless kit. We can definitely work with that as he becomes a warrior. Perhaps he's just generally overconfident due to his...obtuse observation skills, and doesn't really recognize that others might be more sensitive. Maybe his equal skill in fighting and hunting makes him feel much cooler than he actually is. He might be extremely lax around outsiders, just because he's so confident in himself, and maybe he doesn't watch his tongue because, honestly, what can they do to him? He could also have a hard time recognizing criticism, or just doesn't mind it at all, even if it's perfectly solid. Despite this, he's a pretty fun cat to hang out with, and the kits and younger apprentices adore him for his skills and general coolness (of course, the more cynical older apprentices would recognize an idiot when they met one, but that's neither here nor there). When he genuinely upsets someone and actually realizes it, his attempts to make them feel better and apologize can be a little insensitive, but if he genuinely cares about the person (and, being as casual and friendly as he is, he usually does), they'll see that he's really trying his best to fix a problem that he has no idea how to deal with. This can lead to a scolding, cold dismissal, or a weary "it's fine".


Smokekit
Name Suggestion: Smokestripe.
Name Reasoning: As she has no nameable traits, she could be named for her striking markings.

Character Rating: 4/10
Character Reasoning: The reason she has a lower rating than Flamekit is because her personality is a very classic, overused description for a female character when one doesn't put much effort into them, and it lacks any flavor to it (which I think I will put up on the front page). I really recommend using something else, but in the context of her friendship with Flamekit, perhaps we can do something with what you've got.
Her biggest flaw would be her kindness. Mixed with her being rather quiet and shy, this ends up with her being a total doormat, always too nervous to speak up and critique someone or just plain stand up for herself. When she was injured by her friend, all she did was tuck her tail and walk to the medicine den, refusing to say where she got the injury for fear of getting him in trouble. Some cats have tried to make her more confident, but she always slips back into her semi-codependent mindset, always too weak-willed to say no. Unfortunately, this leads to her having a very deep-seated self-hatred, and most of the time she's utterly miserable in the knowledge that she just doesn't have the strength to fight back and the despair that she never will. If the right cat with plenty of patience, empathy, and support could help her, perhaps she could get it together. She certainly won't be admitting her feelings towards her friend any time soon (which are slightly compounded by her admiration of his total confidence).

[the bad wolf]

So I've been developing a couple of characters for the idea I mentioned a couple pages back, and there's one I'm a bit iffy about using since I feel his personality isn't too great. Mind rating him real quick? (Note: I am terrible at describing personality, so hopefully it's not too messy)

Name:
Bitternmint/Wrenmint/Hawkmint

Gender:
Tom

Clan:
Moonclan

Rank:
Shaman (Like a medicine cat, but constantly in touch with all spirits, not just the clan's ancestors)

Personality/Skills:

*Observant: When a cat feels a sudden chill run up their spine, like something is watching them? It's probably the Shaman. The clan finds it odd, and a bit unnerving. But he does have a point for it. Which leads to...

*Intelligent: And I don't mean just about his work. He can read a cat's basic body language like he reads signs from Skyclan. There is no lying to this cat, or at least lying he doesn't know about. And if he wanted to, he could tell you the habits of every cat in his clan.

*Blunt: This cat is very to the point, no sugar coating anything.

*Cold: He's not exactly the friendly type. He does his job as learned, and that's all he has to do with a cat. He's basically a walking icebox of herbs and that's all most cats can see him as. Which often leads to cats disrespecting him.

*Stubborn: He has a moral code, a looser one then other clan cats, but he still does. Even if it conflicts with the Warrior's Code, he will still stand for what he believes in.

*Bitter: He never thought the clan life was for him. He debated leaving the clan after he became a shaman fledgling, but he was told by the spirits that he would be the decider of life and death for cats to come. So he stayed. When he felt like he did what every other shaman did, he felt like he was lied to. But with his guide dead and no cat to take his place, he knew that leaving the clan at the paws of their new leader would be murder, he remained.

Important Notes:
Named after a bird as is tradition for shaman. The suffix -mint given after he treated his clan and the other clans around him of greencough, an outbreak severe enough to kill two full-named shamans and a leader.

Thanks for the time! (And sorry again for the messyness, I typed this up quickly)

Don't worry about the messiness! I have to say, that cat has an interesting coat. Not quite charcoal, not quite classic.

Since he has multiple possible names, I'll just offer some suggestions!

Name Suggestion: Grouseleaf/Swiftleaf.
Name Reasoning: This took me a bit, but I think these two prefixes would be your best option. Both are named after birds (and, yes, there is a bird called a swift, and no, you can't use Swift- with -step), and both describe a brown or dark brown tabby. -leaf will be explained more in detail below, as will his original suffix, -mint. The three prefixes you decided on fit better on a differently striped tabby (Bittern-), are the wrong color (Wren-), or just plain don't work in the Warriors setting (Hawk-).
As a side note, thank you for reminding me to put Hawk- up on the front page. For some reason I didn't have it on there.

Character Rating: 10/10
Character Reasoning: Honestly, he's pretty solid. I do have one suggestion, and that is to make him highly skilled at being a shaman, at least in herbs.
-leaf is used solely for medicine cats (or any healers) that are prodigious in their abilities. They come up with new and more efficient methods of healing others, have had a clear skill since they were apprentices, and often dedicate themselves wholly to their craft. They're known for working themselves to the bone, saving lives where an older cat might have failed. They tend to be incredibly intelligent and have a great memory.
This cat reads off like a perfect -leaf cat (with the delicious irony of being completely bitter about his position). Even if he used one particular plant to save his Clan, he saved several Clans where other shamans failed! That takes a lot of skill. Curing an entire Clan, let alone more than one, isn't just using the right herbs, it's quarantining the deathly ill and keeping those who weren't affected healthy by preventing the further spread, keeping kittens away from sick mothers, and among all that, orchestrating this entire thing yourself.
The boy is incredibly talented, without a doubt, and he does well under pressure (obviously). I think he would be a perfect -leaf cat.

To be completely honest, I threw Hawk- on there last minute because I was not having an easy time coming up with a name I felt connected with the character, and I just thought, "Hm, wasn't Hawkfrost a dark tabby like this? Maybe it works?" Though trusting the Erins with realistic names is not exactly a great idea. (Runningnose may have a few good jokes out of his name, but really? "We shall name you after your infinity cold sucks to be you")

I can't believe how well -leaf works for him! Especially since the other two clans have a great respect for him after his treatments during the outbreak, it'd make perfect sense for him to be a -leaf. I think I'll go with Swiftleaf, just because I quite like the flow of it.

Thanks for the help! I think I have a cat in mind for his fledgling, so I might be back for her, but I need to flesh her out a bit more before I do. c:

[Arcaii]

Name:
Creekpaw/ soon to be Creeklight

Gender:
Shecat

Clan:
CrystalClan

Rank:
Apprentice

Personality/Skills:

*Shy: Alright, this cat is EXTREMELY shy. SHe won't come up to anybody, and shies away from everything.

*Curious: As shy as she is, Creekpaw is curious. She wants to know about her ancestors.

*Protective: In battle, Creekpaw is usually in the back, but she will do ANYTHING to protect her family.

*Respectful: Creekpaw respects every cat she meets, even if it means talking to them.

*Friendly: Once you get to her, which can take WEEKS, she is very happy and outgoing. She loves trying to make friends, and someday a mate.

Important Notes:
None

Name Rating: 6/10
Name Type: Lyrical
Name Reasoning: Man, I am just adding so much stuff up on the front page tonight.
Water-based prefixes (with the sole exception of Rain-) are never recommended, simply because water doesn't have a color. We may associate it with a color, but in the Warriors universe, there's no reason they would look at a brook and go "brown!" or "yellow!" or "red!" (I certainly hope not with those last two). To them, a body of water is home to fish, plants and rocks that could definitely affect the color of the water. At the very most, it would suggest the color of the rapids, but that's not enough to name a cat for.
I can't see why she'd be named -light, nor do I think that would be a good suffix, but the prefix is the biggest sinner here, so let's just get to the suggestions.
Alternative Name: Poppypelt/Rowanfur (suffixes interchangeable). Both prefixes are for a ginger cat, and as she has no nameable skills or traits, she receives the defaults.

Character Rating: 8/10
Character Reasoning: I really...I think it's just that I've grown to dislike shyness as a predominant trait? But I just can't get behind it now. It's just...cliche isn't the right word, but it's close. Banal, perhaps.
Honestly, if you were to strike her shyness away, I'd like her a lot more. A curious cat who's protective of her family and respectful of her fellow cat and traditions sounds great. She could even be pretty withdrawn and I'd support it. But the shyness just seems jarring, compared with everything else.

[Arcaii]

I can't for my life find the jokes. I'm more into sarcasm and random humor, for example, my latest 'joke' was something like that:
My friend: 'Sorry I'm late!'
Me: 'So you finally caught that moose?'
My friend: 'Wha-, oh! Ha ha! [/size]

Ah well, I've got the lil' bundles pretty much ready!

Description: Average-sized but short kitten with stubby legs and a short tail, shortish white fur with minor patches of gray and yellow eyes.
Name: Garlickit/Later Garlicnose
Gender: Tom
Clan: TC
Rank: Kit
Personality/Skills: He's the bold boisterous mischief-maker and sneaky rascal of the litter. He's show-offish, likes attention and adores getting up to no good. The kit is mistrustful, often saying how he'll rip the other Clan cats apart if they put as much as a whisker over his border. He underestimates most victims, aka cat's he's about to prank. Garlickit is very defensive and protective of his 'terrain' and can be a fierce little warrior if you don't mind your step. If you're one of his 'allies' get ready for loads of chatting, plotting and entertainment.
Catchphrase: 'You're trying to pick a fight, huh? No? Then what are you doing in my nursery?'
Important Notes: Nope!

Description: Smallish speckled brown molly with hazel eyes.
Name: Brindlekit/Brindlecloud.
Gender: Molly. Nearly wrote 'mooly' there.
Clan: TC.
Rank: Kit.
Personality/Skills: Brindlekit's got her head in the clouds. She's daydreaming all the time, which often causes her to trip or stumble. She is unobservant and clumsy, to top that up, but very enthusiastic and keen, trying to help all the time. Unfortunately, she forgets what she's supposed to do mid-task. Cats have a soft spot for the kitten, maybe because of her cute, large eyes are are often gazing at far-off things no one else can see. It's difficult to speak to her because of her daydreams. She's very easygoing and even tough hard to communicate with, she has many friends.
Important Notes: Nope!

Still working on their brother - the last littermate.

Oh, goodness, these two are charming.

Garlicnose
Name Rating: 8/10
Name Type: Traditional
Name Reasoning: I don't see any observational skills or tracking abilities for him, but I think if you were to add that in (maybe he's so protective he constantly combs over the territory for the slightest funny smell) it would work just fine.
Alternative Name: Garlicpelt/Garlicfur. He doesn't have a noted skill, though if you do take my suggestion, you can keep -nose.

Character Rating: 10/10
Character Reasoning: Honestly, I love him. Being that obsessive as an adult may earn him some ire, but as a kitten it's adorable. I can see him being very popular with his own Clanmates (though the other Clans might know him as the one who freaks out whenever a single pawmark is just a tail-length away from the border - apprentices might deliberately mess with the border, and then hide and wait for his screeching [you are now imagining that he sounds like Lemongrab]).


Brindlecloud
Name Rating: 10/10
Name Type: Traditional
Name Reasoning: Her name, on the other hand, fits like a glove! I've got nothing else to say here.
Alternative Name: None!

Character Rating: 10/10
Character Reasoning: The idea of an utterly paranoid and stressed cat being in the same litter as a star-gazing, lax cat is amusing to an unreal degree. I assume that she's given up on telling him to relax, but she's now able to automatically block out his irate rants and nap while he's sitting there yelling at someone.

[Arcaii]

Please bear in mind that I am very indecisive, and most of these things are just an outline of a very in-depth character that will be worked out shortly. I'm just trying to see if the base-line would work out.

Image/Description: A tortoisehell she-cat with bright green eyes (I'm working on her image).
Name: Well, it was going to be Swiftspirit, but after reading everything you have to say I realise this doesn't really describe her. It does in the sense that she is a fast cat, who is very quick thinking and extremely astute, but I'd like at least the prefix to focus on her appearance. I was thinking the suffix could be foot or tail, seen as I' like her to be quick on her feet but also a good balancer. As she is tortoisehell, would these prefixes work: Leaf-, Bracken-, Heather-, Oak-, maybe? Maple would be good but I'm pretty sure that's for reddish cats? I'm really bad at this, but that's why I'm asking your opinion.
Gender: She-cat.
Clan: I'm pretty sure of Windclan, but then again a good climber belongs in Thunderclan right? Ahh, I think I'll stick with Windlcan.
Rank: Deputy
Personality/Skills: -- is very quick witted, and good at outsmarting her opponents. She is long legged and fairly lithe, so not able to over power a heavier cat with brute-strength alone, but her intelligence helps She has thought up a lot of new battle moves especially for smaller cats. She can be stubborn at times, never wanting to believe that she is wrong- eventually, however, if another cat brings proof as to what they are arguing, she will half-heartedly admit she was wrong. She is very blunt and to the point with warriors and the like, but she has a soft-spot for kits and elders.
Important Notes: She is extremely fast and agile, both able to sprint and run long distance.

Don't even worry about it, we got this. I appreciate you taking all my gabber into consideration, by the way. Very wonderful.

Name Suggestion: Cherryfoot/Newtfoot.
Name Reasoning: Both prefixes describe an average tortoiseshell - if she has a predominance of one color, or is dilute, then let me know and I can offer a different name. And, as she is a fast cat, she gets -foot.

Character Rating: 10/10
Character Reasoning: I mean, honestly, there isn't too much to say! She's a pretty solid cat. I like the idea of someone having a quick wit, but not wanting to admit that they're wrong - that must get her in trouble sometimes.

[Arcaii]

Thanks c: I've always wanted to play a beautiful but vain cat! The only problem is that I'm having trouble trying to find a reason for the Clan to keep her. Starlingface doesn't like to fight, preferring to preserve the beauty she was named for. She's not too good of a hunter, though adequate enough. And not to mention her intolerable personality, to boot.

Perhaps that could be her character arc! She realizes that her Clan is likely to get rid of her if she doesn't shape up, and after a while of reflecting, she slowly begins to get over herself and become a more pleasant cat. The bluntness and dislike of dirt may never go away, but she does manage to swallow her pride and learn to be less judgmental (the first cat she actually apologized to for misjudging them was so startled that they thought she had contracted a deadly illness).

[Arcaii]

To be completely honest, I threw Hawk- on there last minute because I was not having an easy time coming up with a name I felt connected with the character, and I just thought, "Hm, wasn't Hawkfrost a dark tabby like this? Maybe it works?" Though trusting the Erins with realistic names is not exactly a great idea. (Runningnose may have a few good jokes out of his name, but really? "We shall name you after your infinity cold sucks to be you")

I can't believe how well -leaf works for him! Especially since the other two clans have a great respect for him after his treatments during the outbreak, it'd make perfect sense for him to be a -leaf. I think I'll go with Swiftleaf, just because I quite like the flow of it.

Thanks for the help! I think I have a cat in mind for his fledgling, so I might be back for her, but I need to flesh her out a bit more before I do. c:

The first rule of naming your cats is "do not listen to the Hunters". They barely know how cat genes work, let alone names.

I'm very glad that review helped you! Swiftleaf does have a pretty neat flow to it. I have to wonder how his bitterness over his life contrasts with the high regard that other shamans have for him.

[the bad wolf]

To be completely honest, I threw Hawk- on there last minute because I was not having an easy time coming up with a name I felt connected with the character, and I just thought, "Hm, wasn't Hawkfrost a dark tabby like this? Maybe it works?" Though trusting the Erins with realistic names is not exactly a great idea. (Runningnose may have a few good jokes out of his name, but really? "We shall name you after your infinity cold sucks to be you")

I can't believe how well -leaf works for him! Especially since the other two clans have a great respect for him after his treatments during the outbreak, it'd make perfect sense for him to be a -leaf. I think I'll go with Swiftleaf, just because I quite like the flow of it.

Thanks for the help! I think I have a cat in mind for his fledgling, so I might be back for her, but I need to flesh her out a bit more before I do. c:

The first rule of naming your cats is "do not listen to the Hunters". They barely know how cat genes work, let alone names.

I'm very glad that review helped you! Swiftleaf does have a pretty neat flow to it. I have to wonder how his bitterness over his life contrasts with the high regard that other shamans have for him.

Most of the shaman's barely register the bitterness and sarcasm at the point where the story begins, especially the full-named ones. Their conversations go somewhere along the lines of:

"What a lovely night for a Gathering! Wouldn't you agree, Swiftleaf?"
"About as lovely as Moonclan's abysmal leadership."
"I know! The spirits must be pleased with us for such clear weather!"

On another note; I was creating his fledgling, which I was dead set on looking like this chocolate tabby I once saw. But apparently, his marking/coloring is quite unusual. But if I do manage to find a better image of a cat like him (the one on the bottom), could you recommend a prefix?



Edit;; I was wondering if perhaps he was some strange purebred cat, but the cat above him is apparently his mother. I am so curious as to what his father looked like, but it was only the two of them together.